Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Interesting artwork for poem.
-You follow the directions in the prompt and format is good.
-Good image in line one and it connects well with line two.
-Line two is effective in presenting a mystery.
-The last line implies that because of the mystery, what "lies ahead" is unknown.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thank you respa1 for giving my poem a review and positive comments re the structure of the words. I' m glad it was effective to you mist always evokes an air of mystery to me so my words were based on my perceptions of this. Cheers and appreciation

reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Jun-2015

You are very welcome.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

I love this haiku. I read it several times to comprehend it. I love your imagery of the mist which "creates mystery unseen / just what lies ahead." This is a delicate haiku. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thanks you Sis Cat for your lovely review and comments. I' m glad you like it Cheers C

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Your haiku has the right amount of syllables, reflects a distilled experience, has a kigo, it has two juxtaposed ideas and it is descriptive. Good job!

the title was suppose to be haiku (first line)

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thanks Gypsy Blue Rose I'm glad it meets requirements and appreciate you reading and reviewing this piece Cheers C

Comment from skye

Excellent

a wintery mist
creates mystery unseen
just what lies ahead

Your title does not follow the rules, but the whole haiku is really great.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you Skye just a little fun creating this glad you stopped by Cheers C

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello author
a good kigo, (winter)
like your satori line of reflection
(creates mystery unseen
just what lies ahead .

Gert

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you Gert I hoped it met the requirements, still learning the rules but having fun too. Cheers C

reply by Gert sherwood on 27-Jun-2015

You are welcome
Gert

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

The winter mist and being unable to see into it, does bring up a sense of mystery.
Your haiku creates a picture of winter that shows how strong winter can be with the mist. One can feel winter's presence.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you mermaids for stopping by to read this and give me a review it is very much appreciated Cheers C

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you mermaids for stopping by to read this and give me a review it is very much appreciated Cheers C

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

I like the selected items poet chose for this work, poetic in intentions, I feel shadow casting ghost by suggested wintery to unseen


a wintery mist
creates mystery unseen
just what lies ahead


what lies ahead creates
unseen mystery just as wintery mist

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you TPAC for your review and comments I appreciate your time Cheers C

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Mystery Author, this is a really wonderful entry for this particular competition,You have certainly stuck to the prompt with your tongue twister, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you Eric for stopping by to read my Haiku entry I appreciate your time and review with you gook luck wishes Cheers C

reply by Eric1 on 27-Jun-2015

You are very welcome my friend

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thanks

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I had some difficulty picking out the haiku because it apparently is entered under fiction instead of poetry, which affects the form. But the haiku seems okay. (I bet you could edit to change the form.) Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thank you Jeanie for reading and reviewing my haiku. Now I know why I had trouble with the format ( a late at night entry and I couldn't work out why it kept looking different. I will see if I can change the form .really appreciate your tips. Cheers

reply by Jeanie Mercer on 28-Jun-2015

This looks very nice now. I'm glad you edited it. Doesn't morning make a difference!

reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Yes it does, must admit a little addicted to this but having so much fun, haven't written so much for a long time