Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Nice song lyric paired wonderfully with artwork. Creative use of wording with good progression, rhythm and flow. Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming. God Bless, Deb

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great last part of the week.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I hope this is a poem and not you my friend. It sounds like the girl's had an affair and is begging her boyfriend to forgive her. Is the song, ' I only want to be with you? Or, 'you are everything? Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Yes, it is.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Clarification is needed here. Are you having personal problems, are you writing about your mate, or child? Your emotions come through strongly. This is very well written with good imagery.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. not autobiographical at all.

reply by c_lucas on 19-Aug-2015

You're welcome, Ine. Charlie

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Ine - an unusual poem from you in good free verse. An appeal to a loved one when the love is over. This, as you say, is a good song lyric. But it is fiction I know and not about you and Robert. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy xx

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. You are right Dorothy.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Ine
These are lovely strong words to put in a song about all the emotions felt when a relationship is on the rocks. I wonder do you know the music that will go with it.?

Well done, and good luck
Mary

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Yes, but I don't know how to put music in.

reply by Jackarrie on 19-Aug-2015

Well good luck with it, mary

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

A song lyric.
You are my everything.
by robina1978

Free verse lyrics about a lover pleading with his lover not to leave. I think many people experience this sort of situation. I know I have. I think you did a good job.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

You captured my attention from the first line to the last. I like the words to your poem/ song.
I can relate to those emotions many years ago.
I thank God I don't feel that pain any more.
Cookie

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

reply by misscookie on 18-Aug-2015

You're very welcome.
Cookie

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

Love and breaking up is a hell all its own, especially when there are no reasons
or explanations that make sense, and so much of oneself has been invested
in that love. This song lyric is deeply emotional, full of pain, hurt and
heartache; which never ever truly heals. Great job on this lyric...
Thanks for sharing....Blessings, Ronni

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Very emotional love song Ine. Breaking up a relationship is always hard, especially
when there is no good reason for it. Love hurts sometimes....
Very well written and a pleasure to read. Fia

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

What a wonderful testimonial to love and the emotion and pleading were so heartfelt that I as a reader could feel what you were telling.
Nicely done

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.