Make Your Mark Upon Our World
ABC Poem P-X Nonet13 total reviews
Comment from MagKing
A good one with great words of insight. It's indeed a lovely piece. You did well. However, what did you mean by X? By that I mean "vie your dreams
With your
X"
Good luck
MagKing
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2014
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A good one with great words of insight. It's indeed a lovely piece. You did well. However, what did you mean by X? By that I mean "vie your dreams
With your
X"
Good luck
MagKing
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2014
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Those that are unable to read or write are told to make their mark. Their mark is and X. Glad you liked it. Thank you. Signing with an X dates back to the days of slavery. They were not taught to read or right and that is were the term "make your mark" came from.
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Thank you for sharing that
I never knew.
Thanks
MagKing
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel that one needs an education to make their mark in the world
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel that one needs an education to make their mark in the world
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Thank you. Got a few votes. Not bad. Appreciate the well wishes and review. Take care.
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welcome...SC
Comment from rouskin
Very well written poem with good flow and clear message
Question's answers require knowledge
Read the book?
Really well done Best of luck in your contest
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Very well written poem with good flow and clear message
Question's answers require knowledge
Read the book?
Really well done Best of luck in your contest
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much. Got a few votes. Not bad. Appreciate the review and well wishes.
Comment from tfawcus
I think you are right that education is the key to successful living in our society and that those who find themselves behind a locked door with no way in are going to try to kick it down in their frustration and anger.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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I think you are right that education is the key to successful living in our society and that those who find themselves behind a locked door with no way in are going to try to kick it down in their frustration and anger.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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An excellent point. Hard to blame them really. It seems to get worse every year. Thank you for the insights and review.
Comment from juliaSjames
Quite a complicated theme for the nonet format moreso since you've added an abc complement to the write.
Nevertheless, this is creative and attention-grabbing.
I like the force of the final message.
Great ending.
The voting booth awaits in more ways than one.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Quite a complicated theme for the nonet format moreso since you've added an abc complement to the write.
Nevertheless, this is creative and attention-grabbing.
I like the force of the final message.
Great ending.
The voting booth awaits in more ways than one.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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I enjoyed your clever observation quite a bit. Great review. I appreciate the acknowledgement for the difficulty involved. I liked the challenge. Thank you kindly.
Comment from nordicgirl
Awesome use of two diifficult forms. The most difficult letters in your ABC and a perfect nonet. A powerful message. I am in full agreement.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Awesome use of two diifficult forms. The most difficult letters in your ABC and a perfect nonet. A powerful message. I am in full agreement.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Most appreciated. It was a difficult write and I am pleased that you acknowledge that. Wonderful encouraging words. Thank you kindly.
Comment from Lylise
This is a solid entry into the nonet poem contest. All requirements have been met. This is well presented and I liked the content and flow of this. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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This is a solid entry into the nonet poem contest. All requirements have been met. This is well presented and I liked the content and flow of this. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Thank you, glad you liked it. mikey
Comment from adewpearl
Un/do/the/dark/past is 5 syllables instead of 4
all the other lines are in good syllable count for the nonet format
good alliteration in make your mark
good consonance of D sounds in undo the dark
good rhyme of mark/dark
I agree about education - far too many communities have slashed budgets to cut out things like after school programs and even subjects like music and art, or they have raised class sizes, which even impacts basic subjects.
It is very troubling.
Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Un/do/the/dark/past is 5 syllables instead of 4
all the other lines are in good syllable count for the nonet format
good alliteration in make your mark
good consonance of D sounds in undo the dark
good rhyme of mark/dark
I agree about education - far too many communities have slashed budgets to cut out things like after school programs and even subjects like music and art, or they have raised class sizes, which even impacts basic subjects.
It is very troubling.
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Oh dear. I punished my fingers with a ruler. Changed to "unweave my past". I can't believe I missed that. Thank you for catching it. Appreciate the detailed and helpful review. Thank you very much.
Comment from dragonpoet
I agree with you that knowledge is necessary to grow into a better society. There are sadly too few good school districts in the U.S.. Luckily my children are in one of them. I think maybe if have year round school like most developed countries that are ahead of us, we might catch up. We need to spend more money on education than on political campaigns.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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I agree with you that knowledge is necessary to grow into a better society. There are sadly too few good school districts in the U.S.. Luckily my children are in one of them. I think maybe if have year round school like most developed countries that are ahead of us, we might catch up. We need to spend more money on education than on political campaigns.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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You are totally on the money with your comments. It gets worse every year. Appreciate the encouragement. Thank you kindly.
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from Darkhorse555
loved the structure these words drew out Make your mark Undo the dark past.Vie for dreams with your X very beautifully crafted excellent piece
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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loved the structure these words drew out Make your mark Undo the dark past.Vie for dreams with your X very beautifully crafted excellent piece
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much. Most appreciated.