Does Anyone Care?
A desperate attempt to be saved18 total reviews
Comment from john mallahan
Thank you! Am filled with images of "It's A Wonderful Life" as read your story. Think we all grapple with decisions. Puttin one foot in front of the other, becomes the mantra...
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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Thank you! Am filled with images of "It's A Wonderful Life" as read your story. Think we all grapple with decisions. Puttin one foot in front of the other, becomes the mantra...
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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Thank you for the read and the comment.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a poem of pure loneliness and despair. I person committing suicide unless someone stops him. I would guess a person planning
this would go to an abandoned bridge anyway where no one could stop
him/her.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Have a nice day and keep writing
~Joan
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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This is a poem of pure loneliness and despair. I person committing suicide unless someone stops him. I would guess a person planning
this would go to an abandoned bridge anyway where no one could stop
him/her.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Have a nice day and keep writing
~Joan
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thanks much for your review and comments. Very appreciated.
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You are most kindly welcome.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
Such a sad ending because the amount of suicides off of Golden Gate Bridge is really astounding. Great story in the brief words and a call to the reader to care about people around them. Congratulations on the second place win, Harry!
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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Such a sad ending because the amount of suicides off of Golden Gate Bridge is really astounding. Great story in the brief words and a call to the reader to care about people around them. Congratulations on the second place win, Harry!
Comment Written 26-May-2019
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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Thanks much for your read and your encouraging words.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You place readers right there on the bridge, Harry. Great job with the prompt. Congratulations placing in the contest. I enjoyed reading this although it was poignant. thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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You place readers right there on the bridge, Harry. Great job with the prompt. Congratulations placing in the contest. I enjoyed reading this although it was poignant. thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 26-May-2019
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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Thank you for your read and comments, always appreciated.
Comment from Rikki66
When you decide to take that final leap it is too late to look for some one to care. the only person that might show up is a policeman to arrest you for breaking several laws. You can only find someone to care if you mingle with caring people.
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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When you decide to take that final leap it is too late to look for some one to care. the only person that might show up is a policeman to arrest you for breaking several laws. You can only find someone to care if you mingle with caring people.
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Excellent point. Thanks for the read and the comment.
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Welcome
Rikki
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad post about someone so desperate that they wanted to die, but if just one person cared they would not do it. A terrifying flash fiction, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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This is a sad post about someone so desperate that they wanted to die, but if just one person cared they would not do it. A terrifying flash fiction, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thanks for the read and the comment.
Comment from LisaMay
A thought-provoking item, very well written. The dying sun may have been sinking, but it will rise again for a new dawn, just as a life can be renewed with hope, a fresh start, meeting new people who DO care, or even finding a new sense of purpose within... as perhaps the narrator on the bridge felt, when instinctively he realises to grasp the saving rail of the living when the wind blew.
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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A thought-provoking item, very well written. The dying sun may have been sinking, but it will rise again for a new dawn, just as a life can be renewed with hope, a fresh start, meeting new people who DO care, or even finding a new sense of purpose within... as perhaps the narrator on the bridge felt, when instinctively he realises to grasp the saving rail of the living when the wind blew.
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thanks for the read and the thoughtful comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from MissMerri
Wow! This is so sad but definitely something we should all keep in mind. If someone had shown the speaker some caring and love in the preceding weeks, no doubt he would not even have been there on that bridge. It costs so little to reach out to others, and the reward can be so huge. Thank you for this great reminder. It is an excellently told story and so meaningful as well.
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Wow! This is so sad but definitely something we should all keep in mind. If someone had shown the speaker some caring and love in the preceding weeks, no doubt he would not even have been there on that bridge. It costs so little to reach out to others, and the reward can be so huge. Thank you for this great reminder. It is an excellently told story and so meaningful as well.
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thanks for the read and the thoughtful comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Jan Anderegg
Wow. This is a powerful flash fiction and I completely agree that its a winner. I didn't see this to review before the contest ended, but wow. Very well done. Sad too.
All the very best and congratulations!
Well deserved.
Jan
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Wow. This is a powerful flash fiction and I completely agree that its a winner. I didn't see this to review before the contest ended, but wow. Very well done. Sad too.
All the very best and congratulations!
Well deserved.
Jan
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thanks much for your read and your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from LaRosa
'Does anyone care?' if he dies? if he chooses to live? He would just like to know.
The pact with himself left an opening to change his mind. The fact that the near fatal moment came and went brought him to his senses enough to react subconsciously, automatically, and save himself. He still cares.
This is powerfully impactful and a great flash fiction concept, Harry.
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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'Does anyone care?' if he dies? if he chooses to live? He would just like to know.
The pact with himself left an opening to change his mind. The fact that the near fatal moment came and went brought him to his senses enough to react subconsciously, automatically, and save himself. He still cares.
This is powerfully impactful and a great flash fiction concept, Harry.
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Again, thank you for your read and your comments. You got it completely.
