Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Dean,
Your pictures are to die for! I love the face made up of arms. The art goes well with your writing. I loved it! You go and get published. Just let everyone know on here so we can buy the book. :D

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2018

Comment from likeduhxbella

Excellent

This is my kind of poem. Loved it. The flow, the tension .. " sing to me its song of death caring not what I have left" my favorite part.. very dark and detailed. Awesome job!

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

I appreciate you digging this one up, dusting it off and having a crack at it, likeduhxbella.

Much obliged for the outstanding comments. :}

~Dean

Comment from DALLAS01

Exceptional

Crazy...wonderful rhyme and alliteration...creepy concept
Boiling, roiling, muscles toiling,

toiling in this fetid soil.

Roilig, a unique word choice. Where did you ever find the damnation animation?

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, DALLAS. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this raving rant, LOL.

That animation has been sitting on my photobucket library shelf for ages. I just never found the right occasion to use it before now.

Thanks again for you wonderful review and six stars. Both are greatly appreciated.

reply by DALLAS01 on 02-Jul-2014

:.)

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hello Dean,
Well, this is a alliteratively phrased gold mine, lol. You've got to watch those little, lapses lacking judgment... not a good place to tread... Whoowwaahhaahhahaa, cough, cough... u'hem. Excuse me...
I always like your piece's that wander down that creative path of horror. But, that last picture is truly disturbing! Nice work! Hope all is well in your neck of the woods, Bill

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

It's okay, Bill, I appreciate your asking. I hope the same for you.

Thanks for your far too kind review.

Comment from costellsgirl33

Exceptional

That image is quite disturbing but I think that's the point. I am a fan of Dexter and this reminds me of him. And Dexter is like my favorite show so that is a great thing. Perfectly put together and executed and this poor guy is tormented.......well done! Its like the mind of a serial killer but who doesn't want to be

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Exactly, costellsgirl33. I love the show Dexter as well, very entertaining series.

I really appreciate your review and generous rating.

reply by costellsgirl33 on 01-Jul-2014

You are very welcome Dean! I love Dexter, he's very entertaining indeed and the writing is awesome. You could so write for a show like that :)

Arnetta

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

I'd certainly be a lot wealthier than I am now, LOL.

reply by costellsgirl33 on 01-Jul-2014

Hahaha! :)

reply by costellsgirl33 on 01-Jul-2014

Hahaha! :)

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, Dean. I am amazed as usual at not only your writing, but the graphics used in your work. You had better be in the business of graphic design or something like that or you are wasting your time., my friend. Also, the horror is in big demand today. check the shelves at B & N.

I liked these lines in particular:

"Willing, killing, it's fulfilling,

fulfilling bouts of ecstasy;

while I watch you slowly bleed,

joyously, my demons feed.

Sorry I don't appear more often on here, but I truly am busy with the publishing thing. Bless you, my friend. Would love to meet you someday to BS about life in general. Bob

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

I would like that very much, Bob. I haven't fared too well on this site as of late. I think I may have worn out my welcome. But I appreciate, and always have, your support of what it is I try and do here. Perhaps you will invite me to your book signing when you have it. I'll do my damnedest to make it!

Thanks so much again, Bob. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this meandering mental breakdown, LOL...

with utmost respect

your friend

Dean~

reply by Mastery on 01-Jul-2014

You haven't worn out your welcome, Dean. I felt the same way. I joined in 2004 back when they were just starting out and I was a big contest wwinner for a long time...then...zap....nothing. You write to please yourself...remember that. Bob

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

I will, Bob. I'm tired of people telling me to write something "nice", something spiritual. That is not where my passions lie.

Thanks again, Bob.

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with boil/soil. Good internal rhyming. Good description and alliteration. Good complimentary photos followed by a thought provoking message.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thanks, RR. I truly appreciate you taking time out to read & review it for me.

Comment from Muffins

Excellent

The poem chronicles the fear, terror and demise of its narrator in brood strokes and chilling details. It explores this person's real horror of living a life void of empathy or compassion for his/herself or anyone else.

A joyful adventure into the dark side of the human psyche.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Is that what this was, Muffins? I'm truly happy that someone could finally clarify that for me.

Thanks so much for your kind review. Much obliged.

Comment from Treischel

Exceptional

The staccato rhyming is truly stunning in this supremely crafted poem with its evil emissions and gruesome graphics that conveys well the demented workings of an evil mind. An outstanding example of the horror genre. Bravo!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Hey, I ain't all that evil, Tom, LOL.

I really appreciate you reading between the lines a bit in this one. I've always said that you were a wise man.

Thanks again, my friend.

With respect,

Dean~

Comment from w.j.debi

Exceptional

For some reason as I was reading this poem it reminded me of one of my favorite story poems, Poe's "The Raven".
The cadence, the assonance and the repeating words come off as a wicked chant which builds tension and adds to the overall creepiness of the piece as it reaches out to steal a soul.
The horror master of the site triumphs again. Scream!

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thanks, Debbie, and that's probably because I emulated (as best I could) the cadence from that very poem.

I appreciate the review and fine rating.