Hourglass
hourglass10 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed your story! You do a wonderful job of showing the feeling of being lost and trying to navigate through life's ups and downs. Your humor and honesty make it feel like I'm right there with you! I'm experiencing the confusion and joy at the same time. This is refreshing and real. Keep going, I can't wait to read more!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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I really enjoyed your story! You do a wonderful job of showing the feeling of being lost and trying to navigate through life's ups and downs. Your humor and honesty make it feel like I'm right there with you! I'm experiencing the confusion and joy at the same time. This is refreshing and real. Keep going, I can't wait to read more!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much for your continuous support.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is amazing. I thought I had reviewed thus before but I hadn't. There is much insight in your words and others will relate, as well. Your photo imagery and well written story was enjoyable and thought provoking. Good work!!
Your friend,
Alex. :)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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This is amazing. I thought I had reviewed thus before but I hadn't. There is much insight in your words and others will relate, as well. Your photo imagery and well written story was enjoyable and thought provoking. Good work!!
Your friend,
Alex. :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much, Alex:)
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You're welcome, Iza! :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Wow. Where do I begin? This soliloquy stands alone and leaves the reader as confused and the author seemingly is trying to be. I think I liked it but who knows. It's dizzying.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Wow. Where do I begin? This soliloquy stands alone and leaves the reader as confused and the author seemingly is trying to be. I think I liked it but who knows. It's dizzying.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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So sorry for the confusion, just go with your heart:)
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Hourglass, has a bit of a rambling quality as the changing situation of time and its management reveals that there is a direction to go, but not a perceived destination for which to head.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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This story, Hourglass, has a bit of a rambling quality as the changing situation of time and its management reveals that there is a direction to go, but not a perceived destination for which to head.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much, Bill.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a good flash story. It is well organized and flows nicely from beginning to end.
It sounds like you suffer from SAD, and just need some sunlight.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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This is a good flash story. It is well organized and flows nicely from beginning to end.
It sounds like you suffer from SAD, and just need some sunlight.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Hi Cecilia, thank you so much for your beautiful comment and the funny diagnose of "Sad."
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You're welcome. SAD is seasonal affective disorder where people in the winter don't get enough sun. Hope you are feeling better.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Interesting concept - trapped in an hourglass.
The mixed usage of bold type and quotation marks as a means of highlighting words and phrases is a bit jarring. Italics would work better and also avoid the whole 'quotes within punctuation' rule.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Interesting concept - trapped in an hourglass.
The mixed usage of bold type and quotation marks as a means of highlighting words and phrases is a bit jarring. Italics would work better and also avoid the whole 'quotes within punctuation' rule.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Wayne, for taking the time and reading my short story.
Comment from Abigail May
This was a great read. The prose and pacing did an incredible job replicating the narrators manic state of mind. I could feel myself within her, also pivoting from one emotion and focus to the next. Especially when she dipped into melancholy, that feeling was expressed masterfully. I would love to read more!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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This was a great read. The prose and pacing did an incredible job replicating the narrators manic state of mind. I could feel myself within her, also pivoting from one emotion and focus to the next. Especially when she dipped into melancholy, that feeling was expressed masterfully. I would love to read more!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Abigail, I love your encouraging comment.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Thank you for sharing this flash fiction and your fun recap of resolutions at the start of the year. I think you capture the mood of being lost well and with humour as you try to imagine how to inject some structure into your life while the mind flits from one idea to another. I've included some possible edits below. Well done and good luck! Debbie
How did they embrace everything with a smile and (decide) to be...
ho(l)y water and prayers
I love snow, no John on the ho(r)izon (I don't know what this means)
which could be (for) six months or more
I('d) better hibernate
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you for sharing this flash fiction and your fun recap of resolutions at the start of the year. I think you capture the mood of being lost well and with humour as you try to imagine how to inject some structure into your life while the mind flits from one idea to another. I've included some possible edits below. Well done and good luck! Debbie
How did they embrace everything with a smile and (decide) to be...
ho(l)y water and prayers
I love snow, no John on the ho(r)izon (I don't know what this means)
which could be (for) six months or more
I('d) better hibernate
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Hi Debbie thank you so much for your nice review and corrections, nd I was referring to John Snow from the Games of Thrones and his memorable "Winter is coming":)
Comment from royowen
I seem to remember a lot of people migrated from England to get away from the cold winters and settle in sunny Australia in the fifties and sixties, we were five of them, and the weather is much milder here, with snow never falling, but it can gat quite cold, at least where we live geographically, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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I seem to remember a lot of people migrated from England to get away from the cold winters and settle in sunny Australia in the fifties and sixties, we were five of them, and the weather is much milder here, with snow never falling, but it can gat quite cold, at least where we live geographically, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Mr.Owen:)
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Welcome
Comment from Gayla putnam
I liked the way you emphasized words in bold print. It added a punch to the story. Some clever words held my attention, such as dousing yourself in holly water and snow(no John in sight). Those little touches made me chuckle. I also liked the phrase "swimming in a white desert searching for a glimpse of hope." You summed up the year and the future the way I could identify with. gayla
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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I liked the way you emphasized words in bold print. It added a punch to the story. Some clever words held my attention, such as dousing yourself in holly water and snow(no John in sight). Those little touches made me chuckle. I also liked the phrase "swimming in a white desert searching for a glimpse of hope." You summed up the year and the future the way I could identify with. gayla
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Gayla, and I was referring to John Snow from the Games of Thrones and his memorable "Winter is coming":)
