haiku (trudging up the hill)
an ant at work31 total reviews
Comment from A Jesterstear
A nice humorous little Haiku. I fell asleep once by a lagoon
in Shark Bay, Western Australia. When I woke up there were thousands of large ants trying to carry me off. They must have thought all their birthdays had come at once. Regards. AJ.
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A nice humorous little Haiku. I fell asleep once by a lagoon
in Shark Bay, Western Australia. When I woke up there were thousands of large ants trying to carry me off. They must have thought all their birthdays had come at once. Regards. AJ.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from Liisa
Wonderful! I love haikus, and yours is funny and charming. I like M&M's too! I once used to write some haikus but I've lost that specific little book they were in, I guess I should write new ones. Thanks for sharing this, very nice :-)
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Wonderful! I love haikus, and yours is funny and charming. I like M&M's too! I once used to write some haikus but I've lost that specific little book they were in, I guess I should write new ones. Thanks for sharing this, very nice :-)
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from Zue65
You followed the rules for writing a haiku and you complied with the rules of the writing prompt. You delivered the lines and described the ants at work as it is, in their familiar habitat where they carry sweets from whatever source. Excellent write indeed.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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You followed the rules for writing a haiku and you complied with the rules of the writing prompt. You delivered the lines and described the ants at work as it is, in their familiar habitat where they carry sweets from whatever source. Excellent write indeed.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you for writing...I love watching critters
Comment from Christine B.
I like the way this shows exchange between delicate creature and observant human. Adorable, and it(with your Author Notes)made me giggle. The image is too cute, too.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I like the way this shows exchange between delicate creature and observant human. Adorable, and it(with your Author Notes)made me giggle. The image is too cute, too.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thanks for such kind words...blessings
Comment from amahra
Nice haiku and nice picture of the ant as it related to your writing. Loved the background bright green color. The color of nature.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Nice haiku and nice picture of the ant as it related to your writing. Loved the background bright green color. The color of nature.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Yes, I love green too. Thanks so much.h
Comment from artisart4u
This is a funny haiku, when I first saw the candy, I thought of M and M's.
It is something to see them carrying food around.
This would be a nice haiku to put in a magazine.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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This is a funny haiku, when I first saw the candy, I thought of M and M's.
It is something to see them carrying food around.
This would be a nice haiku to put in a magazine.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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You made me smile...and I felt like your gift was just what I needed...Thank you so much....
Comment from Trybuck
ever have those days
when life's too big to handle
need a helping hand
I think he might need a little help with his load.. Well done with your entry, Buck
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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ever have those days
when life's too big to handle
need a helping hand
I think he might need a little help with his load.. Well done with your entry, Buck
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Isn't that the real truth? Thanks for the note. i'm glad you wrote.
Comment from Glasstruth
lol. love the picture. It's amazing on how much an ant can do, or carry. They're one of nature's wonders. Hope the ant enjoys the chocolate. Very clever. Les
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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lol. love the picture. It's amazing on how much an ant can do, or carry. They're one of nature's wonders. Hope the ant enjoys the chocolate. Very clever. Les
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hi Les...thanks for the great comments..thanks for writing.
Comment from thee-name
Interesting haiku. Reminds me of ants and picnics.
TRUDGING UP IN THE HILL
ANT CARRYING CHOCOLATE
FOUND IN MY KNAPSACK
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Interesting haiku. Reminds me of ants and picnics.
TRUDGING UP IN THE HILL
ANT CARRYING CHOCOLATE
FOUND IN MY KNAPSACK
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the kind words, thee-name
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Genya
What a lovely subject to choose for this Haiku- insects. There is so much you could have written about the ant, their colony, working together, helping and supporting each other... but no, you chose something completely different and as well as being very well written, it did put a smile on my face. The amount of times l have put my ruck sack down whilst having a short rest and then finding a stray ant inside my bag. I used to think they were hitching a ride to a better place, but now l know the real reason. They were after my chocolate. Good luck in the contest. Loved it. Genya
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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What a lovely subject to choose for this Haiku- insects. There is so much you could have written about the ant, their colony, working together, helping and supporting each other... but no, you chose something completely different and as well as being very well written, it did put a smile on my face. The amount of times l have put my ruck sack down whilst having a short rest and then finding a stray ant inside my bag. I used to think they were hitching a ride to a better place, but now l know the real reason. They were after my chocolate. Good luck in the contest. Loved it. Genya
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I enjoyed your note immensely...thank you for writing and for the kind words.