Forget Me Not
A Crown of Heroic Sonnets for the contest55 total reviews
Comment from Drew Delaney
I just want to congratulate you on this win. You certainly are deserving. I am blown away as I read your poetry. Such a gift you have. Nice writing.
Drew
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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I just want to congratulate you on this win. You certainly are deserving. I am blown away as I read your poetry. Such a gift you have. Nice writing.
Drew
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Thanks very much, Drew. I appreciate this a great deal. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from mountainwriter49
Tony,
First of all, congratulations on winning the contest! Writing one of these Crowns is no easy task, and I admire everything about this one. Spot-on meter, rhyme and rhyme pattern and the development of an excellent story. Importantly, the repeating lines do not feel forced.
I also liked the closing couplets in 1, 2 and 7 because they cast a definite philosophical summation, thought for the reader to ponder. For me, these three best capture the intent of the sonnet couplet.
Beautifully penned, my friend. I love how your command of the language celebrates poetry in such fine form. What a wonderful talent you have, and I am so glad to have read this Crown today.
-Ray
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Tony,
First of all, congratulations on winning the contest! Writing one of these Crowns is no easy task, and I admire everything about this one. Spot-on meter, rhyme and rhyme pattern and the development of an excellent story. Importantly, the repeating lines do not feel forced.
I also liked the closing couplets in 1, 2 and 7 because they cast a definite philosophical summation, thought for the reader to ponder. For me, these three best capture the intent of the sonnet couplet.
Beautifully penned, my friend. I love how your command of the language celebrates poetry in such fine form. What a wonderful talent you have, and I am so glad to have read this Crown today.
-Ray
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for this review, Ray. I appreciate the time you have taken to respond in detail and your affirming comments - also the six stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Hayley Solomon
Outstanding, Tony! Such a lot of thought and work.I like that it has deep philosophy and a good attitude to life and the eventual inevitability of dying.
Not unexpectedly, it is well executed and excellent iambic pentameter as per form.
Best,
Hayley:)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Outstanding, Tony! Such a lot of thought and work.I like that it has deep philosophy and a good attitude to life and the eventual inevitability of dying.
Not unexpectedly, it is well executed and excellent iambic pentameter as per form.
Best,
Hayley:)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Many thanks, Hayley. Very kind of you to say so. I appreciate the sixth star! Tony
Comment from pipersfancy
This is a joy to read, Tony. I am softly rocked into reverie by the current of your exquisitely chosen words--your care and attention to detail is apparent in this fine work. There is nothing at all I would suggest as a change to this piece. It is complete and perfect as is.
Good luck in the contest!
pf
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This is a joy to read, Tony. I am softly rocked into reverie by the current of your exquisitely chosen words--your care and attention to detail is apparent in this fine work. There is nothing at all I would suggest as a change to this piece. It is complete and perfect as is.
Good luck in the contest!
pf
Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing my Crown, Christina, and awarding it six shining stars! I very much appreciate your kind words about it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Aussie
Congrats on All Time Best! Loved your Sonnet, so much happens that we watch in Oz. Reminds me of the Sower and the Seed from the Bible. "With dovetailed love, ingrained, to give new life." Great line. Also " a yawing void where night's celestial pole reflects the crux of life, a Candlemas." Your writing is beautiful and written by a real poet. Excellent! ****** six virtual stars.
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Congrats on All Time Best! Loved your Sonnet, so much happens that we watch in Oz. Reminds me of the Sower and the Seed from the Bible. "With dovetailed love, ingrained, to give new life." Great line. Also " a yawing void where night's celestial pole reflects the crux of life, a Candlemas." Your writing is beautiful and written by a real poet. Excellent! ****** six virtual stars.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Kay, and thanks very much for the virtual six! Tony
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Hi Tony, I'm back on fanstory. Been in hospital for the last week. Love, Kay XX
Comment from June Sargent
I wasn't sure if this crown of heroic sonnets would maintain my interest first thing in the morning as I sip my tea. And I was pleasantly surprised at how it flowed from one sonnet to the next with such ease and flow! And it not only maintained my interest to the end - but I thoroughly enjoyed the images painted with words so well chosen to evoke a mood of both hope and sadness. Despite the determination to thrive and survive, in the end, we like the little flower will fade. But such memories accumulated along the way makes the journey worthwhile. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I wasn't sure if this crown of heroic sonnets would maintain my interest first thing in the morning as I sip my tea. And I was pleasantly surprised at how it flowed from one sonnet to the next with such ease and flow! And it not only maintained my interest to the end - but I thoroughly enjoyed the images painted with words so well chosen to evoke a mood of both hope and sadness. Despite the determination to thrive and survive, in the end, we like the little flower will fade. But such memories accumulated along the way makes the journey worthwhile. Well done.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Very many thanks both for your review and for the award of six stars, June. Delighted that you enjoyed this and that it held your interest. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
As I finished your poem, I thought back to when you first joined FS. At that time I was keen on scoping out the competition, weighing myself against the top poets and those who had newly joined, then restricting my reviewing to those since my time is so limited. I can't recall the singular poem, perhaps a frightened rabbit, but what memory brings up was my delight. You had a softness to your writing and a gift of words that turned the ordinary observation into something beautiful. I thought at the time that you might just turn into my favorite poet on the site. You have. When I returned to FS this spring, I looked at how you have shaped your talent in the past four or so years and think that my prescience was spot on. You do transcend and I hope that you will publish one day. It is only fair that you mesmerize others outside our little band of Fanstorians. This piece made me smile and weep. I wish you six times six stars for this one. - Wendy
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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As I finished your poem, I thought back to when you first joined FS. At that time I was keen on scoping out the competition, weighing myself against the top poets and those who had newly joined, then restricting my reviewing to those since my time is so limited. I can't recall the singular poem, perhaps a frightened rabbit, but what memory brings up was my delight. You had a softness to your writing and a gift of words that turned the ordinary observation into something beautiful. I thought at the time that you might just turn into my favorite poet on the site. You have. When I returned to FS this spring, I looked at how you have shaped your talent in the past four or so years and think that my prescience was spot on. You do transcend and I hope that you will publish one day. It is only fair that you mesmerize others outside our little band of Fanstorians. This piece made me smile and weep. I wish you six times six stars for this one. - Wendy
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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How very kind of you to take the time to continue to review my work, Wendy. Much appreciated! I am honoured by your kind comments and the award of six stars.
I I wonder whether the poem you were referring to was:
The Hare
At the edge of the trees
Shadows are strewn,
A motionless frieze
etched by the moon.
An instinct of fear
Is caught in its light
Its footfall like snowfall,
Soft in the night.
I wrote it about forty-five years ago after a walk one evening in Sussex woods near my mother's house and it is still one of my favourites. I was delighted by some of the comments about it when I posted it here on FanStory, almost four years ago. It must have been one of the first that i put up on site. How time flies!
Al the best, Tony
Comment from Sanku
What trouble you must have taken to plan and write ths!
An old house whose cracked mortars provide a chance for the forget-me- nots to strike root and old on to its tenuous grip, then the thought that how the winds of chance must have dropped a seed,the dilapidated house that provide nest to birds ,your plan to renovate.going through the old toys and things' the renovation plans and work etc etc..
then the thoughts about your declining years.
i enjoyed reading it ,the metre ,the thymes al adding to its enjoyment.I liked the very last couplet very much
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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What trouble you must have taken to plan and write ths!
An old house whose cracked mortars provide a chance for the forget-me- nots to strike root and old on to its tenuous grip, then the thought that how the winds of chance must have dropped a seed,the dilapidated house that provide nest to birds ,your plan to renovate.going through the old toys and things' the renovation plans and work etc etc..
then the thoughts about your declining years.
i enjoyed reading it ,the metre ,the thymes al adding to its enjoyment.I liked the very last couplet very much
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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How very kind of you to take the time to review my work, Sanku. Much appreciated! I am honoured by your kind comments and award of six stars. Kind regards, Tony
Comment from dmt1967
This reminds me of one of those tragic plays. I had to read a few for my degree and found them enjoyable but hard going lol. Like your poem better. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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This reminds me of one of those tragic plays. I had to read a few for my degree and found them enjoyable but hard going lol. Like your poem better. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Very many thanks both for your review DMT. Delighted that you enjoyed this and that it held your interest. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, truly a work of art, but then, I am completely enamored of a well constructed, lyric epic poem, and this is an epic rendering deserving of read and high praise. Thank you for your superb commitment...
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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In my opinion, truly a work of art, but then, I am completely enamored of a well constructed, lyric epic poem, and this is an epic rendering deserving of read and high praise. Thank you for your superb commitment...
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Very many thanks both for your review and for the award of six stars, Evesayshi. Delighted that you enjoyed this and that it held your interest. Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony. Yes, indeed, it held my interest - I was captivated...Eve