Tales Of Darkness And Light
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Tanka(an owl's hoot echoes)"Finding Light Through Shadowed Paths
8 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Anupam
A great entry and fine winner. Yippee ... you second, me third. Congratulations my friend. This is dark and haunting, yet beautiful. In excellent tanka form and an excellent subject. Superb presentation. I'm sorry to ignore your message ... please feel guilt free. I do understand what you mean, both guilt and work busy off-line. Have NO WORRIES. NO need to respond. My pleasure to read ... know you're not alone ... you have friends all over the world. Bask in the glory ... a true tanka my friend.
A beautiful, and sombre, haunting image in your first free lines. Great satori and pivot line. Awakens the audial, and provides the drama element for your response lines. I enjoyed the alliteration of : "shade/sky/silence/shatters/searching plus the consonance of 's'. Also 'a' and 'd' allit and assonance. All provide superb cadence when read aloud. "hoot/echoes/shade/moonless/silence/dreams/darkness - brilliant word use.Love the sight, sound and texture of this excellent poem. I can feel it reverberate within my soul. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
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Hi Anupam
A great entry and fine winner. Yippee ... you second, me third. Congratulations my friend. This is dark and haunting, yet beautiful. In excellent tanka form and an excellent subject. Superb presentation. I'm sorry to ignore your message ... please feel guilt free. I do understand what you mean, both guilt and work busy off-line. Have NO WORRIES. NO need to respond. My pleasure to read ... know you're not alone ... you have friends all over the world. Bask in the glory ... a true tanka my friend.
A beautiful, and sombre, haunting image in your first free lines. Great satori and pivot line. Awakens the audial, and provides the drama element for your response lines. I enjoyed the alliteration of : "shade/sky/silence/shatters/searching plus the consonance of 's'. Also 'a' and 'd' allit and assonance. All provide superb cadence when read aloud. "hoot/echoes/shade/moonless/silence/dreams/darkness - brilliant word use.Love the sight, sound and texture of this excellent poem. I can feel it reverberate within my soul. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your tanka. The presentation is super. I love the color scheme. Good job on the format. Congratulations on your win. I can understand why this was a winner. Good job!
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I enjoyed your tanka. The presentation is super. I love the color scheme. Good job on the format. Congratulations on your win. I can understand why this was a winner. Good job!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hey, Anupam,
I had to throw in my two cents worth, lol.
I loved the introduction describing the nightly setting...the owl's hoot sets the mood and anyone who has ever been startled by this eerie sound will relate to your thought.
Beautiful 'S' sounds throughout the poem, but I really appreciated the idea of searching for our dreams alone...that is the time when a person really has a moment to reflect on the future and their options.
Nice job with this entry, my friend...my best for its success!
Bill
...and, hey, don't worry about the time you have to review, right now. I know how you feel...I'm always playing catch up, also:)
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Hey, Anupam,
I had to throw in my two cents worth, lol.
I loved the introduction describing the nightly setting...the owl's hoot sets the mood and anyone who has ever been startled by this eerie sound will relate to your thought.
Beautiful 'S' sounds throughout the poem, but I really appreciated the idea of searching for our dreams alone...that is the time when a person really has a moment to reflect on the future and their options.
Nice job with this entry, my friend...my best for its success!
Bill
...and, hey, don't worry about the time you have to review, right now. I know how you feel...I'm always playing catch up, also:)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
Comment from JudyS
Anupam, I'm reviewing because I think this poem deserves six stars, and since I haven't posted anything lately, there's no pressure for you to read me, or answer this review. I certainly understand where you're coming from on time restraints. Having said that, I loved this poem and the picture you chose to go along with it. Best of luck in the contest. Judy
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Anupam, I'm reviewing because I think this poem deserves six stars, and since I haven't posted anything lately, there's no pressure for you to read me, or answer this review. I certainly understand where you're coming from on time restraints. Having said that, I loved this poem and the picture you chose to go along with it. Best of luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
Comment from Laurie Keim
I read it and enjoyed it. One question "under shade": shade normally alights on a surface. Perhaps "under" is the wrong preposition.
Following your request not to bother you.
Cheers,
Laurie
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I read it and enjoyed it. One question "under shade": shade normally alights on a surface. Perhaps "under" is the wrong preposition.
Following your request not to bother you.
Cheers,
Laurie
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
Comment from Joyce Long
I really like the picture--black with white eyes. Great poem. Joyce 10-12-15
The computer didn't let me get away with just reading the poem. It said I had to review it. You do not have to answer. I don't see any reason for that, so don't feel guilty. Your poem is cute, but it is sad that you are all alone at night.
Sorry, I had to add to your worries, but please don't answer.
Joyce
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I really like the picture--black with white eyes. Great poem. Joyce 10-12-15
The computer didn't let me get away with just reading the poem. It said I had to review it. You do not have to answer. I don't see any reason for that, so don't feel guilty. Your poem is cute, but it is sad that you are all alone at night.
Sorry, I had to add to your worries, but please don't answer.
Joyce
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
Comment from Julia.
Nice tanka. I particularly liked, "an owl's hoot echoes / beneath shade of moonless sky". Very haunting and lonely, which works well with the second half of the poem, which talks about being "all alone". Good luck in the contest.
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Nice tanka. I particularly liked, "an owl's hoot echoes / beneath shade of moonless sky". Very haunting and lonely, which works well with the second half of the poem, which talks about being "all alone". Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
Comment from Sasha
No need to respond to this. I just wanted to say how much I liked this one. Now I have to babble so the site will accept this as a response. Again, don't bother responding.
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No need to respond to this. I just wanted to say how much I liked this one. Now I have to babble so the site will accept this as a response. Again, don't bother responding.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015