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Comment from heyjude
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Chrissy, You are so write. I work and work trying to find words
that sound right; then just give up and post. Lovely picture, too.
You gave something to smile about.

 Comment Written 05-May-2016


reply by the author on 06-May-2016
    Hi heyjude, Yes it can be a challenge to get the right syllables and then to finish a line with the right one i.e feminine or masculine is not always right. Iam glad you had a smile. Many Thanks for your review Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Malerie
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So true, so true. Great artwork! This is how I feel trying to come up with the correct syllable count. Ug! Thanks for this funny, witty piece.

 Comment Written 03-May-2016


reply by the author on 04-May-2016
    Hi Malerie. Thank you for your review and feedback. it can be difficult at times to be spot on with the syllable, but It is fun and challenging to get it right. Glad you thought this funny and witty. Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Lisa Deverick
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Your poem has an amusing collection of words to produce this three-five-three. I like the humor in this. good luck with the contest

 Comment Written 03-May-2016


reply by the author on 04-May-2016
    Hi Lisa. I thank you for taking your time to read and review my contest entry. a bit of fun in the making and it can be challenging trying to come up with the right sounding syllables. Cheers Christine 😃
Comment from Gloria ....
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Ha, ha, another super entry into the 3/5/3 contest. I absolutely adore the picture even though I know I'm not supposed to comment on it, it's a beauty and complements your clever poem incredibly well.

Best wishes to you in the contest, this is a good one. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 03-May-2016


reply by the author on 03-May-2016
    Hi gloria, I whipped this up when I looked at the requirements what else do you do with 11 syllables LOL. Thanks for reading and for your best wishes. Cheers Christine😄
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Good job with the syllable count. Your poem is not grammatically correct and it would be easy to improve. See below.

Can be hard
To find enough words
That sound right

It can be
hard to find the words
that sound right

 Comment Written 03-May-2016


reply by the author on 03-May-2016
    Hi Gypsy, Thanks for your review and suggestions and I can see where you are coming from with the grammar. I'll keep this in mind. Do three line poems have to make one statement like writing prose ? Cheers
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 03-May-2016
    It does not have to be a sentence but you chose to write one. Read both out loud and see which one sounds better to you. Both have the same amount of syllables.
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
    Oh I see, but it is in now, so I will keep this in mind for the next one. I really appreciate you insight. Cheers again
Comment from zekeziemann
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Good job. You are so right. Finding the small number of words that make sense and say something. Would the first line be better as "It is hard"? (Just a suggestion, by no means a criticism.)
Zeke

 Comment Written 02-May-2016


reply by the author on 02-May-2016
    Hi Zeke, Yes I agree and have changed the first line to It's so hard so thanks for your suggestion and also for taking the time to read and review and I am always open to a suggestion and often change if I like it. Many Cheers to you
Comment from WalkerMan
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You have mastered the syllable pattern. The next challenge is, can you add in rhyme or some other poetic device while keeping this minimal pattern?

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 02-May-2016
    Hi WalkerMan, Thanks for your review and challenge I think I could come up with something

    Like my style
    I hope you will smile
    Stay awhile

    Ha Ha just a bit of fun Cheers
reply by WalkerMan on 02-May-2016
    Well done!
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
    Thanks
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
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Great nice poem. Simple with well chosen words that reflects great skills in composing this poem.Yeah it is hard sometimes to find enough words that sound right.Excellent

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 01-May-2016
    Hi Sealord Hunter. Thank you for reading my poem and for your encouraging comments and excellent review. I had fun with this prompt Cheers
Comment from rspoet
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The is a fun entry for the contest
exact syllables at 3-5-3
Short poems are difficult to write
Fits the theme of the contest well
Excellent art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 01-May-2016
    Hi rspoet. I am pleased you thought this well done and I had fun using the prompt requirements as my actual 3-5-3 .I do so appreciate your review and good luck wishes Thank you Cheers
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-So clever, starting with the colorful artwork.
-I like this take on a 3-5-3 poem.
-Title is spot on, as well as the format.
-Good connection between lines that creates one complete thought.
-You "tell it like it is!"
-Doing this is hard when not enough words or syllables are allowed.
-I am guessing you are actually pretty good at these various forms.

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 01-May-2016
    Hi Respa1. I hope so. No really I was just having some fun with this prompt requirements and this came to me to use the very requirement as my 3-5-3 entry. And Thanks for your review and I am please you thought it spot on. Cheers
reply by Pam (respa) on 02-May-2016
    It was a clever idea. You are welcome for the review and comments.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
    Thank You my friend
reply by Pam (respa) on 02-May-2016
    You are welcome.