Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Born Enemies: New Tactics"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
18 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, I really enjoy this write as you lace in history with fiction but making it seem so real. It is classy and communicates the human condition deeply. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, I really enjoy this write as you lace in history with fiction but making it seem so real. It is classy and communicates the human condition deeply. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from seaglass
All well done battle strategy in process. This plot could lend it's self to many scenarios.
While researching Scottish clan history for my genealogy I read that the old Scottish clans fought bloody wars with each other for year and then decide to join ranks against another clan.
They sealed the agreement by each chief forcing a son or daughter to marry the other's son or daughter. The shared grandchcildren bonded them together.
Can't help but wonder what those marriages must have been like. Talk about "inlaw issues".
Also Viking, notorious for swiping young women for wives created the present population on Iceland and Greenland.
Some research needed here, my limited info came from watching one show on the history channel.
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All well done battle strategy in process. This plot could lend it's self to many scenarios.
While researching Scottish clan history for my genealogy I read that the old Scottish clans fought bloody wars with each other for year and then decide to join ranks against another clan.
They sealed the agreement by each chief forcing a son or daughter to marry the other's son or daughter. The shared grandchcildren bonded them together.
Can't help but wonder what those marriages must have been like. Talk about "inlaw issues".
Also Viking, notorious for swiping young women for wives created the present population on Iceland and Greenland.
Some research needed here, my limited info came from watching one show on the history channel.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
really love how these words just drew on ones senses straight away an enemy approach make itself manifest.very beautifully penned as always pal most enjoyable read
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really love how these words just drew on ones senses straight away an enemy approach make itself manifest.very beautifully penned as always pal most enjoyable read
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from adewpearl
They over lapped in their attack - overlapped
Good use of dialogue that sounds like soldiers strategizing and preparing for battle - it also conveys emotions of urgency well
good background material for your characters
good pacing leading up to the battle to come
Brooke
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They over lapped in their attack - overlapped
Good use of dialogue that sounds like soldiers strategizing and preparing for battle - it also conveys emotions of urgency well
good background material for your characters
good pacing leading up to the battle to come
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
Comment from faragon
The story is progressing nicely. I like how you recap at the beginning of each chapter. I also enjoy the battle strategies of both generals told simultaneously.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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The story is progressing nicely. I like how you recap at the beginning of each chapter. I also enjoy the battle strategies of both generals told simultaneously.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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That's good to hear. It is a good way for me to have it unfold. I'm bad with time and distance and all that. So, having it happen kind of all at the same time keeps me from forgetting something major. Thank you, mikey
Comment from Sasha
I like the way you are presenting this. You are keeping me anxious about what is to happen. Great writing. I found one small nit you may or may not want to look at:
Destiny awaits no man! ...not sure this works, possible Destiny awaits would make more sense...just a suggestion.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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I like the way you are presenting this. You are keeping me anxious about what is to happen. Great writing. I found one small nit you may or may not want to look at:
Destiny awaits no man! ...not sure this works, possible Destiny awaits would make more sense...just a suggestion.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Glad you're liking it. It's actually keeping me on my toes for a change. I have to use my little brain to remember where everyone is and how they are progressing etc. Ahhhhh!!! It's almost like work! I'll look at that line. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Glad you did, Mikey. Great story, and I've missed it. Sorry if you're having connection or computer problems. "Get well soon" message from me to your electronic pals. :)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Glad you did, Mikey. Great story, and I've missed it. Sorry if you're having connection or computer problems. "Get well soon" message from me to your electronic pals. :)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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My neighbors finally got to meet me after two years. Ha! Actually internet is part of my pay. That is the problem with my broke boss! Soon, I hope. He's a great guy, but not too business savvy. Can't complain though, a free house with crazy people to entertain me! mikey
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a free house????
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Well, I don't pay rent or utilities. I should get paid, but I'd take care of the folks anyway. He's a good guy and has sacrificed a lot when others would have put everyone out on the street, so no complaints. :)
Comment from ravenblack
I have to admit, I got a little lost in this one. Once the focus is off vision and sound, unfamiliar (not just new characters, but linguistically unfamiliar ) names were hard to keep track of. Just wondering- is this battle modeled after a historic battle?
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I have to admit, I got a little lost in this one. Once the focus is off vision and sound, unfamiliar (not just new characters, but linguistically unfamiliar ) names were hard to keep track of. Just wondering- is this battle modeled after a historic battle?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Very well written, devising a battle strategy is no mean feat. I liked all the diversions to fool the enemy. Interesting to see how it progresses. Good dialogue and great story. Faye
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Very well written, devising a battle strategy is no mean feat. I liked all the diversions to fool the enemy. Interesting to see how it progresses. Good dialogue and great story. Faye
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
Comment from Loren (7)
The tension builds, you are good at that as well as the authenticity of battle strategy and commands. Your language of the times is definitely improving. Can't wait until the battle begins. Hope you're back on line soon. Libraries are a great place to be, however. Loren
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The tension builds, you are good at that as well as the authenticity of battle strategy and commands. Your language of the times is definitely improving. Can't wait until the battle begins. Hope you're back on line soon. Libraries are a great place to be, however. Loren
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
