Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Cute story. I didn't expect the end. The story flowed well. The format was good. Good picture that goes we'll with the story. Good story line. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review Gypsy Blue Rose, my sister once bought an old house and when she was renovating she found a stash of money behind the wall. I love story of lucky finds, cheers j

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct word count and a complete story. This had a wonderful turn at the end as it leaves the reader with the hope that all will now be well. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

I always love stories of lucky finds, my sister bought an old house and when she was redoing the chimney, a stash of money was revealed. Joe was happy to quiet his fiancee and I hope he doesn't tell his cousin, thanks for the review, cheers

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Happy ending may be the way to go for this ultra-short format.

You manage to tell the whole story here in a nutshell. Possibly a few words of dialog at the beginning may have spiced it up a little.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Dang, I never remember dialogue and I see how it could have spiced up this poem, thanks for the helpful review kiwisteveh, I will remember next time, cheers

Comment from Tatarka2

Excellent

I thought this was a complete story in just 100 words - well done! It did seem just a tiny bit unbelievable, though. I'll be eager to see what other contestants come up with, too.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review. My sister bought an old house and started to redo the chimney and found all this money stashed there. I love lucky finds.Cheers

Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

A least there was a happy ending to this piece, I could imagine clearly his fiancées rage when she discovered that he had no money a week before their wedding. Good writing throughout, I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 31-May-2015

Thanks Jacob for your review.Just don't tell the cousin, hah cheers j

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

This was a good entry into the 100 word competition.
Although, if I was Joe, I would have made sure that I got all of those coins out of there rather than just the one!

Fits the prompt and the writing was engaging as was the story. Nice one.

GMG

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 31-May-2015

Joe maybe just wanted to shut his fiancee up and now knew where the rest of the coins were stashed..don't tell his cousin..100 words remember, thanks for the review, cheers