Comment from OnyxSapphire78

Excellent

This is so cute. Great job on this fun contest. I wish you good luck. I love how he fell into a drain. This is a lot of fun. Thank you for sharing. Happy writing

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2015

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Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

hello poet

the entry was original
it read well
it had a good ending

thank you for sharing your talent
best of luck with the contest
ann marie

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2015

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Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is a cute little nursery rhyme. (I am wondering, though, why the last line did not rhyme with lines 1 and 2. Kind of frustrating: "Brown - town - train - rain - drain - sea.") Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2015

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Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This does have the feel of an old nursery rhyme with its fun end rhyming. The moral of the story added to the story ending is effective. I see this is for a contest. I wish you luck.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2015

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