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5/7/5 (Family of Trees)

Trees are alive.

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Comment from judester
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The wonderful beauty of trees. I love to lie under my trees in vermont and just watch the wind blowing through and the birds flitting around. Trees are wonderful to be near...just like family, cheers judester

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Thank you, judester, for reading and understanding. livelylinda
Comment from zanya
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Yes trees are our precious 'lungs' and aesthetically nourish our soul and spirit but we need to love them back 'need air water sun and touch'.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Now if I was being really picky, I might quibble with your statement that trees need 'touch', but you poem is so pretty and otherwise true that who can deny you th five stars.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
    Steve: have you not seen trees with branches which touch other trees, even grow intertwined with other tree branches? I'm sitting at my computer right now, looking out my second story window into trees and see them touching each other all over the place. And, humans are far better people when they learn how to touch each other warmly. Touche'!
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
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Hello there~
I really loved this little 5-7-5. Let me tell you that this is one of the best entries for this contest, for me at least~
Good Luck and God Bless~!

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much for your vote of confidence.
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
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Very good Haiku Very good turning line. You have a good understanding of this type of short poetry. Keep going this was good!

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
    Thanks so much!
Comment from Charlene0513
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Yes and a family that sticks together hopes to receive all the benefits that we as humans do to survive amongst the other matter of nature.
Charlene

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2014
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from Leineco
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trees and leaves alive
need air water sun and touch
just like family

I like the concept here, but truthfully, I had a problem with the wow touch :-( Trees in the wild grow healthy and hearty with never a touch being felt.
on the other hand -

trees and leaves alive
need air, sun and nourishment
just like family

(air to breathe and breathing space;
sun to shine a spotlight on them
and nourishment - water&food for trees;
love and encouragement in families)

But I did like the concept you were presenting :-)

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
    Leineco: excuse me, but I believe that you are wrong. Trees in a forest grow tall with long branches which overlap and touch each other. . .just like families touch each other. As I sit here at my computer, I look out my window and see every tree is touching at least one other tree. My poem stands as written. livelylinda
Comment from Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest

your syllable count spot on

yes we all need air, water, sun and touch to be nurtured even nature

cheers..smoothiecool

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
    Thanks for reading.
reply by Smoothiecool on 13-Jun-2014
    welcome..SC
Comment from adewpearl
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
good assonance in trees and leaves and consonance in leaves alive
I like the way you relate the needs of the tree to the way families depend on each other :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
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trees and leaves alive
need air water sun and touch
just like family

True indeed. Tender loving care is the staff of life in nature. A lesson to ne learned. well said and presented.

Regards:

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
    Thank you for reading.