A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from Sanku
I have heard about some sects in US who are very conservative .A woman not wearing pants is unusual these days .Tyler seems to be a very caring person. I AM.ANTICIPATING a lovely romance between the two..
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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I have heard about some sects in US who are very conservative .A woman not wearing pants is unusual these days .Tyler seems to be a very caring person. I AM.ANTICIPATING a lovely romance between the two..
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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Yes, Rebeka was raised very conservative. I do have some friends who follow these traditions. More will be coming out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
A good continuation of the story here.
After this point - Rebeka did. - the presentation changes and it looks like all the text is highlighted somewhat. It's a minor thing.
I'll be in the den, if you need anything." He left.- you could probably omit 'He left' from the end here.
"In my bottom dresser - at this point the presentation goes back to non-highlighted.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Hi Barbara,
A good continuation of the story here.
After this point - Rebeka did. - the presentation changes and it looks like all the text is highlighted somewhat. It's a minor thing.
I'll be in the den, if you need anything." He left.- you could probably omit 'He left' from the end here.
"In my bottom dresser - at this point the presentation goes back to non-highlighted.
All the best
G
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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I have no clue why it did this. I copied and pasted it all at once. I guess FanStory gremlins are at work. I have made the correction. Thank you for taking the time to read. I appreciate it.
Comment from Jacob1395
I've been waiting to find out why Rebekah was running and I thought you did a good job with the reveal. I'm already rooting for her and Tyler to get together and we're only a few chapters in. I can't wait to see how their story pans out. Another excellent chapter, Barbara, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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I've been waiting to find out why Rebekah was running and I thought you did a good job with the reveal. I'm already rooting for her and Tyler to get together and we're only a few chapters in. I can't wait to see how their story pans out. Another excellent chapter, Barbara, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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There will be a few twists that need to be navigated. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, so here I am following along with your new novel. So Rebeka is a known author. But, obviously, something has happened. I'm sure we will soon know what that is. Hugs, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Hi Barbara, so here I am following along with your new novel. So Rebeka is a known author. But, obviously, something has happened. I'm sure we will soon know what that is. Hugs, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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We will find out what's going on, but it will take time. She struggles with trust and a positive self-concept. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
I loved the first chapter and so glad I have found this. I was not notified, I don't think. Such a lovely read and I hope this is going where I think it is.
Some changing needed...From "Retinoscope" you copped some background on the test in white. AND
a couple (of)flannel shirts
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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I loved the first chapter and so glad I have found this. I was not notified, I don't think. Such a lovely read and I hope this is going where I think it is.
Some changing needed...From "Retinoscope" you copped some background on the test in white. AND
a couple (of)flannel shirts
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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I copied the entire post at the same time. I have no clue why it did what it did. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love it already, and I think the girl is a little bit naive about the pants:) I wear them all the time , is this making me less lady like:) Thank you for sharing and I cannot wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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I love it already, and I think the girl is a little bit naive about the pants:) I wear them all the time , is this making me less lady like:) Thank you for sharing and I cannot wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. The pants are a religious thing for her and more will come out.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I didn't spot any problems with the writing itself, and the font is a nice size. It is a little worrisome that she has never worn pants and fears her father's censure. Is she Menonite to explain this reaction. Our Menonite neighbor ladies do not wear pants ever, but they might be allowed to write sweet romances and go to college if they have very understanding parents. They do get to select their own mates.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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I didn't spot any problems with the writing itself, and the font is a nice size. It is a little worrisome that she has never worn pants and fears her father's censure. Is she Menonite to explain this reaction. Our Menonite neighbor ladies do not wear pants ever, but they might be allowed to write sweet romances and go to college if they have very understanding parents. They do get to select their own mates.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Rebeka doesn't have an understanding father.
Comment from lancellot
This is written well. I think you are providing your readers with a good introduction of your two main characters, a bit of her past and his personality. You've introduced him as caring, and kind, has a kind dog. We see she does have a sheltered and abusive man (father) in her past and has troubles for the doctor to help her fix (save from).
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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This is written well. I think you are providing your readers with a good introduction of your two main characters, a bit of her past and his personality. You've introduced him as caring, and kind, has a kind dog. We see she does have a sheltered and abusive man (father) in her past and has troubles for the doctor to help her fix (save from).
Comment Written 09-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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We'll learn more about her background as the story develops. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
You always have such likable characters. And I'm glad that Rebeka has a fan among Tyler's closest. That should make it easier for both Tyler and Rebeka for the current living situation!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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You always have such likable characters. And I'm glad that Rebeka has a fan among Tyler's closest. That should make it easier for both Tyler and Rebeka for the current living situation!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Aunt Beth is a gem.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Dr Tyler is certainly being very attentive to Rebekah while she's not being the most communicative. But it's quite clear from his face-time call to Elizabeth that Rebekah is an author of some note. Your story reads clearly and fluently without any errors noted. Thank you for sharing, Barbara. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Dr Tyler is certainly being very attentive to Rebekah while she's not being the most communicative. But it's quite clear from his face-time call to Elizabeth that Rebekah is an author of some note. Your story reads clearly and fluently without any errors noted. Thank you for sharing, Barbara. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 09-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
