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Doing what is right29 total reviews
Comment from watergirl
This poem is cleverly constructed but with intelligence and meaning. It says so much about our stubbornness and the inevitable lessons to be learned.
It relates to life directly and is a pearl of wisdom. So well done here.
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This poem is cleverly constructed but with intelligence and meaning. It says so much about our stubbornness and the inevitable lessons to be learned.
It relates to life directly and is a pearl of wisdom. So well done here.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, it is an interesting form and you have achieved a clever result here - not only does your poem fulfil the conditions, but it also makes perfect sense and makes a valid point.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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Yes, it is an interesting form and you have achieved a clever result here - not only does your poem fulfil the conditions, but it also makes perfect sense and makes a valid point.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from Senyai
Loannalois! This is pure genius. I will bookcase for further reference. I am carrying your message, word for word (all ten of the weighty nuggets) to my four grandchildren. Perfectly worded. Sigh, wish I had written it.
Best to you in the contest,
Senyai
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Loannalois! This is pure genius. I will bookcase for further reference. I am carrying your message, word for word (all ten of the weighty nuggets) to my four grandchildren. Perfectly worded. Sigh, wish I had written it.
Best to you in the contest,
Senyai
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from Aussie
Best wishes for your contest entry; good to try new ways of writing. I liked the message - our principals are useless unless we put them into practice. Well done poet.
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Best wishes for your contest entry; good to try new ways of writing. I liked the message - our principals are useless unless we put them into practice. Well done poet.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from lightink
This is a very fine antonym poem! Descriptive, humorous yet deep. Also, it sounds very natural! It's hard to believe that this is your first one! Thank you for sharing it!
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This is a very fine antonym poem! Descriptive, humorous yet deep. Also, it sounds very natural! It's hard to believe that this is your first one! Thank you for sharing it!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
There is a singing group called the Oak Ridge boys, you may know them... They sing.. 'If you don't stand for something you'll fall for anything.' Your poem made me think of that. YOur opposing words were perfectly matched.
Great job, good luck
:-) Carolyn
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There is a singing group called the Oak Ridge boys, you may know them... They sing.. 'If you don't stand for something you'll fall for anything.' Your poem made me think of that. YOur opposing words were perfectly matched.
Great job, good luck
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from Leineco
I agree Loanna :-) - I found this form to be a really interesting challenge :-)
I think you did a really great job of circling around and writing a meaningful connection between the two antonyms. Bravo :-)
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I agree Loanna :-) - I found this form to be a really interesting challenge :-)
I think you did a really great job of circling around and writing a meaningful connection between the two antonyms. Bravo :-)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from poetadeu
This is a unique way to use power play
and you have succeeded by the use of 'principles'
and 'forced'. Very strong imagery and should
try creating a contest for this style. Fun to
read the many ideas that emerge.
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This is a unique way to use power play
and you have succeeded by the use of 'principles'
and 'forced'. Very strong imagery and should
try creating a contest for this style. Fun to
read the many ideas that emerge.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
I wonder if lie isn't the opposite of stand, with sit somewhere in between? Just kidding, and since I'm no judge, I'll remark that your antonym poem seems fine to me.
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I wonder if lie isn't the opposite of stand, with sit somewhere in between? Just kidding, and since I'm no judge, I'll remark that your antonym poem seems fine to me.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
Comment from bard owl
This is a very good contest entry, beginning with "sit" and ending with "stand". You offer a bit of sage advice with very few words. This kind of contest is not the easiest because of the enforced length. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda
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This is a very good contest entry, beginning with "sit" and ending with "stand". You offer a bit of sage advice with very few words. This kind of contest is not the easiest because of the enforced length. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015