As I Dance
Seeing the newness of color in me41 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
The picture of the rainbow was really beautiful. I liked the light blue background and the way the words danced on my tongue. This is very good poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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The picture of the rainbow was really beautiful. I liked the light blue background and the way the words danced on my tongue. This is very good poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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My sincere thanks!
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Very creative approach to the contest subject. I think it is a lovely idea to dance in rains of colors. There is enough blackness in the world. Well done.
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Very creative approach to the contest subject. I think it is a lovely idea to dance in rains of colors. There is enough blackness in the world. Well done.
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Blessings and thanks!!!
Comment from DreamtwithClarity
I really enjoy the story inside this. From the past to the present the transition it had. From colorless to colorful you seem to have been and that is through the One who can save. I like the not so hidden message inside and the intentions that you had in writing this. Good work - D.O.
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I really enjoy the story inside this. From the past to the present the transition it had. From colorless to colorful you seem to have been and that is through the One who can save. I like the not so hidden message inside and the intentions that you had in writing this. Good work - D.O.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
Comment from Dawny53
Hello Loanna.. I can certainly see why you have these ribbons gracing your poem.. it really is written well.. full of hope, and, as you put it.. full of lovely colors..
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Hello Loanna.. I can certainly see why you have these ribbons gracing your poem.. it really is written well.. full of hope, and, as you put it.. full of lovely colors..
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
Comment from rjuselius
This is a beautiful poem dear friend! I like the way you create an imagery that encloses the rainbow. I just wish you would have been more playful with the colors or hues. Just to keep you guessing the topic.
Anyhoo. Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Good luck with the contest!
Rebekka x
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This is a beautiful poem dear friend! I like the way you create an imagery that encloses the rainbow. I just wish you would have been more playful with the colors or hues. Just to keep you guessing the topic.
Anyhoo. Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Good luck with the contest!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
Comment from RGstar
If this is not up there challenging for the win, I would like to know why.
Beautifully delivered with a potent poetic ambiance surrounding.
I liked his from start to finish. This is deserved of six stars.
My best wishes, and good luck.
RGstar
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If this is not up there challenging for the win, I would like to know why.
Beautifully delivered with a potent poetic ambiance surrounding.
I liked his from start to finish. This is deserved of six stars.
My best wishes, and good luck.
RGstar
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
LoannaLois this is really beautiful - a lovely entry into the contest. I particularly like your lines following - For I lived in that world of black. You give lovely of examples of a good use of metaphor on the lines following that one. A lovely read. Good Luck in the contest. Warm ergards Dorothy x
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LoannaLois this is really beautiful - a lovely entry into the contest. I particularly like your lines following - For I lived in that world of black. You give lovely of examples of a good use of metaphor on the lines following that one. A lovely read. Good Luck in the contest. Warm ergards Dorothy x
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
Comment from Pantygynt
This brings to mind a performance of Benjamin Brittain's opera for children "Noyes Fludde". In the finale, all the cast of Noah's family and the animals is gathered oon stage and the rainbow appears. Often this a multicoloured fanlike device, but in this one production the effect was created by rainbow-hued dancers waving long broad ribbons. I twas fantastic for both colour and movement.
Throughout your poem I kept conjuring up the image of that performance. Well done with this piece of writing.
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This brings to mind a performance of Benjamin Brittain's opera for children "Noyes Fludde". In the finale, all the cast of Noah's family and the animals is gathered oon stage and the rainbow appears. Often this a multicoloured fanlike device, but in this one production the effect was created by rainbow-hued dancers waving long broad ribbons. I twas fantastic for both colour and movement.
Throughout your poem I kept conjuring up the image of that performance. Well done with this piece of writing.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
Comment from gypsymoth
Nicely done. I can't imagine life without color. I hope the blind
are compensated some how for having to go through life without
color.
Gypsymoth
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Nicely done. I can't imagine life without color. I hope the blind
are compensated some how for having to go through life without
color.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Loanna....
_ Fun take on the rainbow as ribbons and incorporating it into the dance.
_ Well penned and presented entry.
_ Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Hi, Loanna....
_ Fun take on the rainbow as ribbons and incorporating it into the dance.
_ Well penned and presented entry.
_ Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015