Dr. Howler's Nightmares
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Dinner Guest"A collection of most unusual bedtime stories
16 total reviews
Comment from Judgement Dave
'George' is a great name for a T-Rex!
Quite fun if gruesome little story.
Not sure if it was intentional or not, but there's lots of humour derived from trying to picture a T-Rex doing all those things with such (relatively) short, stumpy arms!
Cheers
JD
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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'George' is a great name for a T-Rex!
Quite fun if gruesome little story.
Not sure if it was intentional or not, but there's lots of humour derived from trying to picture a T-Rex doing all those things with such (relatively) short, stumpy arms!
Cheers
JD
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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I thought so too, when I named him George Windsor. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Joyce Crowe
You definitiely achieve your purpose of telling horror stories that would give anybody nightmares, but to gory for me. I am sure that some children may enjoy them.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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You definitiely achieve your purpose of telling horror stories that would give anybody nightmares, but to gory for me. I am sure that some children may enjoy them.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much indeed.
Comment from tfawcus
This should give the little darlings a few nightmares. Even more ghoulish than the Brothers Grimm in the unexpurgated edition! On the whole a book that few grandparents would buy for their grandchildren, I'm afraid - though bound to appeal to young monsters with pocket money, for whom nothing is too bloodthirsty.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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This should give the little darlings a few nightmares. Even more ghoulish than the Brothers Grimm in the unexpurgated edition! On the whole a book that few grandparents would buy for their grandchildren, I'm afraid - though bound to appeal to young monsters with pocket money, for whom nothing is too bloodthirsty.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your comments and support. Appreciate them indeed. I will let Doctor Howler see your comments as well.
Comment from Jay Squires
A good story, Brett, the kiddies can really sink their teeth into.
Now, George was a young dinosaur, however, he was also, unfortunately, a meat eater. [A bit of a run-on sentence, Brett. You should have punctuation other than a comma after dinosaur.]
See, George's advertising campaign had only been a ruse to attract meals to his dinner table. [Just a suggestion to accept or reject. I believe the reader already knows this.
They were the only part of his guest's body George never developed a taste for. [A funny line.]
Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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A good story, Brett, the kiddies can really sink their teeth into.
Now, George was a young dinosaur, however, he was also, unfortunately, a meat eater. [A bit of a run-on sentence, Brett. You should have punctuation other than a comma after dinosaur.]
See, George's advertising campaign had only been a ruse to attract meals to his dinner table. [Just a suggestion to accept or reject. I believe the reader already knows this.
They were the only part of his guest's body George never developed a taste for. [A funny line.]
Good job.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Thank you for your review. Changed as you suggested. Appreciate your comments and support. Do you believe I should eliminate the "See, George's advertising..." line or maybe rephrase that one?
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If it is an observation by the author, I feel it should be removed. If it can be modified to come from the voice of the dinosaur, then it could be kept. Again, Brett, I'm just giving my impression.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Brett. Your background blurb right above your post states: A collection of children's bedtime stories suitable for all ages. I'm not so sure about that, my friend. Now my kids, I would have read this story to, and they would have laughed their little hineys off. But then again, that's my kids I'm talking about. For most children, what with all of the torture, dissections, scalpings and gore, many might not deem it too appropriate for their own children.
You also might like to consider posting a warning for violent content that the site provides. You know, give prospective readers a heads-up as to what they'll be in for, so to speak.
As for me, I liked the story, and I thought it was pretty funny. Oh sure, what self-respecting dinosaur owns his own telephone, right? I get that. But it's fantasy horror fiction laced with a bit of dark humor, not biographical non-fiction. In fiction, especially of the fantasy and horror genres, anything can happen, and usually does!
Well done...~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Well, Brett. Your background blurb right above your post states: A collection of children's bedtime stories suitable for all ages. I'm not so sure about that, my friend. Now my kids, I would have read this story to, and they would have laughed their little hineys off. But then again, that's my kids I'm talking about. For most children, what with all of the torture, dissections, scalpings and gore, many might not deem it too appropriate for their own children.
You also might like to consider posting a warning for violent content that the site provides. You know, give prospective readers a heads-up as to what they'll be in for, so to speak.
As for me, I liked the story, and I thought it was pretty funny. Oh sure, what self-respecting dinosaur owns his own telephone, right? I get that. But it's fantasy horror fiction laced with a bit of dark humor, not biographical non-fiction. In fiction, especially of the fantasy and horror genres, anything can happen, and usually does!
Well done...~Dean
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thanks for your review. What I am trying to create by saying "Suitable for all children" is a tongue-in-check comment from "Doctor Howler," its supposed writer. Any ideas how to better convey that thought? Your comments are always more than welcome here with me and very much appreciated too. Yes, I tried to write some humor in this one as well, as it is about Prince George, and was inspired by several articles in those "famous" British tabloids.
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Well, if you want to remain true to the tongue-and-cheekiness, I would simply state, Not so suitable for children of all ages, Brett. A lot of folks are going to see that and "think" you said "Suitable for children of all ages." Our mind sees and processes things the ways in which we're used to seeing things, not always as it is presented. Subliminal messaging, for example. That's all I would do to change it, which really isn't a very big change at all. But it does have a huge different in connotation, LOL.
~Dean
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Done, and thanks as always.
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No problem, my friend.
~Dean :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is very well written and an engaging read BUT it would not be my pick for a bedtime story for anyone of any age LOL. It is technically sound and progresses in a logical manner. I took the simplicity of the verbiage to maintain the aura of a bedtime story and felt it consistently well executed throughout. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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This is very well written and an engaging read BUT it would not be my pick for a bedtime story for anyone of any age LOL. It is technically sound and progresses in a logical manner. I took the simplicity of the verbiage to maintain the aura of a bedtime story and felt it consistently well executed throughout. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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Afraid this one might cause nightmares? Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from benoenose
A motivating story of the olden age, particularly children will find taste to read this more. The efforts of the writer with a highly imaginative power, discovers this great story.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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A motivating story of the olden age, particularly children will find taste to read this more. The efforts of the writer with a highly imaginative power, discovers this great story.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Brett. This is another great piece mate. It is again very well written and I couldn't spot any mistakes. It is certainly a different bedtime story, but if I had to live at Buckingham Palace I'd probably sleep with the light on anyway LOL. Cheers and keep them coming, Fez
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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G'day Brett. This is another great piece mate. It is again very well written and I couldn't spot any mistakes. It is certainly a different bedtime story, but if I had to live at Buckingham Palace I'd probably sleep with the light on anyway LOL. Cheers and keep them coming, Fez
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thanks as always. Really appreciate your comments indeed. Have heard, and read, mostly in the tabloids, of other activities Camilla Parker is supposed to have been involved in. Just something different.
Comment from Joan E.
Your bloody T-Rex picture selection certainly reinforces your tale well. Tourists for the "menu" and "snacks"--what a "ruse"! Thanks for sharing your inspiration for this ditty in your notes--I had no idea about these rumors. -Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Your bloody T-Rex picture selection certainly reinforces your tale well. Tourists for the "menu" and "snacks"--what a "ruse"! Thanks for sharing your inspiration for this ditty in your notes--I had no idea about these rumors. -Joan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Appreciate your comments and support very much indeed.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, matthew, your little details about the way she dissected the body for her dinner was amazing, I love your author notes. I saw that on the tabloids but I don't believe a word of it, lol. as for dining choices, I tried camel yesterday. it was touch but I didn't gag on it.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, matthew, your little details about the way she dissected the body for her dinner was amazing, I love your author notes. I saw that on the tabloids but I don't believe a word of it, lol. as for dining choices, I tried camel yesterday. it was touch but I didn't gag on it.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Problem with tabloids is you never know what to believe. They slant stories to sell copies. However, this little tribute was just there. So I wrote it. Glad you enjoyed.