haiku(Dust Bowl and)
contest entry/READ AUTHOR NOTES3 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
To me this is very nice, I remember reading about the Dust Bowl and I have photos from a book, some stayed in cardboard houses, it is so sad. I never realized how bad this country was at times until I started reading different
materials. If it not one thing, than it is another that keeps a person down.
You have the correct amount of syllable for a 3-9-3.
Good luck with you haiku.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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To me this is very nice, I remember reading about the Dust Bowl and I have photos from a book, some stayed in cardboard houses, it is so sad. I never realized how bad this country was at times until I started reading different
materials. If it not one thing, than it is another that keeps a person down.
You have the correct amount of syllable for a 3-9-3.
Good luck with you haiku.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your time reading/reviewing my haiku. It means a lot to me.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
This is a different take on a poem for this contest and I like it. For that reason alone you should do just fine, great job and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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This is a different take on a poem for this contest and I like it. For that reason alone you should do just fine, great job and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your time reading/reviewing my poem.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You have met the contest requirements nicely. I like your interesting twist to this prompt as it stands out and the satori is stunning - might I suggest a couple of changes?
Dust bowl
where bureaucratic cruelty ignites
grapes of wrath ............. present tense lends more impact to the satori and the first line ends cleaner yet still connects with the second line. Just a thought.
I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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You have met the contest requirements nicely. I like your interesting twist to this prompt as it stands out and the satori is stunning - might I suggest a couple of changes?
Dust bowl
where bureaucratic cruelty ignites
grapes of wrath ............. present tense lends more impact to the satori and the first line ends cleaner yet still connects with the second line. Just a thought.
I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thank you. I appreciate your review and helpful info.