No - Say It Ain't So!
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Comment from lyenochka
I can't really say I have a preference in how you do the POV. I think it works fine the way you have it. It's best not to try to get into Trump's head as your focus is to bring back sanity to the world through this book.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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I can't really say I have a preference in how you do the POV. I think it works fine the way you have it. It's best not to try to get into Trump's head as your focus is to bring back sanity to the world through this book.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you.
That's exactly my thinking (in trump's mind).
Thank you for your input on the POV issue. 1st person was my preferred, but then it didn't work very well when Phil was back into his own body.
Thanks again.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I think what you are doing POV wise is working well. First person real
Trump would be a bunch of chaotic thoughts that mean practically nothing. His brain can't keep to the same thought longer than a few sentences, unless it is demanding to be praised.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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I think what you are doing POV wise is working well. First person real
Trump would be a bunch of chaotic thoughts that mean practically nothing. His brain can't keep to the same thought longer than a few sentences, unless it is demanding to be praised.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you The third person is also an effort toward self-preservation. There are crazies out there who own guns. This work is inflamatory enough the way I present it.
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. It must be SO disconcerting for the real Trump to be so helpless and misunderstood. You have cleverly portrayed what he would be thinking, saying and shouting out. The change of POV was fine. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Lol. It must be SO disconcerting for the real Trump to be so helpless and misunderstood. You have cleverly portrayed what he would be thinking, saying and shouting out. The change of POV was fine. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you. Anytime a writer goes against norms, there is trepidation.
Trump's evilness is at a level to be a severe illness. The people who guide and protect him are criminals.
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I posted a little poem about leadership. It was a much milder form of the one I initially wrote, but I wanted to turn it into what leadership should be like rather than just being shocked and appalled at his boorish behaviour.
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I just read the poem you mention. Just now, I don't possess the restraint required to tone anything down.
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed the humor in this part! The guard's internal monologue had me laughing - especially his frustration with the microwave instructions. I liked the way he talked to the monitors like the guy could hear him. The whole setup is so well done. All these political moves behind the scenes. The dialogue between Phil and Tom felt natural. This is such a unique and fun read!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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I really enjoyed the humor in this part! The guard's internal monologue had me laughing - especially his frustration with the microwave instructions. I liked the way he talked to the monitors like the guy could hear him. The whole setup is so well done. All these political moves behind the scenes. The dialogue between Phil and Tom felt natural. This is such a unique and fun read!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you.
So you were okay with the POV change?
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Yes, thought it was fine..
Comment from Karen Cherry
You are a marvel. My sinuses are drowning me. I am trying a new strain tomorrow. My sisters brought over some grub. I just ate broccoli cheese soup. So. good. I am making BBQ ribs in the crock pot. Karen
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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You are a marvel. My sinuses are drowning me. I am trying a new strain tomorrow. My sisters brought over some grub. I just ate broccoli cheese soup. So. good. I am making BBQ ribs in the crock pot. Karen
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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You made me laugh.
Thank you for your terrific review. And for showing me how to get 150 characters!
And thank you for the six stars!
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See, we learn, we grow. Karen
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See, we learn, we grow. Karen
Comment from jim vecchio
I am enjoying the various points of view within your continuing story. Reminds me of the time Fred Astaire and Harry Truman morphed into one another. Fred/Harry thought he was designing some new dance steps when he unwittingly hit the nuclear code and activated an atomic bomb.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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I am enjoying the various points of view within your continuing story. Reminds me of the time Fred Astaire and Harry Truman morphed into one another. Fred/Harry thought he was designing some new dance steps when he unwittingly hit the nuclear code and activated an atomic bomb.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Oh, no! Not the nucular bomb?
Thank you for your fun review.
So, the POV change was not overly rule-breaking?
