A Marriage Story
Give me Twenty26 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Excellent! A very touching and insightful look inside marriage - and how little it takes to reconnect if we give it even a little chance. You did a nice job of creating the couple's background story without bogging down this story. Well penned!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Excellent! A very touching and insightful look inside marriage - and how little it takes to reconnect if we give it even a little chance. You did a nice job of creating the couple's background story without bogging down this story. Well penned!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the This Sentence Starts the Story contest.
This piece is well written and clear. The story is excellent.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the This Sentence Starts the Story contest.
This piece is well written and clear. The story is excellent.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wish I had a six left. This contest entry is absolutely wonderful. I loved reading it. Thank you for sharing it with us. I think Jason had the key to solving many problems. Spend time together. Good luck with the contest.
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I wish I had a six left. This contest entry is absolutely wonderful. I loved reading it. Thank you for sharing it with us. I think Jason had the key to solving many problems. Spend time together. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
Comment from bob cullen
I think I like the advice Reverend Williams offers. This is well written, the author has crafted his characters and his scenes in a most believable fashion. I think this piece could so easily be developed further.
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I think I like the advice Reverend Williams offers. This is well written, the author has crafted his characters and his scenes in a most believable fashion. I think this piece could so easily be developed further.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
Comment from Dick Waters
A very interesting story. Even more so, my last wife's name was Mary. We had more than 20 minutes each day, but for not. Even her son called her toxic, and witnessed her cutting tone.
I believe things happen the way they are supposed to. I married her as a friend who needed support, being recently divorced. Thirty four years of love and some emptiness.
We divorced, but are still friends, but, I think, God rewarded me. I am now a happy man, having reconnected with someone I knew since the fourth grade. Married for 43 months today. See I told you, things work out the way they are supposed to, including finding and reading your story on this occasion!
Thanks for your story, which turned out differently from mine.
Your story will be a help to others, and a reminder for some.
Nice job!
Dick
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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A very interesting story. Even more so, my last wife's name was Mary. We had more than 20 minutes each day, but for not. Even her son called her toxic, and witnessed her cutting tone.
I believe things happen the way they are supposed to. I married her as a friend who needed support, being recently divorced. Thirty four years of love and some emptiness.
We divorced, but are still friends, but, I think, God rewarded me. I am now a happy man, having reconnected with someone I knew since the fourth grade. Married for 43 months today. See I told you, things work out the way they are supposed to, including finding and reading your story on this occasion!
Thanks for your story, which turned out differently from mine.
Your story will be a help to others, and a reminder for some.
Nice job!
Dick
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you. Glad things worked out for you.
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YOU have to BELIEVE!
She even supports my writing and does my editing.
My last wife said I could never write a novel. She was right - I wrote 6.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
EXCELLENT story for the contest and for that I wish you the best of luck to win;-)
Lovely characters and I loved the storyline and it's well written and uniquely creative;-)
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
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EXCELLENT story for the contest and for that I wish you the best of luck to win;-)
Lovely characters and I loved the storyline and it's well written and uniquely creative;-)
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
Comment from richie b
Lancellot,
Your story is outstanding. A very creative tale using,"give
me twenty." I am very impressed with your writing skills.
Your dialogue carried well as did the characters features.
You cleverly used Jason's intentions of twenty minutes and
set up the ending very well.
Best wishes in contest.
Peace,
Richie b
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Lancellot,
Your story is outstanding. A very creative tale using,"give
me twenty." I am very impressed with your writing skills.
Your dialogue carried well as did the characters features.
You cleverly used Jason's intentions of twenty minutes and
set up the ending very well.
Best wishes in contest.
Peace,
Richie b
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
Comment from Tpa
A superb story with an excellent them that led to all the elements of this romantic story. I enjoyed your beginning. It got me involve immediately and of course his twenty minutes, which paved the road back to a happy marriage. WISH YOU THE BEST.
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A superb story with an excellent them that led to all the elements of this romantic story. I enjoyed your beginning. It got me involve immediately and of course his twenty minutes, which paved the road back to a happy marriage. WISH YOU THE BEST.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Enjoyed your story. Marriage is definitely a time where twenty minutes a day is well spent with each other. Marriage is a sacred vow between two people not three. It does not usually survive if there are three people involved.
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Enjoyed your story. Marriage is definitely a time where twenty minutes a day is well spent with each other. Marriage is a sacred vow between two people not three. It does not usually survive if there are three people involved.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
Comment from Barbaraj1
This was a great story. You developed two good characters, Jason and Mary. The story is witty. I loved the ending with the reverend and twenty
minutes.
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This was a great story. You developed two good characters, Jason and Mary. The story is witty. I loved the ending with the reverend and twenty
minutes.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020