A Fly on the Wall
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "On...Perceptions"A journal musings and assessments about situations
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Comment from njcoleman
LOL!!! I was laughing from the start...the Annie Hall "sex" comments. Sounds like my wife and me. I gotta side with the guy's perception here tho!!!
You're so right. Perceptions are amazingly different.
I'll say "hey, that guy's the spitting image of (pick anyone) the guy from that show...what's the name of that show we're watching?"
Her: "doesn't look a thing like him."
Great thread....please post more! Neil
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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LOL!!! I was laughing from the start...the Annie Hall "sex" comments. Sounds like my wife and me. I gotta side with the guy's perception here tho!!!
You're so right. Perceptions are amazingly different.
I'll say "hey, that guy's the spitting image of (pick anyone) the guy from that show...what's the name of that show we're watching?"
Her: "doesn't look a thing like him."
Great thread....please post more! Neil
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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OMG!! I do that ALLLLLLL THE TIME!!! And Bobby gives me the side-eye and says, "Mmmhmm" while his thought bubble reads, "There is seriously something wrong with you."
Let's compare notes on who we think look like other people!! I'm going to send you a PM right now. xoxox
Comment from EeanBlack
That's funny. I expected the fifteen-year-old to hate it the most. I hate camping with a passion unless there is a cabin and boat. So you have been a very good writer for a very long time. This is very good work.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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That's funny. I expected the fifteen-year-old to hate it the most. I hate camping with a passion unless there is a cabin and boat. So you have been a very good writer for a very long time. This is very good work.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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You and I understand each other...well, sort of. Cabin, Eean??? Boat?! To me, if you go to the Ritz, and they neglect to put a mint on your pillow, you're camping.
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I had to stay in a cheap motel in Chicago because a storm grounded all the airlines. It was ten miles from Chicago O'Hare. The only star this place knew shown from the bar across the street. I was not happy.
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Any bed bugs?
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No. I had that happen in Elmira New York though. I flew in on my way to look at a lease near Troy Pennsylvania. On my way back I got snowed in in Elmira. It was a Holiday Inn. Bed bugs. I hit the counter so hard with my fist. But I got a better room. I think it was the bridal suite because the bathtub was large enough for three. I hate last-minute reservations.
Comment from Wy Jung
Yes! This is priceless Rachelle. I loved hearing the little girl's version and all the details she adores about the trip. Her enthusiasm is infectious and you deliver it perfectly here. This piece pointing out the difference between the two takes provides a wonderful life lesson, doesn't it? Of course now I feel like I need to see Vantage Point. Well done my friend. ~wy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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Yes! This is priceless Rachelle. I loved hearing the little girl's version and all the details she adores about the trip. Her enthusiasm is infectious and you deliver it perfectly here. This piece pointing out the difference between the two takes provides a wonderful life lesson, doesn't it? Of course now I feel like I need to see Vantage Point. Well done my friend. ~wy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2025
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It was a GREAT flick! Not to be missed! Thanks for all these kind words. I couldn't appreciate them more. xxoxo
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Yay! It's been fun catching up after being gone. Some great talent here. Your stories are fun to read and genuinely reflect a wonderful Point of View.
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SEE WHY I MISSED YOU???!!!! xoxoxo
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xoxo
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I've been missing your writing somehow. I often do not review poetry (I don't really know how to review it, I guess.) But I enjoyed this. I had to chuckle though. My family has camped my whole life, all the way from on the ground without a tent to in air conditioned RVs. But I would never call staying in a cabin camping.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I've been missing your writing somehow. I often do not review poetry (I don't really know how to review it, I guess.) But I enjoyed this. I had to chuckle though. My family has camped my whole life, all the way from on the ground without a tent to in air conditioned RVs. But I would never call staying in a cabin camping.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Oh, Wayne, how very different you and I are!! For me, if you go to the Ritz Carlton, and they neglect to put a mint on your pillow after they've turned your bed down? You're camping.
Thanks for the nice review.
I don't think you've been missing my posts; I just haven't been too active. After the boogie board issue, I haven't exactly been feeling inspired to contribute. I'm more into reading and reviewing these days. xo
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Any idea how she's faring this year?
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Two, I believe.
Comment from GregoryCody
You have a Great story telling voice. Each character stands out but what makes it strong, imo, is the dialogue. Sounds real, adds depth. I also like the WAY you write, the choices of words. Poetic prose in a way.
I've done ten loads of laundry since Sunday, and I'm still not anywhere near done
The alliteration of S and D. Sounds good, hits the ear right ;)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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You have a Great story telling voice. Each character stands out but what makes it strong, imo, is the dialogue. Sounds real, adds depth. I also like the WAY you write, the choices of words. Poetic prose in a way.
I've done ten loads of laundry since Sunday, and I'm still not anywhere near done
The alliteration of S and D. Sounds good, hits the ear right ;)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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That evokes such a fun memory for me! Thanks for the terrific review.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a great topic to address. You invite the reader to reflect on their experiences of sharing different perspectives than someone else. What's really interesting when two are relating what happened. The other shakes their head and says 'were we both at the same gathering?" It's especially obvious how one's perception can be colored with siblings reporting childhood or parents reminisces. It makes me think the very old educational short movie call Eye of the Beholder. It is clearly vintage but worth citing:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XYydIDlU2pc
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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This is a great topic to address. You invite the reader to reflect on their experiences of sharing different perspectives than someone else. What's really interesting when two are relating what happened. The other shakes their head and says 'were we both at the same gathering?" It's especially obvious how one's perception can be colored with siblings reporting childhood or parents reminisces. It makes me think the very old educational short movie call Eye of the Beholder. It is clearly vintage but worth citing:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XYydIDlU2pc
Comment Written 26-May-2019
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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I'll have to check that out, Liz! Thanks for the reference. I'll be on vacation starting June 1, so I'm looking for new ways to entertain myself!
Thanks for the terrific review. xo
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Enjoy your vacation and be safe
Comment from Alex Rosel
I enjoyed reading this. Thank you.
It's why a policeman, fresh on a scene, says to witnesses, "Tell me what you saw," rather than, "What happened?" -- This is an astute observation. Thank you for highlighting this :)
"It was a reeeeally nice day out... -- spag? Either stick with quotation punctuation throughout, or omit it altogether.
You've capture your two character's voices. Excellently done. :)
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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I enjoyed reading this. Thank you.
It's why a policeman, fresh on a scene, says to witnesses, "Tell me what you saw," rather than, "What happened?" -- This is an astute observation. Thank you for highlighting this :)
"It was a reeeeally nice day out... -- spag? Either stick with quotation punctuation throughout, or omit it altogether.
You've capture your two character's voices. Excellently done. :)
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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No; that's how this teenager talks. No spag. (except maybe to the adult ears...)
Thanks for your feedback, Alex. xo
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No, you misunderstood. The spag is the quotation punctuation.
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Oh, alright; thank you.
Comment from Tpa
This story is humorous. I enjoyed every single aspect of the text. I left this particular writing feeling like I would tell someone about it. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and the words were chosen. Every single grammar issue has been resolved and there are no spelling mistakes. I would highly recommend this item to a friend.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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This story is humorous. I enjoyed every single aspect of the text. I left this particular writing feeling like I would tell someone about it. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and the words were chosen. Every single grammar issue has been resolved and there are no spelling mistakes. I would highly recommend this item to a friend.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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What a really encouraging review this is, Tpa; I couldn't appreciate it more! Thank you. xo
Comment from rama devi
What an enlightening share. I love how you delivered the two perspectives with polar opposite POVS, and the the characterization is outstanding! Good examples in the prelude part. This is very well penned, with great pacing, well constructed sentences and no spags.
How wonderful to read your profile, dear. Teaching dance...what a calling! And now music! I am a musician too, and I still remember my piano teacher (from 8 to 14 years old) fondly. We're friends on Facebook even. A music teacher is a great mentor role too. Bless you with your work!
And your keen sense of music is also evident in your verbal flow...well paced. Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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What an enlightening share. I love how you delivered the two perspectives with polar opposite POVS, and the the characterization is outstanding! Good examples in the prelude part. This is very well penned, with great pacing, well constructed sentences and no spags.
How wonderful to read your profile, dear. Teaching dance...what a calling! And now music! I am a musician too, and I still remember my piano teacher (from 8 to 14 years old) fondly. We're friends on Facebook even. A music teacher is a great mentor role too. Bless you with your work!
And your keen sense of music is also evident in your verbal flow...well paced. Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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And your review is music to my ears as I read it silently, Rama. Thank you. Coming from you, my FS mentor, this is a compliment second to none. You have made my whole day with these words today. Thank you. xo
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Yipeeeeeeee!!!!!!! Hugs!
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job, Rachelle, on an funny (to me) story of a camping trip. I went on one that the temps dropped down low like that and it was not fun. No sleep whatsoever. It was fun to read the two stories in comparison. Well done on great descriptive phrases and logical flow to the story.
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Great job, Rachelle, on an funny (to me) story of a camping trip. I went on one that the temps dropped down low like that and it was not fun. No sleep whatsoever. It was fun to read the two stories in comparison. Well done on great descriptive phrases and logical flow to the story.
Melissa
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Melissa. You're always so helpful when you give me these kinds of specifics, and I appreciate it very much. I also liked reading about your own camping experience. This was a terrific review. xo
