Serenity Reigns
Four Line Poem 1-5-5-910 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written four line poem. A peaceful place can influence us to find our inner peace. We have the power to keep hateful thoughts out of our minds and keep our inner peace.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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A very well-written four line poem. A peaceful place can influence us to find our inner peace. We have the power to keep hateful thoughts out of our minds and keep our inner peace.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Yes, it is entirely up to us whether we allow outer chaos to invade our inner stability - and peace. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Good use of the form to compare Peace to a place where negative emotions like "hate" cannot enter. And then "serenity" is personified as the king of that place.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Good use of the form to compare Peace to a place where negative emotions like "hate" cannot enter. And then "serenity" is personified as the king of that place.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you for you insights!
Comment from Irish Rain
Beautifully true. Where there is love, you'll find peace and serenity. Hate can not live in the same locale, wrong vibration. Wonderful entry! Blessings...
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Beautifully true. Where there is love, you'll find peace and serenity. Hate can not live in the same locale, wrong vibration. Wonderful entry! Blessings...
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and insightful comments!
Comment from bmethner
Such truth in this poem. You held beautifully to the syllable requirements of the poem and it flowed so well. The message is so soothing to the reader. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Such truth in this poem. You held beautifully to the syllable requirements of the poem and it flowed so well. The message is so soothing to the reader. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for your positive feedback!
Comment from tfawcus
Very nicely phrased and so true. When we surround ourselves with the armour of serenity, it is hard for hate to break through the defences to wound us.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Very nicely phrased and so true. When we surround ourselves with the armour of serenity, it is hard for hate to break through the defences to wound us.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Appreciate your insightful comments, as usual.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful four line poem you have penned for the contest. I love the wording you chose and the beautiful picture you chose. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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This is a very beautiful four line poem you have penned for the contest. I love the wording you chose and the beautiful picture you chose. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi June; thank you for sharing your four line poem for the contest. Within these few lines, you have given us a key to serenity. Well done,
A nit: 'hate canot (cannot) enter'
~patty~
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Hi June; thank you for sharing your four line poem for the contest. Within these few lines, you have given us a key to serenity. Well done,
A nit: 'hate canot (cannot) enter'
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thanks for pointing out the typo! Cones from constantly revising...
Comment from patcelaw
June, The message of this short poem is powerfully written and makes one take time to ponder the words. I appreciate the message. Blessings for a good day. Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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June, The message of this short poem is powerfully written and makes one take time to ponder the words. I appreciate the message. Blessings for a good day. Patricia
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you Pat!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this well thought out piece. Good continuation of thought throughout. All syllables present and correct.
hate canot enter - cannot.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Hi there,
I liked this well thought out piece. Good continuation of thought throughout. All syllables present and correct.
hate canot enter - cannot.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thanks! Sorry about the typo...trifocals don't help!
Comment from DR DIP
cannot
Nice words June
Peace
exists in places
hate cannot enter
Serenity reigns within your soul
Peace exists in places hate cannot enter..what a great line. This is really good thanks for sharing.
dip
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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cannot
Nice words June
Peace
exists in places
hate cannot enter
Serenity reigns within your soul
Peace exists in places hate cannot enter..what a great line. This is really good thanks for sharing.
dip
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thank you Dip!
