Happy Childhood
My childhood years.7 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a happy childhood that will stay within our minds no matter how old we will get. Our children had another kind of childhood with more electronic things.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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A very well-written poem about a happy childhood that will stay within our minds no matter how old we will get. Our children had another kind of childhood with more electronic things.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The subjects covered in this poem are great, and the rhyms are perfect. I have knocked a star off because I think it would be significantly improved if the two lines within each couplet had the same number of syllables. Then it would flow much more smoothly, I feel
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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The subjects covered in this poem are great, and the rhyms are perfect. I have knocked a star off because I think it would be significantly improved if the two lines within each couplet had the same number of syllables. Then it would flow much more smoothly, I feel
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You painted a picture of a happy and contented childhood here and I loved your closing two lines that summed up the happiness when you look back, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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You painted a picture of a happy and contented childhood here and I loved your closing two lines that summed up the happiness when you look back, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Susan Larson
I'm not sure whether this is a rhyming poem or not. I know there is such a thing as poetic license, but I really have to stretch it to make your verses rhyme. You have a lot of nice memories and I'm glad to know they are still with you.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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I'm not sure whether this is a rhyming poem or not. I know there is such a thing as poetic license, but I really have to stretch it to make your verses rhyme. You have a lot of nice memories and I'm glad to know they are still with you.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thanks!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh another astronomy buff there!! ;) :) A great collection of couplets that each lend a bit of a highlight to a delightful childhood -- thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :) ;)
coming passing my --> coming passed my
with transformers --> with Transformers
by play too --> but played too [??? not sure, but needs a fix..???]
[suggestion below]
I miss my childhood
when I saw Red Riding Hood.
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And I saw Red Riding Hood...
I miss my childhood
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Oh another astronomy buff there!! ;) :) A great collection of couplets that each lend a bit of a highlight to a delightful childhood -- thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :) ;)
coming passing my --> coming passed my
with transformers --> with Transformers
by play too --> but played too [??? not sure, but needs a fix..???]
[suggestion below]
I miss my childhood
when I saw Red Riding Hood.
-->
And I saw Red Riding Hood...
I miss my childhood
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! I have fixed the mistakes. You can check it out again! Thanks! :)
Comment from Darlene Franklin
What lovely details in this poem. I don't quite understand "by play too much I felt tired" and missing childhood when you saw Red Riding Hood, -but it all had a delightful feeling of childhood.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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What lovely details in this poem. I don't quite understand "by play too much I felt tired" and missing childhood when you saw Red Riding Hood, -but it all had a delightful feeling of childhood.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thanks! I have fixed the mistakes. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
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Glad I could help. You're welcome.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-The rhyme and imagery
are good as you describe
aspects of your childhood.
-I am glad to hear it was
a happy one.
-You enjoyed many things,
like Star Wars, transformers,
and playing hide and seek,
as well as Haley's Comet.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-The rhyme and imagery
are good as you describe
aspects of your childhood.
-I am glad to hear it was
a happy one.
-You enjoyed many things,
like Star Wars, transformers,
and playing hide and seek,
as well as Haley's Comet.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thanks! I have made a mistake with that line, but I fixed it. You can read it again. Thanks for the encouragement! :)
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You are very welcome. I changed your review to show the change; it is much better.
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Thanks!
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You are welcome.