Fat Cat-(1-6-1)
I am very sure he is dreaming of a rat or two5 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Cats--one of my favorite subjects to write/read about. They are so funny. Image is adorable. Like your use of "cat," "rats," fat. A fun piece.
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Cats--one of my favorite subjects to write/read about. They are so funny. Image is adorable. Like your use of "cat," "rats," fat. A fun piece.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Orphan33
Oh how I love Cat poetry. Very well written and very cat-like clever. Good luck in the contest and in all of your writing quests.
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Oh how I love Cat poetry. Very well written and very cat-like clever. Good luck in the contest and in all of your writing quests.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you
Comment from twinklepoems
Hi, You only have two lines that rhyme and the contest instructions say you need to have three. If you change this let me know and I will re-rate. ep
Yep much better.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Hi, You only have two lines that rhyme and the contest instructions say you need to have three. If you change this let me know and I will re-rate. ep
Yep much better.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you
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Hi-I have changed the words. I now think it rhymes better.
Comment from GracieAnn
This Rhyme That 1-6-1 writing prompt entry may work if near rhymes are allowed. Nap and Cat are not pure but proximate rhyme. It is humorus and has the correct syllable count. Hope this works for the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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This Rhyme That 1-6-1 writing prompt entry may work if near rhymes are allowed. Nap and Cat are not pure but proximate rhyme. It is humorus and has the correct syllable count. Hope this works for the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you
Hi- Just to let you know I have decided to change the words. Maybe you would you like to re-read again? I think it rhymes better now. Thank you again for your review.
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LOL. It's great! It is certainly a winner. Nice adjustment. :0 GracieAnn
Comment from adewpearl
humorous pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count
I like the use of proximate rhyme with nap/cat fat
you create a scene that is both easy and fun to visualize
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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humorous pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count
I like the use of proximate rhyme with nap/cat fat
you create a scene that is both easy and fun to visualize
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you