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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Ask Me In the Dark"Song lyrics with music attached
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Comment from Scarbrems
So, I hung on to this until I could listen to the music, and it was so worth the wait. The lyrics on their own have a haunting beauty about them, but are made complete by the excellent atmospheric guitar.
'It's always me/as it's always been' - for me, that line sums this up. There's a nakedness about it, a sense of exposure. That sounds a bit pretentious bollocks, but I can't think how else to put it.
I've just discovered an artist I really like. His name is Johnny Flynn, and this makes me feel the same as I do listening to him. I like music that takes me places in my head, and this does just that.
Emma
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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So, I hung on to this until I could listen to the music, and it was so worth the wait. The lyrics on their own have a haunting beauty about them, but are made complete by the excellent atmospheric guitar.
'It's always me/as it's always been' - for me, that line sums this up. There's a nakedness about it, a sense of exposure. That sounds a bit pretentious bollocks, but I can't think how else to put it.
I've just discovered an artist I really like. His name is Johnny Flynn, and this makes me feel the same as I do listening to him. I like music that takes me places in my head, and this does just that.
Emma
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thanks for the intro to Mr. Flynn. Wow, what a great compliment. I like him. :))
I must say, I doubt I will be more pleased with a review for a long, long time. Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment on the music. I'm a bit more insecure about the musical aspects so your positive response goes a long way in giving me a bit of confidence.
Thanks so much for the stars and wonderful encouragement!! mikey
Comment from lightink
These really come in pairs (kind/rough)....
This is so poetic, invitational and warm! Yet, there's an ongoing mysterious reference to a darkness within that might have many faces...
"colors are flat reflections
truth hides in shadows"
"the beauty of a campfire
is the dark in which it glows"
Fascinating and thought provoking!
It's almost a warning - if I reveal myself, you will see it all - even the dark side...
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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These really come in pairs (kind/rough)....
This is so poetic, invitational and warm! Yet, there's an ongoing mysterious reference to a darkness within that might have many faces...
"colors are flat reflections
truth hides in shadows"
"the beauty of a campfire
is the dark in which it glows"
Fascinating and thought provoking!
It's almost a warning - if I reveal myself, you will see it all - even the dark side...
Comment Written 26-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Love your reaction. You are right on the money with my intent though the warning is actually positive. Basically, turn the light out and "see" me for who I am and not what I appear to be with a spotlight on. Maybe some frustration over being seen in a superficial way. See, you have me thinking too. OUCH! My poor brain. :)) Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh now this one I can relate to and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
Very nicely done and the pleading of get to know me and it will mean more to you and to me. Nicely done
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Oh now this one I can relate to and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
Very nicely done and the pleading of get to know me and it will mean more to you and to me. Nicely done
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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You nailed the point perfectly in just a few words. YAY! Yep, that is what I'm saying. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi Mikey. :)) Merry Christmas to you by the way. I think you've done a bang up job with this lyric and music.
The song is quite well produced given the quality of your superior sound stage;-) --vocals are good, love the harmonics and some good guitar riffs going on.
All in all your book of songs just keeps getting better and better, so keep 'em coming. Solomon's Song of Songs ain't got nuttin' on you.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Hi Mikey. :)) Merry Christmas to you by the way. I think you've done a bang up job with this lyric and music.
The song is quite well produced given the quality of your superior sound stage;-) --vocals are good, love the harmonics and some good guitar riffs going on.
All in all your book of songs just keeps getting better and better, so keep 'em coming. Solomon's Song of Songs ain't got nuttin' on you.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Merry Christmas to you as well. It seems we both survived it, a good thing.
I'm glad you like this one, I do too. I'd just like to make a decent demo of some the one's I think are decent. Bouncing stuff back and forth with a cheap cassette deck doesn't usually work too well. This is kind of the gist of how I'd want this to sound though.
Solomon didn't really have my range. He was weak in the lower register and showed a great disregard for infants, at least that's how the story came down to me. But, I wish I had his bucks! mikey
Comment from Glasstruth
Darkly beautiful. There's mystery here in an elusive way. Having secrets makes life more interesting as we try to pry open the truth. Love these lines:
"fire doesn't mix with fire
the beauty of a campfire
is the dark in which it glows"
Superb lyrics. Les
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Darkly beautiful. There's mystery here in an elusive way. Having secrets makes life more interesting as we try to pry open the truth. Love these lines:
"fire doesn't mix with fire
the beauty of a campfire
is the dark in which it glows"
Superb lyrics. Les
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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I'm glad you like this one, I do too. You're on the money in your interpretation. Thank you very much. It's encouraging coming from one of the poets I rank near the top. mikey
Comment from seaglass
This is very pretty. In the dark, there are few distractions whither "dark" is real dark or symbolic. Arlo Guthry said, "Without the dark, who would see the light?" I think the friendships on this site are endearing because we see nothing of each other, but we hear the soul from the written words. Loved the music.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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This is very pretty. In the dark, there are few distractions whither "dark" is real dark or symbolic. Arlo Guthry said, "Without the dark, who would see the light?" I think the friendships on this site are endearing because we see nothing of each other, but we hear the soul from the written words. Loved the music.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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I'm really pleased you liked this one as I do too. :))
The dark is more symbolic, but in a sense real too. I do look better in the dark. Ha!
It's so true about the friendships here. It's the best way to get to know someone, yes? Thank you so much. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas. mikey
Comment from brenda bickers
Really like the lyrics although, I don't understand poems that don't rhyme I find it hard to get into reading stride, to make it flow properly, and then I don't feel that I can justify my own judgement on it. But I can appreciate good writing.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Really like the lyrics although, I don't understand poems that don't rhyme I find it hard to get into reading stride, to make it flow properly, and then I don't feel that I can justify my own judgement on it. But I can appreciate good writing.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Sometimes if you can get someone to read it out loud to you, the rhythm is more apparent. Not sure if you listened to the attached video, but that's this put to music. It flows better when it's with the music. Song lyrics often sound a little strange without the music. I usually rhyme quite a bit. You had me looking at this one. :)) You're right! How odd, it doesn't have hardly any rhyme. Thank you kindly for reading and your thoughts. mikey
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
-I found your picture to be hauntingly alluring in a black and white silhouette and is in a romantic appeal to it that offers a or set say tone for your poetry. You explain and imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout your writing.
- "the beauty of the campfire is the dark in which it glows". I particularly like this line which you repeated at different times and it is so true without the dark a campfire or a fire is nonexistent.
- your music is kind of crude I like the chord progressions and the vocals and lead music on different channels. I would suggest getting yourself a Presonus set up with an audio box 2 or 4 VSL. A midi keyboard would help also. This works for me.
- Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Mikey.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Mikey;
-I found your picture to be hauntingly alluring in a black and white silhouette and is in a romantic appeal to it that offers a or set say tone for your poetry. You explain and imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout your writing.
- "the beauty of the campfire is the dark in which it glows". I particularly like this line which you repeated at different times and it is so true without the dark a campfire or a fire is nonexistent.
- your music is kind of crude I like the chord progressions and the vocals and lead music on different channels. I would suggest getting yourself a Presonus set up with an audio box 2 or 4 VSL. A midi keyboard would help also. This works for me.
- Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Mikey.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Hey, Alex! This is one of mine that I like myself. Yeah, sorry about the sound quality. I have a digital recorder on layaway, I hope it helps. I can't afford much in the way of equipment. I have the keyboard though. Hopefully I an figure out how to use it all. I'm pretty lame at technical things. They used to have to plug my guitar in for me at gigs. HAhaha. Blessings to you and yours on this happy day. mikey
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and blessings to you all so Mikey and you are so very welcome.
Alex
Comment from Just2Write
I've always wanted to write Lyrics - but they don't come out the way I planned. I thought this song of yours was very well done. Especially for those who have experienced the magic of being in the dark, so close to nature and only a campfire to keep you and a special person company.
I like too the thought of trusting your instincts, and feeling who each other is, vs. trying to see them with your eyes. Beauty is inside, not outside - and that is the part of us that we want those who love us to see.
Rose.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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I've always wanted to write Lyrics - but they don't come out the way I planned. I thought this song of yours was very well done. Especially for those who have experienced the magic of being in the dark, so close to nature and only a campfire to keep you and a special person company.
I like too the thought of trusting your instincts, and feeling who each other is, vs. trying to see them with your eyes. Beauty is inside, not outside - and that is the part of us that we want those who love us to see.
Rose.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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You're a good writer. You'd be surprised how easily a musician could put a LOT of your work to music. If it has a nice flow to it, it's easy. It doesn't even need to rhyme or have a rhyming pattern. You'll notice this one doesn't. :))
I just LOVE your interpretation. It is so right on the money. Thank you so much. mikey
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When writing lyrics - which comes first - the lyrics, or the music?
Comment from rjuselius
This is an exquisite piece of song lyrics dear Michael! It's sincerely profound and delightfully insightful! Very nice my friend!
Thank you for sharing!
Virtual six..
Blessings!
Rebekka x
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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This is an exquisite piece of song lyrics dear Michael! It's sincerely profound and delightfully insightful! Very nice my friend!
Thank you for sharing!
Virtual six..
Blessings!
Rebekka x
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Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Yay! I'm totally thrilled you like this one. It's one of the few I like myself. Any mention of a six is wonderful. Thank you so much, mikey
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entirely my pleasure dear friend:)