Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I love this Dean... I wish I had a six for it.....I love death feign my life cold and blank,,,,,.......well done my friend
God bless....................................................................

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014

I wish you had a six too, kiwijenny. No, no, just kidding! I'm just happy that you enjoyed reading it, that's enough of a reward for me, my friend.

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

I enjoyed the sail as well as the sound, but my reaction to your note is to state my definition of excellent poetry.

Excellent poetry paints a thousand pictures.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014

Thank you, Pyrrho, and you're absolutely correct, it does. I appreciate the very thoughtful review.

Comment from Taffspride

Excellent

A haunting poem with a compelling message methinks.

I enjoyed reading it aloud, particularly with the sound effects you have provided. However I did stumble over this line:
Tormenting vessel thou beckons me. Somehow the phrase 'thou beckons me' just does not sound right. you might consider

'tormenting vessel thou beckons to me' or 'who beckons to me'

other than that one little nit, it reads well.

Thanks for sharing.

Iechyd da

Ann

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014

Thank you for your thoughtful review and suggestions, Taffspride. I sincerely appreciate it.

reply by Taffspride on 01-Aug-2014

You are welcome. It is a great read.

Iechyd da

Ann

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from Lulube

Excellent

And like the flounder, we sink and swim.

Nice poetic old English type poem. ?Great imagery and just how in the hell do you get that picture behind the writing?
Good food for thought to ponder over.\

lulube

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

Comment from faragon

Excellent

Firstly, I love the artwork you chose...very eye catching! I love the poem itself, very Poeistic! (if that is a word!) It flows well, is easy to read, and breaks at the right spots. Good job!

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another great piece of writing from the author in this piece of writing. We do indeed flounder in despair every now and then. This poem is a great depiction of that feeling of desperation. Well done yet again.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Wow, Dean. The art work and audio roped me right in. You sure know how to put on a production. As long as he is in pain, he knows he is still alive, maybe even bleeding his pain.
I love the process of surrender being unveiled in the transition from dusk to dawn.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thank you very much for your thoughtful and complimentary review and interpretation, DALLAS. I sincerely appreciate it!

reply by DALLAS01 on 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from daeneam

Excellent

Two thumbs up! You're quite right and I am more than glad to find sensible people in this site who, one way or another, helps me regain my consciousness... Thank you for being one... God bless... c", Mae

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thank you very much, Mae. That is so kind of you to say, my friend. I really appreciate the thoughtful review!

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

What a fantastic metaphor, Dean. Life does have it tormenting times "dead meat on deck's plank"- creepy image.
Only you can turn a horror poem into a spiritual one that speaks of death as a long lost friend. Yet, a backward look, perhaps a regret, at leaving familiar but risky ground. As least that's what I see.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks, Shari, and you would be absolutely right. I'm very glad to get your opinion on this one. I was beginning to wonder if your were going to take a peek at it. I am certainly glad that you did!

Thanks so much for the review.

reply by Spitfire on 31-Jul-2014

I wanted to give it a six, but ran out.
Of course, I wouldn't miss you! Just have to pace myself. :-)

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

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I appreciate that!

Comment from DSchlosser

Exceptional

I love the artwork on this poem with the deep blues and mixture with orange. The poem was good, but how did the crew member die? Was it because there was no one at the helm? Black Orchids in some cultures are a good symbol for fertility.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014