The King's Ashes
What makes a great leader? Heroes die, but Legend is forever9 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Me again. I liked the first release I read I decided to invest more time on what passed previously. I guess this is good as well, but I don't get the genre chosen.
I thought by your name that you are French, which resonated with a piece I am about to release, and the story (It Happened Like This) takes place in Thibodaux, LaFourche County, not far from you. It too is short, but not as short as the first 2 pieces I read of yours.
Microfiction - I think I could write such copy.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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Me again. I liked the first release I read I decided to invest more time on what passed previously. I guess this is good as well, but I don't get the genre chosen.
I thought by your name that you are French, which resonated with a piece I am about to release, and the story (It Happened Like This) takes place in Thibodaux, LaFourche County, not far from you. It too is short, but not as short as the first 2 pieces I read of yours.
Microfiction - I think I could write such copy.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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Thank you.
Comment from Claire Tennant
That is brilliant. In seventy-five words, you created an image of substance: that time marches and no amount of betrayal or fear stops it. The strength of Emrik, the wickedness and devilish power of Jinn tantalised the imagination and spoke volumes of truth. I loved it. Well done
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025
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That is brilliant. In seventy-five words, you created an image of substance: that time marches and no amount of betrayal or fear stops it. The strength of Emrik, the wickedness and devilish power of Jinn tantalised the imagination and spoke volumes of truth. I loved it. Well done
Comment Written 05-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025
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Well-written review. I'm going to follow you now.
Thank you for your kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I'm a huge fan of microfiction and it's nice to see someone else who enjoys writing it and does so well at it. I wrote a book of 55 word novels. It is a humor book and was so much fun. Good job on this one and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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I'm a huge fan of microfiction and it's nice to see someone else who enjoys writing it and does so well at it. I wrote a book of 55 word novels. It is a humor book and was so much fun. Good job on this one and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thanks so much! I think I might do the same one day!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story has such a strong feeling. I love how you played with the idea of time and consequences. The way Emrik's final wish unfolds feels almost poetic. I really liked how the genie's chains are reforged. The twist at the end made me think about the choices we make. Such a powerful, thought
provoking read. I enjoyed it a lot! Keep writing like this.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2025
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Your story has such a strong feeling. I love how you played with the idea of time and consequences. The way Emrik's final wish unfolds feels almost poetic. I really liked how the genie's chains are reforged. The twist at the end made me think about the choices we make. Such a powerful, thought
provoking read. I enjoyed it a lot! Keep writing like this.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much! It's so good to hear how it resonates.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
So true. The enslaved nor the master wins under their conditions. This is a difficult format by which to express the significant message that you have expressed well. It us a powerful piece and that's because it's both relatable and thought provoking. You also use an intriguing image that supports this.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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So true. The enslaved nor the master wins under their conditions. This is a difficult format by which to express the significant message that you have expressed well. It us a powerful piece and that's because it's both relatable and thought provoking. You also use an intriguing image that supports this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much! <3
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You're welcome!
Comment from Jessica Borras
You've given us an entire story in so very few words, I'm super impressed. The only thing I was left wondering is, why is the genie shackled in the end? Is it because Emrik had wished him to be free, or because Emrik's wishes no longer count as having been used?
Either way, I loved it. "No wish stops the march of time." It confused me, at first, but once I read a little more, that one line had so much meaning.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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You've given us an entire story in so very few words, I'm super impressed. The only thing I was left wondering is, why is the genie shackled in the end? Is it because Emrik had wished him to be free, or because Emrik's wishes no longer count as having been used?
Either way, I loved it. "No wish stops the march of time." It confused me, at first, but once I read a little more, that one line had so much meaning.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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I wanted to work it in! But I couldn't, so I just called it his "price."
In my head, it was that after his final wish, the genie, who was evil, would be free. And Emrik would see all the things he made destroyed by such a powerful creature let free.
Comment from royowen
Yep, it's decidedly a difficult area, the short form Japanese haiku is similar, one has to create a surprise ending in just a few words, but all forms carry an element of bright conclusion. Well done, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Yep, it's decidedly a difficult area, the short form Japanese haiku is similar, one has to create a surprise ending in just a few words, but all forms carry an element of bright conclusion. Well done, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thank you Roy! Your reviews are always very appreciated <3
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This is such an expected take on the classical story, and sometimes you need to start from scratch:'"I wish to undo my wishes."
' Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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This is such an expected take on the classical story, and sometimes you need to start from scratch:'"I wish to undo my wishes."
' Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Great story with but those limited words! ;) Time is a prison for all ... whether binding or open air... our choice. Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Great story with but those limited words! ;) Time is a prison for all ... whether binding or open air... our choice. Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much! 💖
