Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Dancers"A collection of free verse poems
92 total reviews
Comment from trimple
There is something about the way in which you write that really does stand out. The pitter patter of life runs along each of your poetic lines, bringing such warmth to the page as I read. Beautifully written and sincerely appreciated when read. Your daughter is indeed a wonderful photographer, capturing the essence of the moment in film, just like her father in words :)
Kindest regards
trimple
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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There is something about the way in which you write that really does stand out. The pitter patter of life runs along each of your poetic lines, bringing such warmth to the page as I read. Beautifully written and sincerely appreciated when read. Your daughter is indeed a wonderful photographer, capturing the essence of the moment in film, just like her father in words :)
Kindest regards
trimple
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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This is just about as downright heart-warming a review as anyone could ever hope to get! Six stars as well! I am walking on air. Must be careful not to trip over the dog.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I love the story in the poem, told without a strict pattern of any kind, yet you have achieved the rise and fall both in the words and in the 'story,' which gives it all a very natural feel and an easy read. Lots of clear images, Gillie
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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I love the story in the poem, told without a strict pattern of any kind, yet you have achieved the rise and fall both in the words and in the 'story,' which gives it all a very natural feel and an easy read. Lots of clear images, Gillie
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Gillie, for another lovely review and gift of six stars. Much appreciated!
Comment from boxergirl
I loved the poem you have constructed to match your daughter's photo. The rhythm from your line breaks works well for me and made it flow smoothly. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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I loved the poem you have constructed to match your daughter's photo. The rhythm from your line breaks works well for me and made it flow smoothly. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Boxergirl, for another lovely review. Much appreciated!
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed well. The author's words were filled with laughter and joyful fun! The poem is descriptive and creative. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read. Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem flowed well. The author's words were filled with laughter and joyful fun! The poem is descriptive and creative. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read. Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Harmony, for another lovely review. Much appreciated!
Comment from Kingsrookviii
The words and picture gel together and you did a fantastic job of using the photo to inspire this poem. You have great flow and construction. Also,the tone of joy from such simplicity and how it relates to divinity is interesting.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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The words and picture gel together and you did a fantastic job of using the photo to inspire this poem. You have great flow and construction. Also,the tone of joy from such simplicity and how it relates to divinity is interesting.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Kingsrookviii, for another much appreciated review.
Comment from LorraineK
A well penned poem. Loved your choice of words like, swirled, flutter, glided, so many word to portray dancing.Great picture for your illustration. LorraineK
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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A well penned poem. Loved your choice of words like, swirled, flutter, glided, so many word to portray dancing.Great picture for your illustration. LorraineK
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Lorraine, for another lovely review. Much appreciated!
Comment from Michael Sundaresan
The rhythm of this poem is sinuous and pleasing to the ear. The imagery of the three girls as one with their arms wrapped around one another, and the sighing through the trees are both strong. Children's playing is treated with a certain reverence in this poem.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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The rhythm of this poem is sinuous and pleasing to the ear. The imagery of the three girls as one with their arms wrapped around one another, and the sighing through the trees are both strong. Children's playing is treated with a certain reverence in this poem.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Michael, for a most supportive review and for your gift of six stars. Much appreciated!
Comment from Just2Write
I really liked the rhythm of this poem, that seemed to flutter with the dance of the girls. This write really reflects well the spirit of the girls and the eye of the artist who caught the picture.
I liked it exactly as written, and have no suggestions for improvement.
Rose.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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I really liked the rhythm of this poem, that seemed to flutter with the dance of the girls. This write really reflects well the spirit of the girls and the eye of the artist who caught the picture.
I liked it exactly as written, and have no suggestions for improvement.
Rose.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Rose, for a lovely review. Much appreciated!
Comment from persevere
What comes through clearly in this piece is the spontaneity of the dance in the dust and the heartfelt laughter taking the place of encores.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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What comes through clearly in this piece is the spontaneity of the dance in the dust and the heartfelt laughter taking the place of encores.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, Persevere, for a most supportive review. Much appreciated!
Comment from American Patriot
02/07/2014 Hello! I'm satisfied with this poem because there is rhyme, a whole bunch of rhythm, beat, flow, and capitalization. Please, watch for finalizing punctuation though. Personally, I enjoyed it and got a visualization of dust clouds at dancing feet. Congratulations on your fun-based poem! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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02/07/2014 Hello! I'm satisfied with this poem because there is rhyme, a whole bunch of rhythm, beat, flow, and capitalization. Please, watch for finalizing punctuation though. Personally, I enjoyed it and got a visualization of dust clouds at dancing feet. Congratulations on your fun-based poem! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much for your review Jason. I deliberately omitted punctuation in this one as mentioned in the author notes where I said "I hope the line breaks are a sufficient guide for the reader without any need for punctuation." Punctuation marks seemed to interrupt the rhythmic flow of the poem.