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'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from A Matter Of Words
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How could you look into those beady little eyes and think about dinner? With a recipe as simple as this....easily. Nicely written.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
    Funny, I love your review, isn't that chicken a hoot? BYW this is GOOD fried chicken. :-) Carolyn
reply by A Matter Of Words on 02-Feb-2014
    I will try this. Thanks and you are welcome.
Comment from Liilia
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Love this Haiku. It is not only a poem but a recipe, too. I always liked simple recipes, the kind I don't need to write down or have a bunch of measuring cups and spoons around. Hope the chicken didn't hear the part about the pan frying. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much Lillia, try this one, it is so easy. :-) Carolyn
Comment from nelliesellie
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I love the picture. The chicken looks like it is not too crazy about your recipe. I am pretty crazy about it. I love the buttermilk part. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
    Thanks , you might want to try this one, it is good. I let the chicken sit in salt water for a little while, drain and then put in the buttermilk. Isn't that picture a hoot? So glad you enjoyed. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Joy Graham
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That chicken picture is adorable! I love the expression :) That's a simple enough recipe and I'm impressed you fit it into a 5-7-5 syllable scheme. I know nothing about haiku except that there are lots of rules that people on this site love to point out.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
    Hi Joy, you are right about the pointing out of rules. LOL I'm glad you enjoyed the chicken recipe. Sort of 'domestic nature' I guess. Try it, it's easy. I let the chicken sit in salt water for a little while, drain and then sit in the buttermilk awhile. Hard to fit all that in, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Benny Beeharry
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Hi Carolyn
First thank you for the great encouragement. I thank you a thousand times.
As for the recipe, I am going to ask my wife to try it. She is a good cook.
I like it. Very much.
We are back from Tunisia. As I said I shall a few day getting the writings together. I shall let you know what happens.
Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
    I will be waiting to hear. Enjoy the chicken :-)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is cute., a recipe in a haiku, i would never be able to do that. a friend of mine's husband would always boil chicken and then deep fry it. i wish you the best of luck in the contest

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
    Thanks so much, I never had chicken boil-fried but I bet it would be tender. :-) Carolyn
Comment from The Death
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Hi,

I like the originality oh this one-- the thought of sharing a recipe.

However, it is not a haiku and the lower rating is due to the following points:

The first two lines have to be connected grammatically-- if you are framing the last line as 'kireji( as is the case here).

The syllable count is correct for a 5/7/5 poem, but it is a haiku contest.

I particularly like the last which is funny and the imagery is strong.

You should try to connect the first two lines grammatically so that it becomes a haiku. It will flow nicely then.

In general, one should not try to portray more than two images in a haiku--traditionally.

I wish you good luck in the contest.

Would be glad to re-rate if you edit it.

Best wishes,
Anupam



 Comment Written 18-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
    Thanks for the review and suggestions, as usual I appreciate your time and interest. :-) Carolyn
Comment from country ranch writer
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No fair you didn't share! Come back here girl. Hey, wait for me that is my favorite meal, I love my chicken and biscuits and gravy!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
    hahaha.. Funny, love your comments. Fried chicken (especially this way) is one of our favorite meals as well. You can put other seasoning in the flour also if you like. :-) Carolyn
reply by country ranch writer on 18-Jan-2014
    got to go buy me some chicken see what ya did by not sharing.
Comment from Sagnik Das
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Carolyn, I guess
you are hereby bound to bring
Frenchmen to their knees!!*


*A common British allusion (often employed sarcastically), quips the French for their self-aggrandised perception of being the world's finest chefs (so they fancy!)...

And presumably, this nonchalant dissertation suffices on my part today to coax that beaming smile of you (always my incentive!)-- and there! I have succeeded!! I can perceive you grinning! :D

'Delicious work', dearest friend! [will someone get me a fork?!!]... I might as well fancy a helping! :)





 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
    Yes indeed you made me smile my friend. Now all we need is the fork you mentioned, some sweet iced tea, or a good cup of coffee, and a fresh apple pie to finish the whole thing off. Wish you were here... bring your whole family to dinner, ok. LOL.. How is your weather, we had snow again today. But a fire in the fireplace makes everything cozy. Tell all hello, love :-) Carolyn
reply by Sagnik Das on 18-Jan-2014
    It is this unforeseen warmth & wholeheartedness that impels me to honor you all the more. If ever in this unworthy life, Providence allows, I will consider myself blessed to pay you a visit.

    Our weather has taken a turn for the better since Thursday & Winter is expected to dissipate much in subsequent weeks (so is what the Meteorological Association says)...
    But (ironically), you as well as I know what the Met predicts oft proves the other way round!

    We have never experienced snow in Calcutta (it being a temperate zone). The weather albeit cold, remains congenial all throughout. [No wonder His Majesty, (King George-VI, the Royal father of Elizabeth-II),was numb, on hearing of the British withdrawal from Calcutta (following the city's independence in 1947)... 250 years of British predominance -- (sigh).. shattered in a moment...
Comment from evrenios
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Charming Carolyn - Great recipe. Cute short haiu with a non-traditional theme. While it isn't poetic in the traditional sense of the haiku and doesn't deal with nature, I like the fact that it is unorthodox. I wish it had a bit more poetic sense, however. It reads like a recipe, and while that is its strength, it is also its weakness.

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
    The prompt said fried chicken, so I did. LOL I am with you, it is not your usual Haiku, but it is about nature so to speak. Thank you so much for your review. :-) Carolyn