Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from MM lives on :)
Well Miss Lady I can see why you won the contest for book of the month.. Wow girlie can you ever write in such an addictive fashion.. Thanks so very much for sharing and congrats on the win it was indeed well deserved ...
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
Well Miss Lady I can see why you won the contest for book of the month.. Wow girlie can you ever write in such an addictive fashion.. Thanks so very much for sharing and congrats on the win it was indeed well deserved ...
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Hi, Christopher. Thank you so much for taking time out to read the chapter! And your congratulations really warm my heart. It's great folks like you that keep me writing. :) Bev
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review. |
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Thank you for very much. I'm honored.
Comment from poetbear
Great flow and feeling.
Nice imagery. Reads well and makes sense.
Many points and ideas to ponder.
Would like to see more and find out what will happen next.
Beautiful work.
reply by the author on 07-May-2014
Great flow and feeling.
Nice imagery. Reads well and makes sense.
Many points and ideas to ponder.
Would like to see more and find out what will happen next.
Beautiful work.
Comment Written 07-May-2014
reply by the author on 07-May-2014
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Thank you so much, poetbear. I really much appreciate your generous and encouraging review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The ones suffering from the rich and famous get their revenge. I like the Indian involvement. They get justice without human involvement. Great work.
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
I love the story. The ones suffering from the rich and famous get their revenge. I like the Indian involvement. They get justice without human involvement. Great work.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you so much, nelliesellie. I appreciate your kind comments and generous rating. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Connie C
I've missed a couple of chapters lately, Bev, with our new grandchild arriving but at least wanted to read your most recent chapter. As usual, you have not disappointed me. The exchange between Danika and Jordan is excellent, and you had me fearing for Danika as she headed toward the parking garage. You often, as you do here, leave me wanting to read more and find out what happens next. Keep up the good work, my friend!
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
I've missed a couple of chapters lately, Bev, with our new grandchild arriving but at least wanted to read your most recent chapter. As usual, you have not disappointed me. The exchange between Danika and Jordan is excellent, and you had me fearing for Danika as she headed toward the parking garage. You often, as you do here, leave me wanting to read more and find out what happens next. Keep up the good work, my friend!
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Connie. I'm so glad you found the chapter enjoyable. These last few have been a bit more work for me. I've gone in a few directions and now I have to tie them altogether!
It'll be fun to see where this all takes me.
I can't wait to see more pictures of Jack. And you are so kind to read and review this latest chapter when you are in such a place of emotional bliss right now. Your generosity and support are so appreciated, my friend.
I've been traveling and have gotten behind myself. I'll be reviewing and trying to catch up tonight. I see you have a poem that I can't wait to read.
Love, Bev
Comment from RGstar
You have kept the element of suspense, horror and intrigue evenly balance in this chapter, Bev.
Good scene between Jordon and Danika that lead to her demise with the chilling appearance of the dog. The scene coinciding with Danika's death and her echoing heels was right out of the Stephen King drawer, a good piece of suspense leading up to the inevitable act.
Great write , Bev.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
You have kept the element of suspense, horror and intrigue evenly balance in this chapter, Bev.
Good scene between Jordon and Danika that lead to her demise with the chilling appearance of the dog. The scene coinciding with Danika's death and her echoing heels was right out of the Stephen King drawer, a good piece of suspense leading up to the inevitable act.
Great write , Bev.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, RG. I sure appreciate the encouragement and support. Always so good to hear from you! :0) Bev
Comment from Zue65
Along the Jericho Road is another long running novel here at FanStory and I thought I would miss to follow the chapters, for I have not been a faithful reviewer of this site. But I am glad, it's still available for public viewing. I am a bit surprised that it ended up with a serial killer touch when I thought the story would focus on the life of the priest. Anyway, thanks that this story is still here. God bless.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
Along the Jericho Road is another long running novel here at FanStory and I thought I would miss to follow the chapters, for I have not been a faithful reviewer of this site. But I am glad, it's still available for public viewing. I am a bit surprised that it ended up with a serial killer touch when I thought the story would focus on the life of the priest. Anyway, thanks that this story is still here. God bless.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Nassus. This story has elements of the supernatural, a priest in crisis whose faith is being tested to the limit, and aspects of another spirituality - that of the Native American Indians. Ultimately, my hope is to show that the Light will win against the dark. So, more than must another serial killer mystery, I hope.
Thanks for stopping by!
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from oliviastjames
Wow. I was blown away by this chapter. You are crazy talented! I'm kicking myself because I haven't gone back and read the previous chapters, but that's what I plan to do right now. I typically have some words of advice to help critique a piece, but I honestly just wanted to stop by and say this is fantastic. I can't wait to download this on Amazon when you're finished!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
Wow. I was blown away by this chapter. You are crazy talented! I'm kicking myself because I haven't gone back and read the previous chapters, but that's what I plan to do right now. I typically have some words of advice to help critique a piece, but I honestly just wanted to stop by and say this is fantastic. I can't wait to download this on Amazon when you're finished!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Olivias. I'm so very appreciative of your encouragement and support. You've definitely made my day!
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from JW
Sorry for taking so long to get around to reviewing this. I've been busy between the job and getting Hopeless Love published.
This chapter, not surprisingly, is well written. It definitely has some interesting twists in it and makes one want to hurry and see what's next.
Thanks for sharing it. JW
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
Sorry for taking so long to get around to reviewing this. I've been busy between the job and getting Hopeless Love published.
This chapter, not surprisingly, is well written. It definitely has some interesting twists in it and makes one want to hurry and see what's next.
Thanks for sharing it. JW
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Jonathon. When will Hopeless Love be launched?
Always good to hear from you! :0) Bev
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Hi Bev. The eBook version of Hopeless Love as of last Monday is available on Amazon.com for $2.99. Because of publishing difficulties and lack of customer support from CreateSpace, I recently decided to publish the paperback version via Lulu.com. Hopefully, the paperback version will be on the market in about three weeks at Amazon.com, BarnesandNoble.com and Lulu.com. JW
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Thanks for sharing, Jonathon. I may call on you for technical advice when I get to the point of looking at publishing. And good luck with your sales! Bev
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My pleasure and thanks. JW
Comment from bhogg
This was quite a chapter, action from start to finish, mystery and intrigue and enough of a hook to get your reader back. Well don. Bill
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
This was quite a chapter, action from start to finish, mystery and intrigue and enough of a hook to get your reader back. Well don. Bill
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Bill, thanks for taking time to read this chapter. I appreciate your encouragement and support! :0) Bev
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I'm sorry I've been away from FS for awhile. I've missed your great book. Perhaps I can buy it some day.
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Why, that's so gracious, Bill. Absolutely no apologies necessary. :0) Bev