Static
A shocking poem46 total reviews
Comment from livelylinda
Tony: delightful rhyme with sharp sounds and words indicative of our current political nightmare. I've thought it might be time to find a cave deep in the woods and hunker down to the end of eternity which seems closer every day! Beautiful as usual. Linda
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Tony: delightful rhyme with sharp sounds and words indicative of our current political nightmare. I've thought it might be time to find a cave deep in the woods and hunker down to the end of eternity which seems closer every day! Beautiful as usual. Linda
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review this one, Linda - especially since it's no longer offering any funny money! I appreciate your accolade of a sixth star.
The nightmares only seem to be getting worse, both on the national and international stage. I'm lucky to have a refuge on our small farm by the sea. If I lived in America, I'd probably head for the hills!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is quite something. I have a thing about static in all its glory, so it's not surprising that I particularly like one of its results
A snapping synaptic, nerve endings on fire.
I can identify with that.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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This is quite something. I have a thing about static in all its glory, so it's not surprising that I particularly like one of its results
A snapping synaptic, nerve endings on fire.
I can identify with that.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Very many thanks for reviewing this one - especially since it's no longer offering funny money! Appreciated, and I'm glad you enjoyed and were able to identify with it. Best wishes, Tony
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I do not review for money. Only if I have energy and feel I have something useful to say :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Enjoyed this poem Tony as you head for the hills and leave all the politicians and the politics behind (if it was only that simple).Love this rather blustery read, you really use your words well in this descriptive poem, great read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Enjoyed this poem Tony as you head for the hills and leave all the politicians and the politics behind (if it was only that simple).Love this rather blustery read, you really use your words well in this descriptive poem, great read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thanks, Valda. Glad you enjoyed it. All the best, Tony
Comment from Spitfire
I found this a tad hard on my eyes and wonder if a gray background would work better.
crackle, snapping, grating, spiting (I love sharp onomatopoetic words)
Those political conventions do create static from the rubbing of egos. Half truths are the kindling.
My favorite line: I've fled from the city's great seats of power
It brings to mind some of the Romantic poets.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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I found this a tad hard on my eyes and wonder if a gray background would work better.
crackle, snapping, grating, spiting (I love sharp onomatopoetic words)
Those political conventions do create static from the rubbing of egos. Half truths are the kindling.
My favorite line: I've fled from the city's great seats of power
It brings to mind some of the Romantic poets.
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thanks for letting me know, Shari. I've adjusted both the font colour and the background to make it a bit easier on the eyes. I appreciate your award of a sixth star and your comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Mastery
Hi Tony. This has to be one of your best to date.
I marvel at your use of imagery and strong strong verbs throughout.
"The crackle of static, a snaking blue flame
That leaps from the doorknob, a brief spark of pain
Alive in the dryness that's taut as a wire,
A snapping synaptic, nerve endings on fire."
Great writing my friend. :) Bob
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Hi Tony. This has to be one of your best to date.
I marvel at your use of imagery and strong strong verbs throughout.
"The crackle of static, a snaking blue flame
That leaps from the doorknob, a brief spark of pain
Alive in the dryness that's taut as a wire,
A snapping synaptic, nerve endings on fire."
Great writing my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thanks, Bob. Glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your accolade. All the best, Tony
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: ) Bob
Comment from Alchera
Political half-speak, political spin
Obscuring with half-truth - election to win -
With animate spitting and pinpricks of fear,
Ecstatic electrics intended to scare.
Well said, Tony! Promises once were shagging hands. Today youth do not know the meaning either believe you if you tell them what our forefathers did on the word saying: I owe you! I could speak for hours on what you have written in your poem. There is a life of anticipated promises that they never been kept, of injuries, suffered but even more serious are the word given by our rulers and never kept to the poor families while they wallow in luxury and shame and gorge themselves at our expense. Great work my friend but our words will fly away like butterflies...Blessings. Tony
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Political half-speak, political spin
Obscuring with half-truth - election to win -
With animate spitting and pinpricks of fear,
Ecstatic electrics intended to scare.
Well said, Tony! Promises once were shagging hands. Today youth do not know the meaning either believe you if you tell them what our forefathers did on the word saying: I owe you! I could speak for hours on what you have written in your poem. There is a life of anticipated promises that they never been kept, of injuries, suffered but even more serious are the word given by our rulers and never kept to the poor families while they wallow in luxury and shame and gorge themselves at our expense. Great work my friend but our words will fly away like butterflies...Blessings. Tony
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thanks for your review, Alchera. Many of our leaders leave much to be desired. Integrity is hard to find. Best wishes, Tony
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You are Always welcomed. Take care, Tony!
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Some flee because of hot weather, others the cold. I think a greater reason to flee is the politics! A witty response to the "frenzy" with great rhyme and meter. Can't find any cons.
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Some flee because of hot weather, others the cold. I think a greater reason to flee is the politics! A witty response to the "frenzy" with great rhyme and meter. Can't find any cons.
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thanks for your review, Margaret. Glad you enjoyed my frenzied verses. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Susan Larson
Excellent! Your use of metaphors is electrifying and really sparks the reader's imagination! I was so entranced by your words and couldn't believe how your verse kept getting better and better!
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Excellent! Your use of metaphors is electrifying and really sparks the reader's imagination! I was so entranced by your words and couldn't believe how your verse kept getting better and better!
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thanks for your review, Susan, and for the six stars. Glad you enjoyed the metaphors. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
A fabulous first stanza and a wonderful closing stanza.
The middle stanzas lost a bit of the initial spark,
but then the political environment tends to sap life
out of most everything,so the stanzas reflect the reality.
Six stars for that crackling good beginning and the hidden lair.
Robert
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Hello Tony,
A fabulous first stanza and a wonderful closing stanza.
The middle stanzas lost a bit of the initial spark,
but then the political environment tends to sap life
out of most everything,so the stanzas reflect the reality.
Six stars for that crackling good beginning and the hidden lair.
Robert
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thanks for your review, Robert, and for the six stars. The first verse was from personal experience. Perhaps I should have left it there! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bichon
This was a thought provoking poem! Definitely had a shocking element to it, no doubt about that. The social commentary was well expressed, as were the modern ideas. Great work!
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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This was a thought provoking poem! Definitely had a shocking element to it, no doubt about that. The social commentary was well expressed, as were the modern ideas. Great work!
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thanks for your review, Bichon. Glad you enjoyed my poem and found some substance in it. Best wishes, Tony
