Gift Exchange
50-word micro story40 total reviews
Comment from Heidi M
This is a really sweet Dribble Flash Fiction. The picture you found goes really well with it and helps emphasize that the importance of the gift is not the wrapping paper or even what's inside, but the real gift was the time they could spend together.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
This is a really sweet Dribble Flash Fiction. The picture you found goes really well with it and helps emphasize that the importance of the gift is not the wrapping paper or even what's inside, but the real gift was the time they could spend together.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, Heidi. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story, and thanks for your encouragement.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from catch22
I am not sure if I missed something here, but this short piece of flash fiction felt like the resolution was too subtle. Unless the fact that Jeremy wanted to see his mother smile and instead, he smiled when he handed her the gift (because he imagined her being happy about the gift when she was really happy just to see her son) is the punch line. Is that it? If so, it's subtle--in fact, so much so, I almost missed it. I wish you well in the contest and hope the judges are smarter than I am.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
I am not sure if I missed something here, but this short piece of flash fiction felt like the resolution was too subtle. Unless the fact that Jeremy wanted to see his mother smile and instead, he smiled when he handed her the gift (because he imagined her being happy about the gift when she was really happy just to see her son) is the punch line. Is that it? If so, it's subtle--in fact, so much so, I almost missed it. I wish you well in the contest and hope the judges are smarter than I am.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, catch22. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story. I'll pay close attention to the reviews, but so far, everyone seemed to understood the story. The Mom was happy with Jeremy's gift, but when she hugged him, he realized he got the better gift from him. It's difficult to tell a co plate story with just 50 words. It was quite the challenge.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from papa55mike
This is a very well written piece of flash, I love the hidden meaning in the that wasn't put on paper. Him just being there was his greatest gift not the prize in the newspaper. Great job.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
This is a very well written piece of flash, I love the hidden meaning in the that wasn't put on paper. Him just being there was his greatest gift not the prize in the newspaper. Great job.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, Mike. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story, and thanks for your encouraging response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A wonderful story achieved in so few words, wow, I am very impressed, you are extremely talented to be able to write like this, a complete story with mystery in just fifty words, fantastic and well done love Meia x
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
A wonderful story achieved in so few words, wow, I am very impressed, you are extremely talented to be able to write like this, a complete story with mystery in just fifty words, fantastic and well done love Meia x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, Meia. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story, and thanks so much for your encouragement.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from emptypage
And he really did give the best gift, didn't he?
Lovely story. Too sad for a foggy Sunday morning, but lovely, nonetheless.
I love the anticipation of the boy. I can feel his eagerness to please, see his face. And see his mother's. Great imagery.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
And he really did give the best gift, didn't he?
Lovely story. Too sad for a foggy Sunday morning, but lovely, nonetheless.
I love the anticipation of the boy. I can feel his eagerness to please, see his face. And see his mother's. Great imagery.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, emptypage. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery in the mini story, and thanks for your kind words.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Any story about a gift from a child is precious. He even wrapped it in Newspaper, how preciously adorable!
I put myself in this mother's place when I read this. If I was sick and in the hospital for weeks, nothing would make me smile more than my son doing something this special for me. The simple thought would bring tears of joy to my eyes. I LOVE this story.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
Any story about a gift from a child is precious. He even wrapped it in Newspaper, how preciously adorable!
I put myself in this mother's place when I read this. If I was sick and in the hospital for weeks, nothing would make me smile more than my son doing something this special for me. The simple thought would bring tears of joy to my eyes. I LOVE this story.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Tier. I appreciate your emotional encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Tier. I appreciate your emotional encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Tier. I appreciate your emotional encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Alaskastory
Gift Exchange is a touching story that comes to life in so few words.
Your well chosen words makes a reader visualize a real person.
Of course, I'm sure most of us see a child entering that hospital room. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
Gift Exchange is a touching story that comes to life in so few words.
Your well chosen words makes a reader visualize a real person.
Of course, I'm sure most of us see a child entering that hospital room. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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He'll Marie! Thanks for your awesome review for my micro story. I appreciate your kind response, generous rating, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. Thanks for your support and encouraging words.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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He'll Marie! Thanks for your awesome review for my micro story. I appreciate your kind response, generous rating, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. Thanks for your support and encouraging words.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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He'll Marie! Thanks for your awesome review for my micro story. I appreciate your kind response, generous rating, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. Thanks for your support and encouraging words.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Sometimes the best gifts we receive in life aren't the most costly, or the most beautiful, or the best wrapped.
In fact, I've found that the best gifts are usually the one's which cost absolutely nothing but the gift-giver's time, ingenuity and a bit of imagination in creating it.
A homemade card for the holidays, or your birthday, scribbled in crayon by your child, for example.
Those are the gifts that always and forever keep on giving.
Those are the gifts we want placed with us in our final resting place when we go.
Good luck, Irish.
I doubt you'll need it.
~Dean
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
Sometimes the best gifts we receive in life aren't the most costly, or the most beautiful, or the best wrapped.
In fact, I've found that the best gifts are usually the one's which cost absolutely nothing but the gift-giver's time, ingenuity and a bit of imagination in creating it.
A homemade card for the holidays, or your birthday, scribbled in crayon by your child, for example.
Those are the gifts that always and forever keep on giving.
Those are the gifts we want placed with us in our final resting place when we go.
Good luck, Irish.
I doubt you'll need it.
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Dean. I appreciate your encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. I agree with your comments. We parents treasure the most dangerous mole things from our kids. Thanks for reviewing.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Dean. I appreciate your encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. I agree with your comments. We parents treasure the most dangerous mole things from our kids. Thanks for reviewing.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Dean. I appreciate your encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. I agree with your comments. We parents treasure the most dangerous mole things from our kids. Thanks for reviewing.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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My pleasure.
Perhaps you'll drop by my portfolio one of these days when you're bored and give my work a look.
Take care, Karyn, and enjoy your weekend.
Comment from Mastery
Outstanding poetry, Indy. I love the concept from beginning to great ending. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. It is not an easy write to do a flash in so few words, I know. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
Outstanding poetry, Indy. I love the concept from beginning to great ending. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. It is not an easy write to do a flash in so few words, I know. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, Bob. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story, and thanks for your kind encouragement.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is heartfelt and sentimental and it's always the thought that counts with a gift, and when children offer a gift it means so much, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
This is heartfelt and sentimental and it's always the thought that counts with a gift, and when children offer a gift it means so much, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your review for my micro story, Dolly. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story, and thanks for your good luck.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)