Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

So if you have a bucket list, now do them one by one,
Don't worry what the others think go out and just have fun.

These two lines sum up the poem very well. I am getting to the point in life where I don't give a flip if someone like me or my words. I know I want to write and write I will until I can no longer think of things to write about, for I am doing my bucket list. Patricia

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 15-May-2015

Thank you for you great feedback and yes life is too short to always do the 'right' thing I guess that's the rebellious side in me enjoy your bucket list cheers christine

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This poem made me laugh, but also made me turn red as I do a few on the list already lol. I ogle all the boys and I don't watch any news. I don't even know who won the general election lol. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you so much for you comments sometimes I think we get caught up in the political correctness or what is considered " right" I would love to be more of a free spirit so can do so through my inner self

Cheers Christine

Comment from Lesley Collier

Excellent

A great poem of letting go and following your heart's desires while you are still young enough to enjoy life to the fullest. A good lesson for all of us in our doting age. A nice flow and use of ryhme!

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you for your lovely comments I enjoyed writing this and let's me release my inner thoughts. Cheers Christine

Comment from pharp

Excellent

Excellent, great job my friend. This poem was an easy read, smooth flow, excellent rhyming and rhythm. I enjoyed this great poem that had me laughing at times. Thanks for sharing. Pharp

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you so much for you lovely comments I am glad I made you laugh I don't take myself too seriously and often find every day events quite humorous I am new to this site so just getting familiar with how it all works look forward to being part of it and reading other people's work also thanks again. Cheers Christine

Comment from 4hisglory

Excellent

I probably wouldn't do all those things, but I agree that we need to enjoy life more and live like we may die tomorrow. I think I would try to love more and overlook the shortcomings of others. My bed usually gets made when I'm ready to get in it.

I love the rhyming and the flow of your poem. It's like you could almost sing it. Very well done. Blessings, LaVonne

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you so much for you review I have just discovered this site tonight and appreciate the feedback and hope I can improve my style etc I am a bit cynical at times but a bit tongue in cheek also I find writing therapeutic and fun thanks again. Cheers Christine

reply by 4hisglory on 13-May-2015

Welcome to the site. You will have fun here.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I always like rhyming poems, I detest free verse and blank verse. Your rhyming was great and the story line fun. It is good to have a rant and write about it. Your poem does need editing, I have done most of it for you below. I like to encourage and not subtract stars! You could also improve it a lot by getting an even meter in your poem. If you would care to look at my portfolio, I write mainly in 8/8 meter, sometimes 10/8 (ten syllables first line, 8 the second etc.) Here are the corrections: title should read I'd.
I think line 3 of verse one sounds better: I'd walk out in the rain with no umbrella overhead. Verse 2. hello to strangers...........its lovely perfume (it's =it is). Verse 3, dog. Verse 4, Baa Baa black sheep. Verse 6, better to say, nor would I make the bed.......Verse 8, ogle. Verse 10 P's and Q's. Enjoyable read. As you are new to the site I would be very happy to help you. Your poem would benefit an illustration, do you know how to add one? Faye

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you so much for that feedback and I will make the corrections . Yes I am new to this site and although I have written many poems all my life I have never had any lessons in how to make the corrects punctuations etc so I generally just write from the heart and hope it sounds and read reasonable well . Not sure what you mean about meter and syllables I would like some guidance on poetry structure. Also I like rhyming poems too although have had a go at writing non rhyming ones unsure how they went and no do not know how to add an illustration look forward to you help. Thanks again Christine

reply by Nosha17 on 13-May-2015

Hi, Christine, If you read some of my poems in my portfolio you will get the feel of the rhythm, a bit like a song or a lyrical poem like Wordsworth's Daffodils. That is written with 8 syllables to the line-an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed one: I wandered lonely as a cloud. Adding pictures, go to your portfolio, click on the right poem and click edit. It will bring you to the new version of fanstory (I still use the classical version, easier to follow and navigate, but editing can only be done in new fanstory)It will say image: click on select from your computer ( I always have a huge supply of images, photos of my own on the desktop or in a folder) Click on browse, on there your desktop image or folder will appear, click on the correct file and then click upload. It will then ask you if you see your image, click continue. Then the text of your poem will already be there, so go to bottom and click save. That is it. If you don't have any pictures you can get free ones from pixabay.com-I think they charge from fanartreview, but I am not sure. Let me know how it goes. Good luck, Faye

reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thanks Faye I will enjoy your feedback and will follow your advice how do I preview your portfolio? So I can read your poems cheers Chris

reply by Nosha17 on 13-May-2015

Hi, Chris, click on profile at the top of the page, then click on find a member-I am Nosha17, click on N and find me. Then click on portfolio at top of page, it should work. Many of my poems I have removed as they are being published in a 65 poem book this summer. I am very happy I can be of help to you. I was new once, not that long ago and it is baffling. Faye