Madness
Pete's morning began like any other, until it ended.19 total reviews
Comment from Angelwhispers
Goosebumps. This is a moving story that must be told, and all too realistic. It does a fine job highlighting the heroes of the story, making the end that much more dreadful to reach. I like that you focused on the heroes, especially nowadays when the bad guys get more airtime than they deserve.
This line has a lot of truth in it: "The kid's mom and step-dad successfully incited rioting in the small community, and revelers set fires and looted the businesses of innocent, hard-working people who shared their heritage, not their work ethic."
Too many people confuse the two.
It was a tough read, but a great write. :) Keep it up, I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Goosebumps. This is a moving story that must be told, and all too realistic. It does a fine job highlighting the heroes of the story, making the end that much more dreadful to reach. I like that you focused on the heroes, especially nowadays when the bad guys get more airtime than they deserve.
This line has a lot of truth in it: "The kid's mom and step-dad successfully incited rioting in the small community, and revelers set fires and looted the businesses of innocent, hard-working people who shared their heritage, not their work ethic."
Too many people confuse the two.
It was a tough read, but a great write. :) Keep it up, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Angelwhispers, for your thoughtful review and excellent rating, as well as the follow. I appreciate it so very much. Have a wonderful weekend, and I am looking forward to reading your work as well.
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is a powerful story, my friend. You used the situation in Dallas to perfection and created a very believable story about what happened there. Well done, my friend. This deserves a 6, but I am all out
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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This is a powerful story, my friend. You used the situation in Dallas to perfection and created a very believable story about what happened there. Well done, my friend. This deserves a 6, but I am all out
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Doug, first I apologize for my delay in acknowledging your RR&R. The holidays have been unusually busy this year, followed by out of town company, so I have been off the site for weeks. Thank you for your kind words, virtual six and continued interest. I apprecitate you very much. Happy 2017!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very imaginative, well-told story, current for today's world, as well. I love your writing, Mary. Hope you'll do more stories. :)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Very imaginative, well-told story, current for today's world, as well. I love your writing, Mary. Hope you'll do more stories. :)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Phyllis, I apologize for the delay in acknowleging. My husband goes back to work next week, so my writing and FanStory have been grounded for the holidays. I'm having trouble finding my muse again. The grandbaby returns fulltime on Monday, so we'll see what happens! I appreciate your continued interest and support.
Comment from LaRosa
And now we can see a different side of you!
Your 'fiction' story is so well done, in chronological fashion, that it seems factual, almost as if you are journalizing. I kept imagining that this was a news article I'd actually read at some point.
You keep the reader trying to figure out the end before it comes...but it can't be done.
The read was so enjoyable that I really wasn't looking for typo's, etc. I did find one:
"...father delivered (upon on) all of them"
Comedy, poetry, and now serious...well rounded, talented author!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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And now we can see a different side of you!
Your 'fiction' story is so well done, in chronological fashion, that it seems factual, almost as if you are journalizing. I kept imagining that this was a news article I'd actually read at some point.
You keep the reader trying to figure out the end before it comes...but it can't be done.
The read was so enjoyable that I really wasn't looking for typo's, etc. I did find one:
"...father delivered (upon on) all of them"
Comedy, poetry, and now serious...well rounded, talented author!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi LaRosa, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thanks for the catch..it has been corrected :) Loved your review. Thank you and all the best in the new year! The SIX was fabulous :D
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welcome back; won't take ya long to catch up...you're prolific...Happy NY to you too
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is extremely well penned and as I have always been a huge fan of blending historical fact with fiction - a wonderfully engaging read. I found no SPAG which allowed me to read undistracted - always a pleasure when that happens. The story line is one that holds the reader's attention from start to finish. The way you ended it was brilliant. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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This is extremely well penned and as I have always been a huge fan of blending historical fact with fiction - a wonderfully engaging read. I found no SPAG which allowed me to read undistracted - always a pleasure when that happens. The story line is one that holds the reader's attention from start to finish. The way you ended it was brilliant. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Mystic Angel, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thank you for the wonderful review and time and talent in reading this piece. So very appreciated!
Comment from Sasha
This is such a sad, deeply moving story that although fiction, could be a true story, and may well be one. So much violence and no solution. Marvelous work with this and I wish you all the besst in 2017.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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This is such a sad, deeply moving story that although fiction, could be a true story, and may well be one. So much violence and no solution. Marvelous work with this and I wish you all the besst in 2017.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Sasha, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thank you for the wonderful review and time and talent in reading this piece. So very appreciated!
Comment from barkingdog
I'd say that when Roy died that he went straight to the fiery furnace.
You managed to capture the reality of today's police officers' lives.
They are fathers, husbands and keepers of our community, now at risk due to racial violence's misconceptions as to who the good guys and bad guys are.
Our country is so divided and to lose men like Tom Cross is a travesty of justice.
It's not justice. It's misdirected hate; a reverse kind of KKK hate.
Wonderful write, Mary. Your voice is loud and clear. I couldn't agree more.
:) e
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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I'd say that when Roy died that he went straight to the fiery furnace.
You managed to capture the reality of today's police officers' lives.
They are fathers, husbands and keepers of our community, now at risk due to racial violence's misconceptions as to who the good guys and bad guys are.
Our country is so divided and to lose men like Tom Cross is a travesty of justice.
It's not justice. It's misdirected hate; a reverse kind of KKK hate.
Wonderful write, Mary. Your voice is loud and clear. I couldn't agree more.
:) e
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Ellen, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thank you for the wonderful review and time and talent in reading this piece. And that SIX...oh my! So very appreciated!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, it might be fiction, but who knows, you could have stumbled across nothing but true facts as they happened. It's a real-to-life story, one that should touch the hearts and emotions of all who read it. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Well, it might be fiction, but who knows, you could have stumbled across nothing but true facts as they happened. It's a real-to-life story, one that should touch the hearts and emotions of all who read it. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Ric, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thank you for the wonderful review and time and talent in reading this piece. And that SIX!... So very appreciated!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
What a tragedy based on a lie that is still perpetrated today. Like Travon the innocent little boy who turned out to be a full grown thug. Most people today wouldn't recognize a picture of the real Travon Martin.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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What a tragedy based on a lie that is still perpetrated today. Like Travon the innocent little boy who turned out to be a full grown thug. Most people today wouldn't recognize a picture of the real Travon Martin.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Thomas, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thank you for the wonderful review and time and talent in reading this piece. So very appreciated!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Mary, I wish I had a 6 left, they flew away yesterday morning. This was a really sad and so well told story. It's true, the best do die young, and it's just not fair. It might be fiction but as you say, based on historical events. The trouble is, it is still happening and won't ever stop. You really told this story well, my friend. A great potlatch challenge. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Oh, Mary, I wish I had a 6 left, they flew away yesterday morning. This was a really sad and so well told story. It's true, the best do die young, and it's just not fair. It might be fiction but as you say, based on historical events. The trouble is, it is still happening and won't ever stop. You really told this story well, my friend. A great potlatch challenge. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hi Sandra, please excuse my late response to this wonderful review. My husband goes back to work next week following Christmas break, so FanStory and my muse have been muted. I hope to be back in earnest soon. Thank you for the wonderful review and time and talent in reading this piece. The virtual six made me smile. So very appreciated!
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No problem, Mary, family must always come first. I look forward to reading more of your brilliant writing when you come back. xx