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Comment from Gloria ....
Oh my land, you've beat up the Biebs. Can't say that he doesn't deserve it because there's one lad who got too big for his britches.
This is a fairly disturbing lyric Mikey. But I think I understand its metaphorical intent.
Excellent song my dear. I can see this one really catching on.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Oh my land, you've beat up the Biebs. Can't say that he doesn't deserve it because there's one lad who got too big for his britches.
This is a fairly disturbing lyric Mikey. But I think I understand its metaphorical intent.
Excellent song my dear. I can see this one really catching on.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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He told me I was kind of short for a leprechaun.
Geez, thank God you realize it's metaphorical. Everybody thinks I'm suicidal as well as twisted. I suppose it is disturbing. I have a penchant for exaggeration to illustrate a point. Basically a dude frustrated with his girl and pulling his hair out. All talk and angst, but no real razor blades were dulled in the writing of this ditty.
Glad you liked it. I miss performing I must admit. It's difficult generating any rock and roll abandon sitting in a room by myself. :)) mikey
Comment from Realist101
Keep at it Mikey! People who can sing are so lucky! And you play too. :) AND write and everything. This poem tho, well...most disturbing. I like it. Maybe Santy will bring you some new equipment? Best wishes for a nice day today! Suse
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Keep at it Mikey! People who can sing are so lucky! And you play too. :) AND write and everything. This poem tho, well...most disturbing. I like it. Maybe Santy will bring you some new equipment? Best wishes for a nice day today! Suse
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I'm supposed to get some real equipment. :))
I'm pretty lame though as far as using stuff like that, but I'm sure it will be an improvement! I'm so pleased you liked this. Kind of an exaggeration of an exasperated lover, he feels like this but wouldn't do it. Thank you kindly. Hope your holidays are awesome. Mikey
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I hope you get some good gifts Mikey! Keep us posted? (I wrote a story about turkey bones and just now tussled with our turkey for dinner later, and was thinking about that stupid story! LOL! I'm nuttier than a fruitcake.) :)
Comment from Jay Squires
C'mon, Mikey ... Don't tell me you wrote that and had it put to music. Mikey!!! I absolutely refuse to believe that's your voice in the recording. And did you photoshop Justin Beiber in the picture?
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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C'mon, Mikey ... Don't tell me you wrote that and had it put to music. Mikey!!! I absolutely refuse to believe that's your voice in the recording. And did you photoshop Justin Beiber in the picture?
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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No, I actually did that to him. :))
It was the right thing to do!
Yeah, I've been known to knock off a tune here and there. How do you think I can afford to live in Lancaster? Hahaha. mikey
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Well, you're always amazing me anew!
Comment from nordicgirl
Whoa, this is a surprise. Still a strong but unexpected vocal. I get this one. Frustration expressed by extreme illustrations. Not reality but how reality feels and what you think the steps might be to shine a light on your lover. Being in love and feeling hopeless to make sense of it is not that unusual. Some will get it, others will find this too violent perhaps. Catchy tune with this one too, a long time musician I would bet.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Whoa, this is a surprise. Still a strong but unexpected vocal. I get this one. Frustration expressed by extreme illustrations. Not reality but how reality feels and what you think the steps might be to shine a light on your lover. Being in love and feeling hopeless to make sense of it is not that unusual. Some will get it, others will find this too violent perhaps. Catchy tune with this one too, a long time musician I would bet.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Thank you kindly. You are too kind. Yep, a long time musician. To be honest, being a writer and a poet was a total afterthought. I figured I had to do something. :))
Hope you're Christmas is the best. mikey
Comment from Glasstruth
Weird and captivating. Sounds like someone with deep problems. For a song, I think this would work really well. It's something someone could listen to many times and still wonder about it. Great job! Have a BLOODY MERRY CHRISTMAS! Les
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Weird and captivating. Sounds like someone with deep problems. For a song, I think this would work really well. It's something someone could listen to many times and still wonder about it. Great job! Have a BLOODY MERRY CHRISTMAS! Les
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Yep, it isn't Christmas without a little mayhem and blood. The music is attached if you want to hear it as a song. Terrible quality, but the gist of it's there. Thanks very much.
Hope you have an amazing Christmas. Loved your work all year though I don't have time to do much but sneak by for a read. Hopefully I can find more time next year. mikey
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Thanks for the best wishes. HO! HO! Before you know, it's a New Year. Write on!!! Les
Comment from lightink
Now, that's a very different tone from the previous "One in a million" song!
Are they come in pairs - soft/kind and tough/violent? :)
It's well written nevertheless!
It takes a while to see what's happening with that blade
(after all, the target could have been her...)
This is one of the most poetically striking line:
"bleed freely like a woman
but, sadly, not as smooth"
These lines give me hope that it's not a full on suicide but maybe "just" cutting.
It's still very sad and violent towards the self while in a twisted way, violent towards the beloved!
Good writing, my friend!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Now, that's a very different tone from the previous "One in a million" song!
Are they come in pairs - soft/kind and tough/violent? :)
It's well written nevertheless!
It takes a while to see what's happening with that blade
(after all, the target could have been her...)
This is one of the most poetically striking line:
"bleed freely like a woman
but, sadly, not as smooth"
These lines give me hope that it's not a full on suicide but maybe "just" cutting.
It's still very sad and violent towards the self while in a twisted way, violent towards the beloved!
Good writing, my friend!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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It's mostly frustration with one's mate. So actually, just exaggerating to make a point. No real bloodshed. :))
Good point, verbal abuse and threats against oneself are a powerful and cruel form of abuse that goes unnoticed often. Screaming at someone and threatening outrageous things is hardly better than punching them in the nose. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from Liberty Justice
My goodness photo is shocking. Man is so self destructive. States cut himself to please a woman, but what kind of woman wants him to do that? Deep rich red background like color of blood. Is man so much in love he would chance to kill himself. liberty justice
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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My goodness photo is shocking. Man is so self destructive. States cut himself to please a woman, but what kind of woman wants him to do that? Deep rich red background like color of blood. Is man so much in love he would chance to kill himself. liberty justice
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Good points. He's more frustrated and threatening than about to really do anything. It's a kind of yelling for the sake of it I guess. Thanks for your excellent input. mikey
Comment from Linda Kay
I was having a hard time feeling this as song lyrics until
I listened to it, not just read the words. You did a good job of meshing the lyrics and music. The topic was edgier than I prefer, but had great word choice for the image and tone you were going for.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I was having a hard time feeling this as song lyrics until
I listened to it, not just read the words. You did a good job of meshing the lyrics and music. The topic was edgier than I prefer, but had great word choice for the image and tone you were going for.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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It's a bit over the top I agree and not my usual fare. It's just a very frustrated mate threatening more than anything. Kind of screaming at the sun. I'm pleased you liked the way the lyrics fit the music. Thank you, mikey
Comment from fluffnstuff
I like your voice a lot and hope that this takes off for you. i'm sure there is a pretty big gap in our ages because the words abut cutting yourself kind of leaves me feeling like the rca victor dog with its head tilted. keep writing fluff
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I like your voice a lot and hope that this takes off for you. i'm sure there is a pretty big gap in our ages because the words abut cutting yourself kind of leaves me feeling like the rca victor dog with its head tilted. keep writing fluff
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I'm pretty old, hahaha!!! This is very exaggerated and kind of like this guy is a big baby threatening all these things out of frustration. It isn't my usual fare, so agree it's a bit much. mikey
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I figured if he was going to slice himself open he isn't going to be around to have his lady anyway! Thanks for explaining to me---i just figured I was tooo old to relate to that. lol Have a good christmas day and night michael....hope you sing that nice voice again soon. I've been around guitars, singers and bands forever--such as canned heat, procal harem..robin trower personally...and u have a nice voice.
Comment from Zue65
This is another song lyric poetry, but this time it's a rock song. I have to admit, rock. especially with metal rock message like razor bleeding is not my thing. Sorry, I was raised in a conservative culture of the East and as such I can't fathom the use of razor to please a woman. But I do appreciate that the author is a gifted writer.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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This is another song lyric poetry, but this time it's a rock song. I have to admit, rock. especially with metal rock message like razor bleeding is not my thing. Sorry, I was raised in a conservative culture of the East and as such I can't fathom the use of razor to please a woman. But I do appreciate that the author is a gifted writer.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Yes, this isn't my usual fare at all. This is more of a very frustrated person making idle threats for attention. Kind of like, "What do I have to do, cut myself to get through to you?" Not going to do it, but in the heat of his feelings blurting it out for a reaction. Thanks for your insights and the nice compliment. mikey