The Claw
100 words: Chased by a sadistic, evil entity.22 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the inspiration for this true story about how we do grow-up in your notes. Your descriptions are gripping and intensified by the artwork. I am glad your post was well received in the contest- Joan
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Thank you for sharing the inspiration for this true story about how we do grow-up in your notes. Your descriptions are gripping and intensified by the artwork. I am glad your post was well received in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 08-Jun-2020
Comment from JudyE
What a great story. It would be very spooky for a small child being chased like that. Ii you had a vivid imagination it would be the stuff of nightmares.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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What a great story. It would be very spooky for a small child being chased like that. Ii you had a vivid imagination it would be the stuff of nightmares.
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. I always found this 'game' deliciously scary.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It's amazing when you are a child how fantasizing is so real and when playing those games we truly felt the emotion of fear when there was really nothing to fear. We just knew how to get into the mood. Great story
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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It's amazing when you are a child how fantasizing is so real and when playing those games we truly felt the emotion of fear when there was really nothing to fear. We just knew how to get into the mood. Great story
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Childish imagination is very powerful. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written true story flash about the games brothers and sisters play will always be in our mind and we always remember it with bittersweet memories about the good and the bad.
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A very well-written true story flash about the games brothers and sisters play will always be in our mind and we always remember it with bittersweet memories about the good and the bad.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
Comment from Michele Harber
Great story, and the first time I ever heard you use your real name on FanStory. You really built up the suspense, and gave me goosebumps with your detailed descriptions of your rising fear. Having not read in advance that this was a "True Story" contest entry, I was convinced I was reading a real horror story, and you had me in your grasp (pun definitely intended). Good luck in the contest.
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Great story, and the first time I ever heard you use your real name on FanStory. You really built up the suspense, and gave me goosebumps with your detailed descriptions of your rising fear. Having not read in advance that this was a "True Story" contest entry, I was convinced I was reading a real horror story, and you had me in your grasp (pun definitely intended). Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a funny twist on telling a true story. The intensity of the horrific chase is exciting as we soon realize that the danger is more imaginative that malicious. Fun stuff.
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This is a funny twist on telling a true story. The intensity of the horrific chase is exciting as we soon realize that the danger is more imaginative that malicious. Fun stuff.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
Comment from Rmocruz
A well written entertaining 100 word non-fiction.
The visual art indicates quite an imagination!
I enjoyed reading this brief, promising contest entry.
Best wishes!
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A well written entertaining 100 word non-fiction.
The visual art indicates quite an imagination!
I enjoyed reading this brief, promising contest entry.
Best wishes!
Comment Written 13-May-2020
Comment from Louise Michelle
Well, the ending sure took me by surprise. Enjoyed reading your notes. I grew up with only one sister, so I never experienced that kind of rough brotherly play. I'm sure your mother had her hands full. Hugs, Lou
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Well, the ending sure took me by surprise. Enjoyed reading your notes. I grew up with only one sister, so I never experienced that kind of rough brotherly play. I'm sure your mother had her hands full. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 13-May-2020
Comment from Drew Delaney
That is so funny! We had the same, but my brother did not think of that, however, he is four years younger than me. Had he been older, I am sure he would have dip one something like that. LOL
Good entry!
Drew xx
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That is so funny! We had the same, but my brother did not think of that, however, he is four years younger than me. Had he been older, I am sure he would have dip one something like that. LOL
Good entry!
Drew xx
Comment Written 13-May-2020
Comment from Pantygynt
The ending was brilliant but I felt the note took the edge off it. A sudden shock can have that effect and not only on children. Imaginative play is so good for kids and soap powder sales too it would appear.
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The ending was brilliant but I felt the note took the edge off it. A sudden shock can have that effect and not only on children. Imaginative play is so good for kids and soap powder sales too it would appear.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
