Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Born Enemies"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
24 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
truly mikey excellent story telling almost felt part of it really most enjoyable piece of reading always a great pleasure pal sorry catching up myself way behind passing you a big smile
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truly mikey excellent story telling almost felt part of it really most enjoyable piece of reading always a great pleasure pal sorry catching up myself way behind passing you a big smile
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from faragon
I think the story is progressing nicely and at a good pace. There seems to be alot of ground to cover since you are spanning the decades and the different histories. That takes time to ensure that each era has its own telling.
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I think the story is progressing nicely and at a good pace. There seems to be alot of ground to cover since you are spanning the decades and the different histories. That takes time to ensure that each era has its own telling.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from Linda Engel
The slave girl and the warrior ( a little fantasy?:) Good that you made her a strong woman, a woman of means and education. AND I like that he feels a connection with her and that rape is not a want. He wants her to come willingly , wanting him. And of course there is always another woman just waiting in the wings willing to fill in.
a very good chapter, enjoyed.
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The slave girl and the warrior ( a little fantasy?:) Good that you made her a strong woman, a woman of means and education. AND I like that he feels a connection with her and that rape is not a want. He wants her to come willingly , wanting him. And of course there is always another woman just waiting in the wings willing to fill in.
a very good chapter, enjoyed.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
This was a very engaging chapter, Mikey. I do believe we share a close connection with those whom we've shared a past life. You do a good job portraying that with Allutia and Tibertin. Your author's notes indicate your story is going slower than normal. Don't rush it. Go with your muse.
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This was a very engaging chapter, Mikey. I do believe we share a close connection with those whom we've shared a past life. You do a good job portraying that with Allutia and Tibertin. Your author's notes indicate your story is going slower than normal. Don't rush it. Go with your muse.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this has almost an Ester feel to it. I really found the writing well worth your extra effort. It truly flows with intention and forethought. I like this style, my friend. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this has almost an Ester feel to it. I really found the writing well worth your extra effort. It truly flows with intention and forethought. I like this style, my friend. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This was a well written chapter, you incorporated the tender moments well into your story. The characters are really likeable, even Tibertin has his tender side. The fact that she is rising in the ranks is a good move, I am sure she will progress to being even more in favour. Enjoyable read. Faye
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This was a well written chapter, you incorporated the tender moments well into your story. The characters are really likeable, even Tibertin has his tender side. The fact that she is rising in the ranks is a good move, I am sure she will progress to being even more in favour. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from robina1978
I love the chapter, and I gather most do. I think he fancies two different women at the same time. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed the read.
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I love the chapter, and I gather most do. I think he fancies two different women at the same time. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
Hmm..Feelings seem to be getting in Tibertan's way, blocking his more hormonal way of tending to business. That can be a problem as now, Allutia has the upper hand, even though she is the slave or chattel. You may be having a difficult time writing right now, but it is going very well for the readers.
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Hmm..Feelings seem to be getting in Tibertan's way, blocking his more hormonal way of tending to business. That can be a problem as now, Allutia has the upper hand, even though she is the slave or chattel. You may be having a difficult time writing right now, but it is going very well for the readers.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from Sankey
We are getting there slowly. Bit different to tales of the Bard what. At least we can't 'stereotype' ya as a writer what!
Some spags for ya.
victor goes the goods and holdings of the victor. (conquered)
It is just so amusing watching you(-r) dance to your enemy.
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We are getting there slowly. Bit different to tales of the Bard what. At least we can't 'stereotype' ya as a writer what!
Some spags for ya.
victor goes the goods and holdings of the victor. (conquered)
It is just so amusing watching you(-r) dance to your enemy.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Looks and reads pretty tight. This is way back -- 700 BC. Kind of like tereforming a planet. From the beginning, the ameba, parasites, single celled organisms. I like this civilization thing. was interesting, holding my attention quite well. Good imagination. Nice prose. Count your doubloon. wackydo
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Looks and reads pretty tight. This is way back -- 700 BC. Kind of like tereforming a planet. From the beginning, the ameba, parasites, single celled organisms. I like this civilization thing. was interesting, holding my attention quite well. Good imagination. Nice prose. Count your doubloon. wackydo
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
