Web of words
story with word prompt5 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The teacher was disappointed because he could not motivate his students. Boy did he get a surprise. He motivated this one just a little too much. I bet you he liked the real ending better than what he was thinking of. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
I love the story. The teacher was disappointed because he could not motivate his students. Boy did he get a surprise. He motivated this one just a little too much. I bet you he liked the real ending better than what he was thinking of. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks for this encouraging review zanya
Comment from mickbey
A lot of movement as far as thoughts, places and times in this story, a full range of images come out of this one, the set-up was good, and made the 'twist' at the end effective, nice work, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
A lot of movement as far as thoughts, places and times in this story, a full range of images come out of this one, the set-up was good, and made the 'twist' at the end effective, nice work, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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I am delighted with this review zanya
Comment from Sylvia Page
It was Grigson, the freshman from his class,
The story was good and contained all the given words and you used them well.
Best wishes
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
It was Grigson, the freshman from his class,
The story was good and contained all the given words and you used them well.
Best wishes
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks for engaging and for the critique zanya
Comment from boxergirl
Ha!Ha! Good job with your story using required words. You not only used the words but you developed a short plot line that kept me engaged all the way. 8-)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
Ha!Ha! Good job with your story using required words. You not only used the words but you developed a short plot line that kept me engaged all the way. 8-)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks for this encouraging review zanya
Comment from Nosha17
That was a most enjoyable story with good strong story line. You have made good use of language in your narrative and descriptions and your story flowed along well. As it is a contest entry, I found a few errors (I hope you don't mind me telling you)-in 2nd paragraph it should read 'fiancée '(feminine form) and in paragraph 5 it should read 'The World Tonight'-Faye
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
That was a most enjoyable story with good strong story line. You have made good use of language in your narrative and descriptions and your story flowed along well. As it is a contest entry, I found a few errors (I hope you don't mind me telling you)-in 2nd paragraph it should read 'fiancée '(feminine form) and in paragraph 5 it should read 'The World Tonight'-Faye
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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I am delighted with this review and the suggestions zanya