(Sedoka)-Birds
Migrating birds5 total reviews
Comment from Simple Reflection
You've met all of the criteria for a 5-7-7 sedoka poem, and it reads smoothly without rhyming. I like the common element in line two in both stanzas with the word /warm/ and /start/.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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You've met all of the criteria for a 5-7-7 sedoka poem, and it reads smoothly without rhyming. I like the common element in line two in both stanzas with the word /warm/ and /start/.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Comment from J.Byers
I loved the circular feel of this poem, with the first stanza describing the birds flying south to build their nests, and the second one depicting them returning north to start rebuilding their homes again. A wonderful choice of topic for this contest, and tackled well within the confines of the form. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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I loved the circular feel of this poem, with the first stanza describing the birds flying south to build their nests, and the second one depicting them returning north to start rebuilding their homes again. A wonderful choice of topic for this contest, and tackled well within the confines of the form. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this sedoka poem about the twice a year nests that the birds build, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this sedoka poem about the twice a year nests that the birds build, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Comment from Smoothiecool
line count and syllable count is all in place for this Sedoka poem.
your poem has great images where you can envisage the birds in flight.
Love the way you have incorporated the flow on of your lines and still keep it in line with the rules of the poem.
It also displays the constant migration of bird life with the change of season. you have captured it all.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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line count and syllable count is all in place for this Sedoka poem.
your poem has great images where you can envisage the birds in flight.
Love the way you have incorporated the flow on of your lines and still keep it in line with the rules of the poem.
It also displays the constant migration of bird life with the change of season. you have captured it all.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Comment from emrpoems
Birds fly in a flock,
leave their nests, migrate south, warm
weather they seek, build new nests.
Birds fly north, locate
their home, change of season, start
to re-build their nests again.
This sedoka poem consists of two unrhymed three-line stanzas, each with a syllable count of 5 - 7 - 7. Best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Birds fly in a flock,
leave their nests, migrate south, warm
weather they seek, build new nests.
Birds fly north, locate
their home, change of season, start
to re-build their nests again.
This sedoka poem consists of two unrhymed three-line stanzas, each with a syllable count of 5 - 7 - 7. Best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thank you