Comment from nannabot

Exceptional

Hi, really liked this poem. Every thing to spec, format and syllable count. Both stanzas very well expressed, separate yet linked to central theme of 'lake'
I see irony along with some light humour, 'Dragon flies no more' a great line. It says to me; "Well, that's the nature of nature for ya! It leaves no prisoners" Survival is the pivotal driving force. A case of being in the wrong place at the right time. Great read. xxxxxxxx

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks for this wonderful review and awesome rating. Yes it was a fun one to write. When my muse fails me I turn to prompts. :-) They somehow provide 'fuel' for the fire.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

Perfect syllable count per line. Sounds like you were visiting our Lake Martin. It is such a beautiful place. I love the line 'dragon flies no more.' LOL

Excellent poem which paints a picture in the reader's mind.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks for this great review. I didn't win but it was a fun poem to write. :-) Carolyn

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Dragonflies whiz by, indeed these are two very nice expressed Haiku poems, Good luck at the contest, God bless you'Hugs!lakeport.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks E. I appreciate the great review. :-) Carolyn

reply by lakeport on 08-Sep-2014

your welcome,Hugs!lakeport.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

This is a very nice double poem. As usual you've done a great job on it. I enjoyed the read very much and look forward to what you'll write next.

Kat

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks Kat, I enjoyed this one. Didn't win. I guess most folks don't vote. But it was a fun one to write. Hope you are doing well. Love, Carolyn

Comment from Rosalyne

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn.
This is a beautiful poem, showing such wonderful visions. I could easily see both through your words, great imagery used.
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks Rosalyne,
I'm glad you liked this one, I appreciate the great remarks.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To notesandmore,
Precious moments are caught as Mother Nature reveals to us the need to satisfy oneself by enjoyment of a lucrative day picking berries beside a water's edge.
Charlene

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks Charlene for such a wonderful review of this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from 9999pool

Exceptional

Beautiful Haiku on the dragonflies and blackberries. The food chain and nature continue along the course of life. We cannot stop the flow of life as it unfolds each day. We can only pause and wonder where everything is taking us.
Nature has been there to fulfill our need and consumption.
The bass leaps and catches the dragonfly while the birds consume the berries. But both will reproduce to replace the loss and really nothing is loss in life as long as nature breathes and reproduce, but it is a cycle we must respect and not overdo.
Excellent write and well expressed the daily existence we experience until we perish as well, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs and love, bro Richie. :))

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Hi there, where have you been? LOL Hiding out again I bet.
Thank you Ritchie for this great review. I am so happy you liked it. It is kind of funny. I have at this moment 28 fabulous reviews, some sixers and only 2 votes at the booth. It was a fun poem to write. Nature is full of subject matter.
Write something special so I can read your fine work again. I miss that.
Love, Carolyn

reply by 9999pool on 08-Sep-2014

You are welcome.
I will be back in a few weeks, smiles.
Have a great week ahead.
Cheerio, Richie. :))

P.S. you might have noticed that I have dropped the "t" from my nickname, smiles.

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

I could easily believe you painted this word picture right in my locality. All that you described can be seen on any summer afternoon at our little lake.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks, as a matter of fact, since I wrote this for the contest I have been thinking of painting a picture as well. Your fine comments are appreciated. :-) Carolyn

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

Berries hanging lush a ripe, great line. As I read your poem it reminded me of my summers a child. Wonderfully written poem. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for this wonderful review. I am glad it made you think of your childhood. :-) Carolyn

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

This is an interesting prompt and there are some excellent entries. I didn't count syllables, but did look for the poetic devices in the two three line poems as well as the attention to the imagery as described in the prompt. My only suggestion would be to create two grammatically interconnected lines in each of the stanzas as opposed to three separate thoughts, which seems a bit choppy to me. Good luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thanks Sue for this thoughtful review. :-) Carolyn