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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Boneyard"Song lyrics with music attached
20 total reviews
Comment from Realist101
Hello Michael...I am reminded of myself seeking asylum in quiet places for some reason. A graveyard would be quiet. Maybe too quiet. This reads like someone thinking aloud. Musing, if you will. Nice work as always and congrats on this nomination too. Susan
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Hello Michael...I am reminded of myself seeking asylum in quiet places for some reason. A graveyard would be quiet. Maybe too quiet. This reads like someone thinking aloud. Musing, if you will. Nice work as always and congrats on this nomination too. Susan
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Hi. Thank you so much. It's a song. Did you have a chance to listen to the music? It's a little noisey, but it's the best recording I have. :)) mikey
Comment from evilynne
This is beautiful and haunting, well written. The accompanying pictures are wonderful as well. Best of luck in the contest. Evi
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015
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This is beautiful and haunting, well written. The accompanying pictures are wonderful as well. Best of luck in the contest. Evi
Comment Written 17-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much. Did you listen to the music? It's a poor quality tape of me. Hahaha!! I was talked into it. :))
Thank you so much for the wonderful words. mikey
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I'm going to go back to listen to the music. I was a little reluctant to do that because my computer sometimes has a fit and locks on me. But I just have to take a chance! Evi
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
F i n a l l y I a r r i v e!!!
It is a shame not to hear you as clearly as I would have liked to. BUT! I heard enough to know that I likey Mikey. :)))
OK you would have had me screaming in the wings and dying to go to the after party. :)) Cat, Gloria and I could be your back up singers ... I can't play anything musical ... in fact I just remembered ... I can't sing either ... I always wanted to though. :)) Your voice rocks and I enjoyed the guitar playing. I'm so pleased you were challenged to do this... ooooh a Black Russian ... how long since I had one of those?? Too long! Seems I'm doing what you did last night ... now don't jump to conclusions ... cool off ... I mean it's 2.25 am!!! Hee hee! I thought I was going to do a late nighter .... then fell asleep in a heap, tonight it's the heat has me beat ... OMG ... (remind self to not drink coffee so late). I enjoyed the lyrics of self-discovery in an ice cube. Great presentation. The man plays the blues ... and rocks!! Great work sweetie!! Love ya ... hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hi Mikey
F i n a l l y I a r r i v e!!!
It is a shame not to hear you as clearly as I would have liked to. BUT! I heard enough to know that I likey Mikey. :)))
OK you would have had me screaming in the wings and dying to go to the after party. :)) Cat, Gloria and I could be your back up singers ... I can't play anything musical ... in fact I just remembered ... I can't sing either ... I always wanted to though. :)) Your voice rocks and I enjoyed the guitar playing. I'm so pleased you were challenged to do this... ooooh a Black Russian ... how long since I had one of those?? Too long! Seems I'm doing what you did last night ... now don't jump to conclusions ... cool off ... I mean it's 2.25 am!!! Hee hee! I thought I was going to do a late nighter .... then fell asleep in a heap, tonight it's the heat has me beat ... OMG ... (remind self to not drink coffee so late). I enjoyed the lyrics of self-discovery in an ice cube. Great presentation. The man plays the blues ... and rocks!! Great work sweetie!! Love ya ... hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Gee, I'm not behind am I? You don't have to be able to sing, just stand there and look gorgeous. :))
Well, by now we're already watching the secret crush booth. Maybe we were too tame for that one. Dare they challenge us????
Ha!!!! So delighted you approved of this. Whew. This was rather scary to be honest. Thank you sooooo much. mikey
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I've got more behind than your behind. lol
Maybe I can just boogie? Thanks, I just love lookin' gorgeous. :)))
Gosh and I thought I might be a bit risque for a crush!! After all, someone might identify those hands ... ooooh!
Well, pleased to see you pop up in equal lead. I knew I shouldn't have been so tame ... oh well ... sex sells! hee hee! I'm sure we could out-flame them ... then it's a bit like the mink-lined raincoat. (Not that I'd harm a mink). *wink*
I really DO love your voice ... you might have made it to fame and fortune if life hadn't interfered ... never to late. The Jagger still has a pulse. lol Of course there's always song writing ... as in, for REAL!! i think I may have become more musical since I met you. Hahaha! 'Cept for the fog horn voice. Keeping my fingers crossed for The Crush ... and toes and eyeballs. Hahahah! I am so NOT funny. Huge hugs lovely Mikey. xoxox
Comment from Linda Engel
Well this is a catchy little poem. I like the country , folksy feel to the flow of the words. Great imagery of looking, searching, remembering and drinking. Love the last line "layin' in the boneyard all alone. " Great pictures to express it. Linda
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Well this is a catchy little poem. I like the country , folksy feel to the flow of the words. Great imagery of looking, searching, remembering and drinking. Love the last line "layin' in the boneyard all alone. " Great pictures to express it. Linda
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
Comment from amada
Oh, what endearing images. Your work here is such a great combination of music, verses and imagery. For sure a present to the senses. My fave "wonderin' where my place is
seekin' a wink or a smile." Oh yes.
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Oh, what endearing images. Your work here is such a great combination of music, verses and imagery. For sure a present to the senses. My fave "wonderin' where my place is
seekin' a wink or a smile." Oh yes.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
Comment from pierre poote'
i enjoyed your song. the sound effects were cool too. it can be somewhat disturbing to think to long about those alone in the graveyard. we all walk alone
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i enjoyed your song. the sound effects were cool too. it can be somewhat disturbing to think to long about those alone in the graveyard. we all walk alone
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
Comment from CobiDawn
Who cares the sound quality is very good? I like the strum of the guitar and the sound of the wind whistling. This is an interesting piece.
Now you haver me wondering who looks familiar and I want a white Russian.
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Who cares the sound quality is very good? I like the strum of the guitar and the sound of the wind whistling. This is an interesting piece.
Now you haver me wondering who looks familiar and I want a white Russian.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, that was great ...a little trouble hearing you...but I listened to it a few times...always wonder what people on here would sound like...I think most wonder where our places are in life...so very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Michael, that was great ...a little trouble hearing you...but I listened to it a few times...always wonder what people on here would sound like...I think most wonder where our places are in life...so very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
Comment from Gloria ....
I'm giving you top marks for your force of character, determination and moxie. I am a little uncertain about the medieval artwork? Is that medieval or modern? On the other hand it reminds me of George R.R. Martin's best-selling book series "A Song of Ice and Fire". So, it could be that too.
The lyric definitely speaks to desolation and loneliness and he's trying to manage his feelings with alcohol, which almost takes on a country and western tone.
Couple of suggestions:
Just to keep this in line with the first two stanzas, I suggest this small change:
walk into (walkin' in) the local liquor hole
and this one needs an apostrophe. walkin (walkin') in an ice forest.
Regarding your cassette recording: It's got some pretty cool licks, I even recognized a little Hendrix there for a second. Not Purple Haze but something else. And also some new age and techno-pop. Yeeeesss!
Of course the recording isn't clear and hasn't been produced but remarkably even with those limitations. I always like vocals in the foreground.
Exceptional presentation all around my dear. I expect we shall see/hear more of these lyrics coming from your quarter.
You already have groupies, so that is BEST. Super, super job, you!
Gloria
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I'm giving you top marks for your force of character, determination and moxie. I am a little uncertain about the medieval artwork? Is that medieval or modern? On the other hand it reminds me of George R.R. Martin's best-selling book series "A Song of Ice and Fire". So, it could be that too.
The lyric definitely speaks to desolation and loneliness and he's trying to manage his feelings with alcohol, which almost takes on a country and western tone.
Couple of suggestions:
Just to keep this in line with the first two stanzas, I suggest this small change:
walk into (walkin' in) the local liquor hole
and this one needs an apostrophe. walkin (walkin') in an ice forest.
Regarding your cassette recording: It's got some pretty cool licks, I even recognized a little Hendrix there for a second. Not Purple Haze but something else. And also some new age and techno-pop. Yeeeesss!
Of course the recording isn't clear and hasn't been produced but remarkably even with those limitations. I always like vocals in the foreground.
Exceptional presentation all around my dear. I expect we shall see/hear more of these lyrics coming from your quarter.
You already have groupies, so that is BEST. Super, super job, you!
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
Comment from rspoet
This is an intriguing poem/song
I like it more as a song
I wonder what it would sound like
without the sound effect department
Personally, I think it would sound great
love the guitar work
Your place is up at the top
Excellent
Musically, a six
Well done
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This is an intriguing poem/song
I like it more as a song
I wonder what it would sound like
without the sound effect department
Personally, I think it would sound great
love the guitar work
Your place is up at the top
Excellent
Musically, a six
Well done
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015