Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

You have a very good imagination, Bev. A lot is happening in these chapters. There's no way anyone could fall asleep while reading this story. It keeps the reader wanting to read more.

April

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks for the compliment, April. I appreciate it! :) Bev

Comment from A Matter Of Words

Exceptional

This is first class writing, Bev. You do superb job of linking scenes and yet keeping us in suspense. The writing is clear, crisp and concise. Outstanding,

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thank you so very much, my friend. I really appreciate your encouragement and your generosity. You've really touched my heart. :) Bev

reply by A Matter Of Words on 03-Aug-2014

No need to thank me. It is by reading such excellent writing like this that we all learn how to craft our work better. You have my vote on this one.

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

How very kind and generous of you, Stephanie. xx Bev

Comment from olliebuster

Excellent

Terrific. This is what good novels are made of. The chapters are distinct, one set of events leading nicely into the other.The characters are few and not mingling. The story is set so that a follow up is easy to fit in. It has one wondering what twist comes next. A good read. Olliebuster

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Why, thank you so very much, Olliebuster. I love your name, by the way.

I'm honored by your kind and encouraging insights.

Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Wow! I am so impressed with your writing. You seem to have a great story going on here. I have not come across anything to change since I have not read any other chapters. This is a good contender in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Drew, thank you so much for this terrific review. I really appreciate your encouragement and support! Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Cin

Exceptional

Intriguing. The chapter builds suspense nicely. I like the touch of supernatural that intertwines the crime story. Looking forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you so very much, Cin. I appreciate the generous and encouraging review. :) Bev

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

Whoa! That is one powerful chapter, Bev. You mixed reality with the fantastic in the first scene and did it remarkably well.

I'm so happy you caught me early enough to give you the 6-er this deserves.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you so much, Jay. I am honored by your six stars and, especially, words of encouragement. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Exceptional

Bev, this is powerful writing and extremely engaging. I haven't been following the story, just dropped in to read something so I will follow more of the story and at least catch the ending. Great stuff, Giddy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Hi, Giddy. Thanks so much for stopping in to read the chapter. I really appreciate your wonderfully generous and encouraging review. Happy Fourth of July! :) Bev

Comment from Selina Stambi

Exceptional

Hello, my friend Bev,

I'm happy to add my six to the string you must have got by now!

What a breathless edge-of-the-seat piece this is!

Fabulous, my dear.

xxx

Sonali


hole's dimensions: 6x6x6 .. wondering if it would look better in words ... i.e. six by six by six (clever inference to the book of Revelation, btw!)

can see them," demanded a voice from ... commanded a voice ..? or ... suggest:

a voice from behind (commanded) him

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Hello dear Sonali. Thank you for this wonderfully gracious review! And I appreciate, as always, your editing suggestions. Thanks for your encouragement and support. Have a great weekend!

Love, Bev

Comment from RGstar

Exceptional

Once again, superb routines writing. One thing, Bev.
I don't know if it is American English, but I might have written " the shovel's blade" using a possessive s or if not, taking blade away all together. It just stuck out at me in reference to "shovel blade"

I like the sense of smell, in reference to Armani"

Your eerie scenes , though there was only really one in this chapter, leaves nothing to be desired - it gets me all the time. Terrific writing.

Well, Bev, another one out of the way.
Bravo. Sorry for the late response, have not been too well.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Hi, RG. I think you've made a very good suggestion, and I appreciate your consideration! As always, your generosity and support mean so much to me.

I hope you are feeling better.

Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from Victoria K

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading your chapter, and this comes as quite a surprise to me, since I usually avoid this subject matter. I am a self professed "scaredy cat" so I wasn't sure what to expect!

You grabbed my attention immediately, and I remained riveted until the last word.

One minor thing: "It's absence has me worried." doesn't need the possessive apostrophe.

Very well done; I may have to read the next one...

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Hi, Victoria. Thanks for the great review and for the sharp eye on that Spag. Correction coming up! Warmest regards, Bev