Comment from ellie6

Excellent

Beautifully illustrated, this haiku seems to have it all. The 5,7,5, metre is well written and the overall sentiment is well expressed. A worthy entry.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you ellie6 for your encouraging comments and I am happy you stopped by for a read greatly appreciated .

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a correct line and syllable count. The imagery is lovely and the kigo certainly stands prominent with a strong and well executed satori to complete the radiant package. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thanks mystic Angel for your review and encouraging words for my Haiku thanks for the good wishes too Cheers. Glad you liked it

Comment from danpald

Excellent

The beauty of the spring
Sings with this poem indeed
Still the end of the season
Brings beauty of the flowers breathing

Well the count of the poem
The contest met with charm
Good luck with the voting
It will be tight I guess

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thanks danpald for your charming review and yes there are some good ones but it's always fun to have a go. Appreciate your time to read and comment. Cheers

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

When I was a child in the Ozarks, these were the first flowers to bloom. Once they raised their heads I was allowed to go barefoot. As you picture poem says, they announce the changing season.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you seaglass for reading and reviewing this Haiku .Yes they always remind me of my childhood also, we had a paddock that always had Daffodils and we would pick bunches and bunches. Cheers

Comment from skye

Excellent

daffodils stand tall
bright and yellow in spring time
seasons changing now

Spring brings these beauties to life and summer burns them up. I love these beauties.
Excellent.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015

Thanks you Skye for reading and giving me a lovely rating and comments. I love them too Cheer

Comment from Julia.

Excellent

Interesting satori line--evoking the idea of what changed with the daffodils and what else has changed. I like the simple, non-flowery (pun-intended) descriptions in the first two lines.

My only suggestion is that you don't need the capital letters in the first two lines. Haiku are typically written with only minimal punctuation, and neither of those words require it.

Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thanks Julia for you review and helpful comments I use a capital on Tall to emphasise the word as they do stand Tall and I thought minimal punctuation and capitals were that it really then should say no capitals ,however I thank you for your comments and will certainly change the capitals. I really appreciate your help

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello and smiles Chrissy710
Like your idea of the change of seasons when the---

Daffodils stand Tall ( fade away and summer will bring new flowers in blooms.

Gert

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Hi Gert , thank you for your review yes Daffodils always bring in a spring feel for me Cheers

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Hello there poet friend.
These are some of my favorite flowers and or plants, they brighten up the environment wherever they are. I enjoyed your poem and wish you the best. Thanks for using my artwork, I am honored. LOyd

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank Loyd for your review and comments I liked your image the best when searching for one for this Haiku entry so thank you again appreciate your work and time

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 12-Jul-2015

You are welcome and I am so glad it was a blessing to you.
May I invite you to also check out my written work here on Fanstory.com?
I would be honored if you have time. Thanks,
Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.

Comment from Sonjalee

Excellent

A good poem using haiku. The syllable count was perfect 5-7-5. It is a nice poem. I cannot think of anything more to say or change it.
You chose beautiful art work.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you Sonjalee for reading this and giving me a review and great rating. Yes I thought this was a lovely image also.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Good

You chose a good subject for the flower haiku - daffodils carry their own kigo! Your first line is strong, but you need to fix the unintentional capitalisation...

However, I felt the rest of the poem didn't live up to the promise - bright and yellow seems lacking in imagination - 'Of course they are,' I wanted to say. The last line too, seems overly explicit - perhaps you could express that idea more poetically - you use the word 'herald' in your sub-title - that may well have appeared here...

Steve

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 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for your review it is appreciated .