Christine's Poems
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Good job with the syllable count. The presentation is attractive and the words are well chosen. I know what is like to have a brain drain LOL no fun. Good luck.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
Hello :)
Good job with the syllable count. The presentation is attractive and the words are well chosen. I know what is like to have a brain drain LOL no fun. Good luck.
Gypsy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Hi Gypsy yes often suffer with brain drain and had it when I did this entry late at night after another busy day and then wonder why I am so darned tired LOL Cheers
Comment from Bellringer
Your poem touches that happens in this fast paced world that celebrates multitasking. The word "again" works as a rhyme if pronounced with a long "a" sound (usually pronounced with a short "a"). Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
Your poem touches that happens in this fast paced world that celebrates multitasking. The word "again" works as a rhyme if pronounced with a long "a" sound (usually pronounced with a short "a"). Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Thanks Bellringer for your review and comments and best wishes So glad you could see where I was coming from Cheers
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-six-one, In Over-drive, pretty much explains the state of modern living where everyone is given the capability of doing a dozen things at once and is asked to complete thirteen tasks. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
This one-six-one, In Over-drive, pretty much explains the state of modern living where everyone is given the capability of doing a dozen things at once and is asked to complete thirteen tasks. Nice poem.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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yes you are not wrong Bill I wonder why we have let ourselves get so busy all the time it is often hard to do nothing. Appreciate your time and comments for my 1-6-1 Cheers
Comment from ericawrites
This is a clever 1-6-1 and a worthy entry to the contest.
Complemented by the artwork.
Well done, best of luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
This is a clever 1-6-1 and a worthy entry to the contest.
Complemented by the artwork.
Well done, best of luck in the voting.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Thanks so much ericawrites for your lovely review and best of luck wishes I had fun with this one but was actually in a brain drained state LOL Cheers
Comment from frogbook
I love it. I am having a hard time with this. I thought it would be easy and it's been way harder than I thought, so my hat's off to you for this excellent work.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
I love it. I am having a hard time with this. I thought it would be easy and it's been way harder than I thought, so my hat's off to you for this excellent work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you frogbook for your great feedback and glad you love my entry. sometimes the words just jump out and did write this after a very busy day and was quite tired but couldn't resist one last effort. So your comments really mean a lot Cheers
Comment from tfawcus
Such fermentation of ideas! Such distillation! After all that bubbling and seething, you have delivered a few drops of 'the true, the blushful Hippocrene' enabling you to sink back into a 'drowsy numbness'. May you have sweet dreams of Members Cents tumbling into your coffers as a result of this draining poetic experience.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
Such fermentation of ideas! Such distillation! After all that bubbling and seething, you have delivered a few drops of 'the true, the blushful Hippocrene' enabling you to sink back into a 'drowsy numbness'. May you have sweet dreams of Members Cents tumbling into your coffers as a result of this draining poetic experience.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thanks tfawcus for your very funny but grwat review I enjoyed reading your response and although after a good nights sleep must now continue with another busy day appreciate your time and comments Smiling Cheers Christine😀
Comment from MacMhuirich
LOL, nice entry, the artwork is a brilliant representation of a brain in overdrive. It's a bit disturbing though to see the head opened by a can opener :O Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
LOL, nice entry, the artwork is a brilliant representation of a brain in overdrive. It's a bit disturbing though to see the head opened by a can opener :O Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Hi John Thanks for your review and great comments I did this very late last night and I was literally in brain drain busy day and tired so I must go back and study the image to see what it really looks like LOL ..Always a bit of fun with these ones Cheers
Comment from rspoet
This is a solid entry for the contest
Nice linking of first and last words in brain drain
with an excellent second line to connect all three
Good rhyming of the three words
Excellent art work to go with your poem
Well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
This is a solid entry for the contest
Nice linking of first and last words in brain drain
with an excellent second line to connect all three
Good rhyming of the three words
Excellent art work to go with your poem
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much rspoet for your great review and constructive comments for my fun entry. I was in Brain Drain when I saw this contest so couldn't resist putting my thoughts on paper . appreciate your good wishes too Cheers