Shall I compare thee...
A cooler version of Shakespeare's Sonnet 1845 total reviews
Comment from strandregs
Shall I compare you to shakespear
No but you certainly are shaking a sphere here.
Sadly you've captured the human conditcartoon situation formidably
Clearly . The king is naked.
And I don't mean Muhamed Ali.
Z.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Shall I compare you to shakespear
No but you certainly are shaking a sphere here.
Sadly you've captured the human conditcartoon situation formidably
Clearly . The king is naked.
And I don't mean Muhamed Ali.
Z.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Great review, Strandregs! Better than the poem in fact! Thanks very much for the six star rating!
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Welcome amigo
Comment from J. P. Egry
Fabulous! Shakespeare would have been either very proud of you or very jealous. Though this piece appears to be a parody of the original, it is more than that, because it is equally adeptly written. Yet there is levity in this satirical version, pulling forth opposite emotions that the reader can relish. And in the end, there is so much truth displayed in these words, that it could be appropriate for so many relationships that really do exist.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Fabulous! Shakespeare would have been either very proud of you or very jealous. Though this piece appears to be a parody of the original, it is more than that, because it is equally adeptly written. Yet there is levity in this satirical version, pulling forth opposite emotions that the reader can relish. And in the end, there is so much truth displayed in these words, that it could be appropriate for so many relationships that really do exist.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this most flattering review, JP, and for the six stars! I haven't been compared favourably to dear old William S. before! I feel sure that he'd have brought his right up-to-date if he was still around. His writing was so much steeped in the realities he saw around him.
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You're welcome. My pleasure. I'm sure you're right about Shakespeare. As well as Mozart who would have been a rock musician, and Bach who would have been a jazz musician. JP
Comment from ravenblack
This is more than definitely the flip side to Shakespeare's " Shall I compare thee to a summer' s day. No bee stung lips here, but plenty of frostbste.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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This is more than definitely the flip side to Shakespeare's " Shall I compare thee to a summer' s day. No bee stung lips here, but plenty of frostbste.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Ravenblack. Some of these ice maidens can be a bit of a tease!
Comment from djsaxon
Hi Tony. I dips me lid :) A very clever spin on Will's work. I still have so much trouble with this form, more often than not with the placement of the volta. I usually play safe :) In one of Sir Philip Sidney's sonnets, the volta is line 14! It does my old head in. Good work and good luck. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hi Tony. I dips me lid :) A very clever spin on Will's work. I still have so much trouble with this form, more often than not with the placement of the volta. I usually play safe :) In one of Sir Philip Sidney's sonnets, the volta is line 14! It does my old head in. Good work and good luck. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thanks DJ! It helps to play games with other people's work that already has a volta in place. Even so, I think I've moved it up a line accidentally.
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I so wasn't gonna mention that LOL, but hey, if it's OK for Sidney, then why not? DJ
Comment from Spitfire
One of my favorite sonnets. I waited until Sunday so I could give you a six. Autumn and winter replace spring and summer. Shakespeare's beautiful lady has been turned into a wanton woman. Methinks an STD will be her legacy. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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One of my favorite sonnets. I waited until Sunday so I could give you a six. Autumn and winter replace spring and summer. Shakespeare's beautiful lady has been turned into a wanton woman. Methinks an STD will be her legacy. :-)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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That's really nice of you, Spitfire! Much appreciated! I hadn't really intended to paint her as a harlot! Only her lascivious words that 'kiss the wind', having no substance, and her lightly made promises! She is what I think in common parlance is called a prick-teaser; probably a virgin, too! :-)
Comment from Marillion
This definitely deserves my first six of the week, Tony, and I think you have a contender here, my friend. One of my favorite Shakespearean topics, and a poetic conceit I came very close to writing about till I decided to write one simply about the sonnet itself. Great work, and an excellent couplet.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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This definitely deserves my first six of the week, Tony, and I think you have a contender here, my friend. One of my favorite Shakespearean topics, and a poetic conceit I came very close to writing about till I decided to write one simply about the sonnet itself. Great work, and an excellent couplet.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thanks, David! High praise indeed from such an accomplished sonneteer as yourself.
Comment from marycec
Absolutely sublime! I laughed at the first line and then as I read on I just had to admire your take on what must be Shakespeare's most well known sonnet..I loved 'small ghosts of falsehood grey against the moon' the rhyming of chameleon and vermillion was inspired.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Absolutely sublime! I laughed at the first line and then as I read on I just had to admire your take on what must be Shakespeare's most well known sonnet..I loved 'small ghosts of falsehood grey against the moon' the rhyming of chameleon and vermillion was inspired.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Mary, for this stellar review. I feel proud as a stag in the glen!
Comment from adewpearl
What a clever parody of this famous Shakespearean sonnet :-)
excellent meter and rhyme in excellent sonnet form
I LOVE the harlot words line
good turn in your third quatrain
this is just marvelous, my friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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What a clever parody of this famous Shakespearean sonnet :-)
excellent meter and rhyme in excellent sonnet form
I LOVE the harlot words line
good turn in your third quatrain
this is just marvelous, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Brooke. Your kind words mean a lot to me. Thank you, too, for the six stars!
Comment from Angel Blessings
Excellent example of a Sonnet poem . You did an exceptionally good job in this write. Flowed well. Excellent presentation. Good luck in the contest! Angel Blessings
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Excellent example of a Sonnet poem . You did an exceptionally good job in this write. Flowed well. Excellent presentation. Good luck in the contest! Angel Blessings
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your kind review, Angel Blessings, and for your good luck wishes.
Comment from emrpoems
I think if Shakespeare were alive he would be proud of you.
All the elements as in his poem have been preserved and I think this is an even more beautiful poem.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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I think if Shakespeare were alive he would be proud of you.
All the elements as in his poem have been preserved and I think this is an even more beautiful poem.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your kind review, EMR, and for your good luck wishes.