No - Say It Ain't So!
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is so amusing. You went with the first lady not paying any attention to him and making her own agenda. I'll bet she really does that when she has to be around him. He can make all kinds of mistakes and continue to be mistaken for Trump.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2025
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This is so amusing. You went with the first lady not paying any attention to him and making her own agenda. I'll bet she really does that when she has to be around him. He can make all kinds of mistakes and continue to be mistaken for Trump.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2025
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You nailed it! Making mistakes totally works for Phil.
Thank you for your great review.
Comment from lyenochka
I hope there will be a way to understand how and why the changes take place. The loss of memory will make it extra hard for Tom and Hakeem. Not knowing what intervals the switch happens puts everything and everyone in jeopardy. Hoping that Phil can make some permanent changes that the real Trump can't undo.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025
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I hope there will be a way to understand how and why the changes take place. The loss of memory will make it extra hard for Tom and Hakeem. Not knowing what intervals the switch happens puts everything and everyone in jeopardy. Hoping that Phil can make some permanent changes that the real Trump can't undo.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025
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Thank you for your very thoughtful review. Science hasn't caught up with us yet. I'm afraid there will be some tension coming. (smiley face here)
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. It is so funny that Phil can make himself more like Trump by covering any "mistakes" with typical Trump mumbo-jumbo nonsense. And no one cantell the difference. This is very creative, but I have to concentrate a lot because it is so different from our Australian system.
Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025
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Lol. It is so funny that Phil can make himself more like Trump by covering any "mistakes" with typical Trump mumbo-jumbo nonsense. And no one cantell the difference. This is very creative, but I have to concentrate a lot because it is so different from our Australian system.
Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025
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Thank you for your concentration. Many of us wish we had a system that was not as rife with internal conflict. Trump mumbo-jumbo is manageable to write when keeping it to trivial issues.
Comment from jim vecchio
Sorry but I'm out of sixes. Funny I should read this now as I just got off the phone with a call from my cousin in Boston (yes, I have one!) and she spent most of the time complaining about Trump. The combining of your chapters worked well again. Reminded me of the 750th time I watched "Casablanca" and morphed into the film. Not only did I not morph into Bogart, but I morphed into Herr Heinz of the Third Reich, just as he was eating caviar. I soon found out this was "Hollywood caviar", consisting of mashed cherry pits someone painted black.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Sorry but I'm out of sixes. Funny I should read this now as I just got off the phone with a call from my cousin in Boston (yes, I have one!) and she spent most of the time complaining about Trump. The combining of your chapters worked well again. Reminded me of the 750th time I watched "Casablanca" and morphed into the film. Not only did I not morph into Bogart, but I morphed into Herr Heinz of the Third Reich, just as he was eating caviar. I soon found out this was "Hollywood caviar", consisting of mashed cherry pits someone painted black.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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That will leave an impression (painted cherry pits).
Thank you for your 'virtual' six!
I appreciate the review as well as the thought.
Comment from Karen Cherry
I am giving you a six for the sheer ability to keep all the balls in the air. I mean sweetie pie this is a completely different caliber of writing from your Ben stories. Ben stories softly flow. The are good. But, this is magnificent.
Beyond good writing. This is mensa stuff. Karen
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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I am giving you a six for the sheer ability to keep all the balls in the air. I mean sweetie pie this is a completely different caliber of writing from your Ben stories. Ben stories softly flow. The are good. But, this is magnificent.
Beyond good writing. This is mensa stuff. Karen
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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What it is for me is therapy. While writing, I wanted to stay in my new world.
Thank you for your great review. And bless you for the stars!
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Just telling the truth mister. :-)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story pulled me in right away! The whole body swapping twist is fascinating! I love how you've shared trying to juggle politics while trapped in Trump's body. The little details - like the awkward interactions with Melania - really make this world feel alive. The humor is sharp! And such tension! I can't wait to see how this plays out! Keep it coming!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Your story pulled me in right away! The whole body swapping twist is fascinating! I love how you've shared trying to juggle politics while trapped in Trump's body. The little details - like the awkward interactions with Melania - really make this world feel alive. The humor is sharp! And such tension! I can't wait to see how this plays out! Keep it coming!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Shortly, in a few more chapters, I run into difficulty writing it in first person. I've already adulterated the matter by changing from Tom to Phil and back. Soon, the changing back and forth gets a bit ridiculous. That section, at least, needs to be in third person. And might signal that the entirety should be rewritten in third. What do you think?
Comment from Begin Again
Wow! I jumped into the middle of chaos (but then when isn't politics and the White House in a mess)? You are living dangerously but I assume this isn't the first time you walked that thin line and maybe stepped over a time or two. your humor is great. I can see the plot line can be and most certainly will be quite a ride.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Wow! I jumped into the middle of chaos (but then when isn't politics and the White House in a mess)? You are living dangerously but I assume this isn't the first time you walked that thin line and maybe stepped over a time or two. your humor is great. I can see the plot line can be and most certainly will be quite a ride.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Yes! Publishing this on Amazon Kindle would be a death wish. I don't think even changing the names would help. Mostly I wrote it for therapy.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
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Whatever helps! Have a great day!
