A Walk In My Shoes
Be careful! What goes around, comes around.36 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed your story! The way you set up Kira's world kept me hooked. I love how you built her character with such a strong confidence - only to have that crumble in such a unexpected way. I could feel her panic at the end! I'm really curious to see what happens next in her journey! Hope you continue this. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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I really enjoyed your story! The way you set up Kira's world kept me hooked. I love how you built her character with such a strong confidence - only to have that crumble in such a unexpected way. I could feel her panic at the end! I'm really curious to see what happens next in her journey! Hope you continue this. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for this honor. I appreciate it.
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Thank you so much for this honor. I appreciate it.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very well written. Error-free as near as I could tell.
You have a great theme. You could continue it with a few chapters of the woes and wiles of homelessness from the perspective of sophistication followed by a sincere attempt to recover. She could repent of her callousness and work toward social reform. Then she could be hit by a person much like her former self and switched into that person's success. From there you could have her go either way.
Be sure to message me so I can follow it!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Very well written. Error-free as near as I could tell.
You have a great theme. You could continue it with a few chapters of the woes and wiles of homelessness from the perspective of sophistication followed by a sincere attempt to recover. She could repent of her callousness and work toward social reform. Then she could be hit by a person much like her former self and switched into that person's success. From there you could have her go either way.
Be sure to message me so I can follow it!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much. I appreciate this. It is an honor.
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is a great story and well worth reviving.
I love the concept and am a fan of the psychological horror/thriller vibe.
The woman got her just desserts and I hope whoever took her place (the homeless man she hit?) Is a better boss than she ever was.
Tim
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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This is a great story and well worth reviving.
I love the concept and am a fan of the psychological horror/thriller vibe.
The woman got her just desserts and I hope whoever took her place (the homeless man she hit?) Is a better boss than she ever was.
Tim
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your review and rating. Seems like whoever replaced her would be better.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, switched just to experiment the same pain and disgusting attitude. I think.the moral is don't do to other whst you don't like. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Wow, switched just to experiment the same pain and disgusting attitude. I think.the moral is don't do to other whst you don't like. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your review and the five star rating. Or you know, what goes around comes around is a good moral as well.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this seems like blind justice for this woman who had no regard for human life and ended up with the tables being turned on her. Some would say she got was she deserved here. A fast inching read, inventive and chilling, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Oh my goodness, this seems like blind justice for this woman who had no regard for human life and ended up with the tables being turned on her. Some would say she got was she deserved here. A fast inching read, inventive and chilling, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the great review, rating, and kind words. Yeah, Karma caught up to the girl.
Comment from meb42
This was very interesting and emotional. This is a good reading for our present working class. Job demands causing them to thinking of themselves and their demands. The fall and placing your self as the old man was very creative thinking.. Your descriptions of the characters clothing and the settings were grate. I enjoyed the reading.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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This was very interesting and emotional. This is a good reading for our present working class. Job demands causing them to thinking of themselves and their demands. The fall and placing your self as the old man was very creative thinking.. Your descriptions of the characters clothing and the settings were grate. I enjoyed the reading.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your great review and stars. This means a lot since I wasn't expecting anymore reviews on this.
Thanks again,
Sandollar
Comment from Jnetgame
Well, I'm glad you did make it to the contest, because this is a great entry. It held my interest from start to finish and was very well written. Good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Well, I'm glad you did make it to the contest, because this is a great entry. It held my interest from start to finish and was very well written. Good luck.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the wonderful review and stars. I'm happy you enjoyed this. It was a fun write. Thanks for the good wishes for the contest.
Sandollar
Comment from rama devi
This is quite a potent version of supernatural INSTANT KARMA effect. I think you pull it off well, and the story is well written and spag free.
Good solid flow with just the right balance of dialog to contrast the narrative. Good dialog too---true to life.
A strong entry for the contest.
Unique and thought provoking.
Warmly, r d
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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This is quite a potent version of supernatural INSTANT KARMA effect. I think you pull it off well, and the story is well written and spag free.
Good solid flow with just the right balance of dialog to contrast the narrative. Good dialog too---true to life.
A strong entry for the contest.
Unique and thought provoking.
Warmly, r d
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. This means a lot coming from you. I thought I'd try to go a different way with the challenge. i'm very happy to know you enjoyed this.
Thank you also for the good wishes for the contest,
Warmest regards,
Sandollar
Comment from warbler
I enjoyed reading your story. The images that you painted with your words are very compelling. I can image the entire story being played out before my eyes. Well done. I enjoyed the ending.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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I enjoyed reading your story. The images that you painted with your words are very compelling. I can image the entire story being played out before my eyes. Well done. I enjoyed the ending.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thanks for your great review and the stars. I'm very happy you enjoyed this. I thought I'd stretch out a little bit. Thanks for your support.
Sandollar
Comment from btruax
Well, I think it is safe to say that Kira got what she deserved. I know there was probably a word limit, but it would have been nice to carry it a little further. I am impressed with the dialogue. It was very believable. While you didn't have enough time to establish the other three characters, you turned Kira into a real, if not very pleasant, person.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Well, I think it is safe to say that Kira got what she deserved. I know there was probably a word limit, but it would have been nice to carry it a little further. I am impressed with the dialogue. It was very believable. While you didn't have enough time to establish the other three characters, you turned Kira into a real, if not very pleasant, person.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much for the great review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the read. There was word constraints but I felt if I fleshed out all the characters, I'd surely go over the limit.
I am thrilled you liked my villain.
Sandollar
