No Father Needed
Minute Poem-Potlatch Challenge32 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, I'm so sorry you didn't have your parents in your life...but there are those who do...and wish they didn't...sigh...but we still go...makes our lives what they are...they have to live with there actions...love your poem you...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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HI Michael, I'm so sorry you didn't have your parents in your life...but there are those who do...and wish they didn't...sigh...but we still go...makes our lives what they are...they have to live with there actions...love your poem you...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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It all seemed normal to me. Hell, I seem normal to me. HAHAHA!
Glad you liked. It never bothered me. In fact I don't understand why it would bother anyone. It seems that however one grows up would feel normal. What do I know? LOL mikey
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LOL....Michael...I think you are right...how ever we grow up.....is what is normal to them...your so well come you...xxoo Linda
Comment from Taffspride
I can relate to this Mikey, at least having no father as I grew up. But my mother and her twin brother who helped raise me were wonderful. So this Welsh/ Irish/Finnish gal had a wonderful upbringing.
I could feel a sense of pain as I read this, growing up without a real sense of family can be very hard. Yet within that pain was a feeling of fulfillment, "I did it." Something to be proud of.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I can relate to this Mikey, at least having no father as I grew up. But my mother and her twin brother who helped raise me were wonderful. So this Welsh/ Irish/Finnish gal had a wonderful upbringing.
I could feel a sense of pain as I read this, growing up without a real sense of family can be very hard. Yet within that pain was a feeling of fulfillment, "I did it." Something to be proud of.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Very perceptive. I was actually raised by a bunch of young women, aunts. So, I think it worked out well. From what I've learned of my father, I didn't miss much. LOL mikey
Comment from pattipac
Mikey, this well penned poem about how you used your inner strength to raise yourself is commendable, showing you mush have had an inner-hand, or spirit, if you will to guide you.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Mikey, this well penned poem about how you used your inner strength to raise yourself is commendable, showing you mush have had an inner-hand, or spirit, if you will to guide you.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Hi, Patti
I can't believe I'm this far behind. Whew. I've been sick but I'm almost caught up now. Thanks so much. How very kind. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from Sasha
Excellent work with this one. I knew you would post something special and different. Very nice work with this, I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Excellent work with this one. I knew you would post something special and different. Very nice work with this, I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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What a nice thing to say. Glad you liked it. Thanks a million, mikey
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is an amazing poem telling a story about facing major challenges while growing up.
-But you don't see them as challenges; it was just the way it was.
-I guess you learn a lot more about yourself that way, but it had to be hard at times.
-Very good format and poem.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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-This is an amazing poem telling a story about facing major challenges while growing up.
-But you don't see them as challenges; it was just the way it was.
-I guess you learn a lot more about yourself that way, but it had to be hard at times.
-Very good format and poem.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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I think calling them hard times is usually in retrospect. I don't recall thinking they were hard at the time. Sometimes I look back and realize we were poor etc. But at the time, it was all normal. Glad you liked. I finally got a little feel for this form from down below. LOL mikey
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It's good you didn't see them as hard times at the time. That is how we get through things, I think. It was a good poem.
Comment from Lovinia
HI Mikey
So sad, yet no self-pity! I guess you fathered and mothered yourself .. and a touch of the 'luck of the Irish'. :)) Well, you turned out just fine, though it must be a sad time for you on Mother's and Father's Day. Is it this week-end in the US. It is September for us in OZ. One of my dearest friends has just lost his father, after some horrible pain for almost two years. It was a kindness for his to move on to peace, pain-free.
So many stories we may hear about fathers. I was lucky to have a sweet, kind and loving one, though he was no match, or was he? ...for my demanding mother.
Excellent presentation and spot on for the challenge. From the heart of that Irish elf!! Irish hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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HI Mikey
So sad, yet no self-pity! I guess you fathered and mothered yourself .. and a touch of the 'luck of the Irish'. :)) Well, you turned out just fine, though it must be a sad time for you on Mother's and Father's Day. Is it this week-end in the US. It is September for us in OZ. One of my dearest friends has just lost his father, after some horrible pain for almost two years. It was a kindness for his to move on to peace, pain-free.
So many stories we may hear about fathers. I was lucky to have a sweet, kind and loving one, though he was no match, or was he? ...for my demanding mother.
Excellent presentation and spot on for the challenge. From the heart of that Irish elf!! Irish hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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It is Father's Day here. All the crazies here call me "Dad", so I guess these are my kids. LOL
I'm never sad around holidays are any of that. I just grew up how I grew up and it was all normal to me. I never understood "holes" in hearts and all that.
That's so cute, "Or was he?" A very wise observation. HAHAHA!
I'm shrinking so I may just turn into an Irish Elf if I'm not careful. LOL Irish Hugs Indeed! mikey xoxoxox
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You do have such a positive attitude to your life and growing up without much family, especially not your dad or his family who seem to be a great bunch ... maybe you missed out, though many kids had father's who were never really interested in them ... or worse. Dad was so quiet, I do wish I'd really got to know him as a person, as well as my joyful daddy of childhood. I was twenty six when he died. He could cook, a mean bbq and roast lamb.
If you're hungry I've made vegetable laksa and a vegie soup of more traditional ingredients. My son, still at home has decided to become a vegetarian, so I'm supporting him. Come on over and join me in a bowl? Shrinking ... you say?? HAHAHAHAHAH! I do have Irish in me, didn't you recognise the blarney. I even have two castles over there ... just have to find the missing family Bible with the marriage recorded and I would be able to share in the spoils. hee hee! Hugs from an 'almost' heiress - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment from Susanjohn
An Irish Elf??? Oh boy! Father's day can be tough for some... myself included..lets just say...interesting piece you have here.. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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An Irish Elf??? Oh boy! Father's day can be tough for some... myself included..lets just say...interesting piece you have here.. :-)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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It doesn't really bother me to be honest. It's just how it was. I was raised by a bunch of women. It worked out okay, I'm a fan. LOL
Thanks so much, mikey
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Your a fan!! haha oh you funny boy! Those poor women! :-) jk glad, it all worked out
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi, Mikey,
This is a very sad poem. I can't imagine not having a mom and dad. Mine have been gone for 20 and 17 years; respectively.
Your minute poem is spot-on with meter and syllable count; however, the rhyme pattern is off. The poetic form requires a rhyme pattern of
aabb ccdd eeff, but yours is as follows:
aabb ccdd aaee
no / know / show / grow are all 'a' rhymes. You will need to change one of the rhyme pairs to bring the poem back into form.
A good read this afternoon.
-Ray
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Hi, Mikey,
This is a very sad poem. I can't imagine not having a mom and dad. Mine have been gone for 20 and 17 years; respectively.
Your minute poem is spot-on with meter and syllable count; however, the rhyme pattern is off. The poetic form requires a rhyme pattern of
aabb ccdd eeff, but yours is as follows:
aabb ccdd aaee
no / know / show / grow are all 'a' rhymes. You will need to change one of the rhyme pairs to bring the poem back into form.
A good read this afternoon.
-Ray
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Gee whiz. LOL
Not a soul noticed such an obvious thing. HAHAHA! Fixing that sure improved this considerably. Isn't that always the case. Grumble, grumble, grumble ... HEY, it's really better now!!!!
Good catch and I'm pleased with the results. Thanks a bunch. mikey
Comment from strandregs
Irish Elf
How doth the Irish Elf grow?
Fantastic how you got it in those tiny lines.
I found it hard.:-)) Z.
women with babies should be declared terorists.:-))
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Irish Elf
How doth the Irish Elf grow?
Fantastic how you got it in those tiny lines.
I found it hard.:-)) Z.
women with babies should be declared terorists.:-))
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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The Irish Elf 'taint grown a bit. I got lucky, the damn lines are too short, yes? But you're piece cracked me up. I'll be around to review by tomorrow. That kid has it made. HA! mikey
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I'll hapilly take this as a review
Of nappy rash. To save you a lot of
effort for 2 cents. :-)) Z.
Comment from Galactia
This is an excellent written poem, i am assuming your short with the final words, Irish elf. sad to here you didn't know your parents, either of them. i had friends and a step brother that was adopted out.
great job
regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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This is an excellent written poem, i am assuming your short with the final words, Irish elf. sad to here you didn't know your parents, either of them. i had friends and a step brother that was adopted out.
great job
regards
Tia
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Hi, Tia. Actually I am a bit short, but not quite an elf. HAHAHA
5' 7''. But I have really long arms, so I can get things off shelves like tall dudes, so I'm still worthwhile. :))
I've never been sad about any of it. It's just how it was.
Thanks so much. mikey
