Maladies of Magnitude
A (too) quiet, quaint little village...84 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Grrr...eat picture! Stone Henge grandpa? I learn so much from your writing. How to compose, which words to use is important. Composition is extremely important. Not considering myself a learned writer such as yourself. You really put your thinking-cap on when you write. Your story/poem takes the reader on a journey of firstly, innocence then curiosity, greed. Finally that curiosity grabbed the seeker by the short and curly's! Well done, great atmosphere Dean.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Grrr...eat picture! Stone Henge grandpa? I learn so much from your writing. How to compose, which words to use is important. Composition is extremely important. Not considering myself a learned writer such as yourself. You really put your thinking-cap on when you write. Your story/poem takes the reader on a journey of firstly, innocence then curiosity, greed. Finally that curiosity grabbed the seeker by the short and curly's! Well done, great atmosphere Dean.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Kind'a looks like 'im, don't it?
Thanks very much for reading and commenting on this one, Kay.
I really appreciate your complimentary review.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from GWHARGIS
That's like something out of the twilight zone. I felt sorry for the traveller and maybe identified with him also. Sometimes honesty can be uncomfortable. Gretchen rhythmic flow. I liked the rhyming. Great job. Gtetchen
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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That's like something out of the twilight zone. I felt sorry for the traveller and maybe identified with him also. Sometimes honesty can be uncomfortable. Gretchen rhythmic flow. I liked the rhyming. Great job. Gtetchen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and respond, Gretchen.
I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your story is excellent and a warning to those who seek adventure in strange places unaware of the dangers that may reside there. The seeker may find death waiting for him. Excellent poetics and the pictures appropriate.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Your story is excellent and a warning to those who seek adventure in strange places unaware of the dangers that may reside there. The seeker may find death waiting for him. Excellent poetics and the pictures appropriate.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to read and offer your insights into Maladies of Magnitude, Alan.
It is appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Dean,
After reading this 3 times, I now understand the story. Your presentation is awesome--the artwork & sound effects set the tone for what follows. The color scheme is perfect--eerie & scary rolled into one.
You did an awesome job with the internal rhyme, ending rhyme, alliteration & smooth flow of the lines. I read it aloud & it sounded great with the sounds playing, too.
This reminds me of the Black Plague although I know it is about leprosy. This awesome work of art is like a page from a history book focusing on the Middle Ages.
You are right about your selection of the title. This one is 'it.' Readers know form the title that something not so good will happen.
What a sad event that the 'ranger' could not allow the pauper to help him. I guess he thought he was so much better & didn't want to be contaminated by the poor. Little did he know. People act that way still. How many homeless are looked down on because of their outward appearance?
You have created a fantastic piece of art on so many levels with this poem.
Excellent! Jan
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Dean,
After reading this 3 times, I now understand the story. Your presentation is awesome--the artwork & sound effects set the tone for what follows. The color scheme is perfect--eerie & scary rolled into one.
You did an awesome job with the internal rhyme, ending rhyme, alliteration & smooth flow of the lines. I read it aloud & it sounded great with the sounds playing, too.
This reminds me of the Black Plague although I know it is about leprosy. This awesome work of art is like a page from a history book focusing on the Middle Ages.
You are right about your selection of the title. This one is 'it.' Readers know form the title that something not so good will happen.
What a sad event that the 'ranger' could not allow the pauper to help him. I guess he thought he was so much better & didn't want to be contaminated by the poor. Little did he know. People act that way still. How many homeless are looked down on because of their outward appearance?
You have created a fantastic piece of art on so many levels with this poem.
Excellent! Jan
Comment Written 12-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Once again, thank you so much for taking the time away from your own work to read and review my own, Jan.
I deeply appreciate your complimentary comments and stellar review.
Thanks for the six, and more than anything else I am truly pleased that you enjoyed this.
Comment from seaglass
I loved your poem and the spooky feeling it creates. It feels do much like Pie. The wording, the pattern, And the mood are so similar. Very skillfully done.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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I loved your poem and the spooky feeling it creates. It feels do much like Pie. The wording, the pattern, And the mood are so similar. Very skillfully done.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Once again, thank you so much for taking the time away from your own work to read and review my own, seaglass.
I deeply appreciate your complimentary comments and stellar review.
Thanks for the six, and more than anything else I am truly pleased that you enjoyed this.
Comment from jlsavell
Dean, I have naught one six, but this is worth ten stars in my ever so humble opinion. Impressively told.. daunting,,the tone is eerie and though so, it has a lesson in its entirety, as only you are so very good at.. well another pom of the month dear friend.. exceptional..
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Dean, I have naught one six, but this is worth ten stars in my ever so humble opinion. Impressively told.. daunting,,the tone is eerie and though so, it has a lesson in its entirety, as only you are so very good at.. well another pom of the month dear friend.. exceptional..
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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No sixes are ever necessary, Jimi, just as long as you enjoyed what you read and were able to take something away from it after having done so.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from l.raven
Hi Dean, I am so sorry I don't have a six for this one...this is awesome you...your last four lines just wraps it up....trap'd here now, disease enwalls me; like the pauper whom I'm shooed...right when I think you couldn't get better you...very well written...and the sound track and the picture....SCARY...love Linda xxoo luff
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Hi Dean, I am so sorry I don't have a six for this one...this is awesome you...your last four lines just wraps it up....trap'd here now, disease enwalls me; like the pauper whom I'm shooed...right when I think you couldn't get better you...very well written...and the sound track and the picture....SCARY...love Linda xxoo luff
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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No sixes are ever necessary, Linda, just as long as you enjoyed what you read and were able to take something away from it after having done so.
Take care,
~Dean :}
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I have never walked away empty with anything I have ever read of yours...maybe a bit chilled...LOL...but never empty...they really don't give us enough sixes...if you read a lot you like to have more...smiling back at ya...xxoo Linda luff
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Then that is reward enough in and of itself.
Thanks so much again. :)
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you are so welcome...big smiles back at ya...xxoo luff
Comment from WintyBoy
Okie Dokie ! The search for oneself, if I'm not mistaken,
May be forlorn, or even forsaken.
This in my opinion, if not the best--certainly, up there with the best.
In my mostest, humblest analysis, I can say without fear of contradiction,
that this piece of work is....OK.
To be serious though...Par-excellence, a real cracking good read, brilliant.
Everything fits--superb rhyming, rhythm, and message---very enjoyable.
However, it is so good, that " lesion" stands out like a sore thumb. Winty.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Okie Dokie ! The search for oneself, if I'm not mistaken,
May be forlorn, or even forsaken.
This in my opinion, if not the best--certainly, up there with the best.
In my mostest, humblest analysis, I can say without fear of contradiction,
that this piece of work is....OK.
To be serious though...Par-excellence, a real cracking good read, brilliant.
Everything fits--superb rhyming, rhythm, and message---very enjoyable.
However, it is so good, that " lesion" stands out like a sore thumb. Winty.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Once again, thank you so much for taking the time away from your own work to read and review my own, WintyBoy.
I deeply appreciate your complimentary comments and stellar review.
Thanks for the six, and more than anything else I am truly pleased that you enjoyed this.
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Well, thank you good sir, for thanking me. The reason, why I like this piece, is:
because the character you portray might as well be me. It takes me to places that I recognise. For where-ever it is going, I'm coming back from there.
All I can see right now, and I tell only you--"fellow poet," ahead, a narrowing,
darkened, drooping- tree lined road--
I never look back, as I know where I've been. In the distance, a little way to go,
as yet--a Victorian- like archway. beyond which is what I presume to be a
a person, but obscured in the darkness by a radiant, brilliant light.
Now I'm not religious--you tell me ???
But for sure, that's one place I've never been. Your work would be empty if it didn't reveal--"Intellect, humility, and a
sense of humour, including the courage
to write it your way. In short it is your character shining through the darkness!
This for me makes it interesting. Verily.
And now for a cup of tea, and my med.
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That's very kind of to say, Winty.
I could also say much the same regarding your own work.
Thanks again, my friend.
And please, call me King Nothing.
All of my good friends do (go figure?)
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What! All of "THEM?"
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Well, all the ones I've read thus far, LOL...
Comment from Unspoken94
Men rarely ask for help anyway, Dean. You should
know that. It has been the death of many a man!
This excellent craftsmanship, both in the write and
in your presentation. -Bill
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Men rarely ask for help anyway, Dean. You should
know that. It has been the death of many a man!
This excellent craftsmanship, both in the write and
in your presentation. -Bill
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment on Maladies of Magnitude, Bill. And yes, I know all too well what you're referring to, even as it pertains to myself.
Take care, my friend, and thanks again.
Comment from 914
Your way with words and the story you tell whenever one reads it. You bring them into the story which is a gift you have and not only that educate us on word usage and origins. ð???
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Your way with words and the story you tell whenever one reads it. You bring them into the story which is a gift you have and not only that educate us on word usage and origins. ð???
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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Once again, thank you so much for taking the time away from your own work to read and review my own, SCOUT914.
I deeply appreciate your complimentary comments and stellar review.
Thanks for the six, and more than anything else I am truly pleased that you enjoyed this.